They Try to Box Me In
Rhyming Quatrains193 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
Those with imaginative minds fight boxes all the time. The older you get the better you are at it. this is a smooth rhyming poem declaring independence from restraints. Sawyer adds to the poem nicely.
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Those with imaginative minds fight boxes all the time. The older you get the better you are at it. this is a smooth rhyming poem declaring independence from restraints. Sawyer adds to the poem nicely.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from LYLE
Dear Brooke,
It is strange how this "boxing-in" tends to begin when we are so young and never stops. It is a cute child's poem, but a very serious adult writing. Minds were never made to have their thoughts confined, that is such a true statement, but why do so many allow such confinement? I hope Sawyer never allows artificial boundaries to stop the likes of him. Well written, as always!
Fondly, Lyle
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Dear Brooke,
It is strange how this "boxing-in" tends to begin when we are so young and never stops. It is a cute child's poem, but a very serious adult writing. Minds were never made to have their thoughts confined, that is such a true statement, but why do so many allow such confinement? I hope Sawyer never allows artificial boundaries to stop the likes of him. Well written, as always!
Fondly, Lyle
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Lyle - I think lots of people allow it to happen to themselves because they're beaten down as early as kindergarten with teachers who praise the kids who always color in the lines and scold kids who paint the grass blue. Brooke :-)
Comment from nancyjam
Boxes have always been the best toy ever.
I love this picture of Sawyer and I love the
message in your delightful poem.
Imagination is boundless! Nancy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Boxes have always been the best toy ever.
I love this picture of Sawyer and I love the
message in your delightful poem.
Imagination is boundless! Nancy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Nancy :-) Brooke
Comment from camaria
What a perfect picture to accompany your poem. Your message was simple, but elegant. Quite often we box ourselves in. It's nice to have the reminder that we should stretch out every now and then! Enjoyed the read. Nothing I would change.
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What a perfect picture to accompany your poem. Your message was simple, but elegant. Quite often we box ourselves in. It's nice to have the reminder that we should stretch out every now and then! Enjoyed the read. Nothing I would change.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
I loved this ...the mind cannot be confined......waves ....no boundaries exist ........I love this for the mind.....especially for our grand kids.....their minds can soar........yay. Tomorrow hopefully we will be holding a new baby girl...CANNOT WAIT
God bless
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I loved this ...the mind cannot be confined......waves ....no boundaries exist ........I love this for the mind.....especially for our grand kids.....their minds can soar........yay. Tomorrow hopefully we will be holding a new baby girl...CANNOT WAIT
God bless
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from fastdigits
Another one of your rich and as
always, poetic forays into commentary
on life that rolls effortlessly down the
screen, and then the crown jewell,
your last stanza "if waves can stretch
for miles upon an endless sea, no boundaries exist
to stop the likes of me.
Beautifully constructed in artistic and poetic
fashion
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Another one of your rich and as
always, poetic forays into commentary
on life that rolls effortlessly down the
screen, and then the crown jewell,
your last stanza "if waves can stretch
for miles upon an endless sea, no boundaries exist
to stop the likes of me.
Beautifully constructed in artistic and poetic
fashion
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from rama devi
Cute pic! I remember making those box structures as a kid. Boxes are good for sleighing down grassy hills as well...
Some try to box me in,
but I refuse to stay --
I'll never see the point
in living life that way.
SMART BOY! Good metaphor.
Imagination knows
no boundaries or walls.
It follows no commands
except when freedom calls.
Love that stanza--well voiced...only following the command of freedoms. Brilliant.
A box cannot contain
what lives within a mind,
for minds were never made
to have their thoughts confined.
Good slant rhymes!
If waves can stretch for miles
upon an endless sea,
no boundaries exist
to stop the likes of me.
Nice closing.
Good alliteration on L, F, M, C and E
Sweet poem with an *expansive* message and good flow.
Warmly, d
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Cute pic! I remember making those box structures as a kid. Boxes are good for sleighing down grassy hills as well...
Some try to box me in,
but I refuse to stay --
I'll never see the point
in living life that way.
SMART BOY! Good metaphor.
Imagination knows
no boundaries or walls.
It follows no commands
except when freedom calls.
Love that stanza--well voiced...only following the command of freedoms. Brilliant.
A box cannot contain
what lives within a mind,
for minds were never made
to have their thoughts confined.
Good slant rhymes!
If waves can stretch for miles
upon an endless sea,
no boundaries exist
to stop the likes of me.
Nice closing.
Good alliteration on L, F, M, C and E
Sweet poem with an *expansive* message and good flow.
Warmly, d
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much, rama devi, for your most thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from nomi338
Old Sawyer looks like he is having a whale of a time as he looks out upon the world from his trusty box. I love the sound and rhythm of this bouncy free flowing poem. It would appear to me to be another poetic gem. Great job.
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Old Sawyer looks like he is having a whale of a time as he looks out upon the world from his trusty box. I love the sound and rhythm of this bouncy free flowing poem. It would appear to me to be another poetic gem. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from krys123
Hi Brooke, I found your phone to be very illuminative, enriching and dignifying To the point where you explain the picture very well in terms of your imagination and ideas in which nothing can hold them back. Such a cute picture of sorrier and the boxes when I was young I still love to play in boxes also. A very creative piece Brooke, as always your poetry is definitely masterful. Thank you for posting and sharing in May the Lord be with you always.
Alex
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Hi Brooke, I found your phone to be very illuminative, enriching and dignifying To the point where you explain the picture very well in terms of your imagination and ideas in which nothing can hold them back. Such a cute picture of sorrier and the boxes when I was young I still love to play in boxes also. A very creative piece Brooke, as always your poetry is definitely masterful. Thank you for posting and sharing in May the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from L.L. Mccue
One of the best quatrains that I've read on the site so far. Strong rhymes grate rhythm, fantastic message. Yet simple and easy to understand. Well done. Enjoyed this very much, there is nothing that you could do to improve such a fine piece.
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One of the best quatrains that I've read on the site so far. Strong rhymes grate rhythm, fantastic message. Yet simple and easy to understand. Well done. Enjoyed this very much, there is nothing that you could do to improve such a fine piece.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
