They Try to Box Me In
Rhyming Quatrains193 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello adewpearl, Brooke, Your poem and its message is simply beautiful. Of special note:
A box cannot contain
what lives within a mind,
for minds were never made
to have their thoughts confined.
(And if man's mind was confined
there would never really be
a man on the moon.)
An inspirational poem to live by. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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Hello adewpearl, Brooke, Your poem and its message is simply beautiful. Of special note:
A box cannot contain
what lives within a mind,
for minds were never made
to have their thoughts confined.
(And if man's mind was confined
there would never really be
a man on the moon.)
An inspirational poem to live by. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
It's good to think outside the box and also get out of the box that is your comfort zone. Fun little poem with a great message. Cute Sawyer photo:)
teresa
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It's good to think outside the box and also get out of the box that is your comfort zone. Fun little poem with a great message. Cute Sawyer photo:)
teresa
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from rjuselius
boxes are very much adorned by children. they are so innotavive and surely the box a is safe haven.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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boxes are very much adorned by children. they are so innotavive and surely the box a is safe haven.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from judester
A simple poem with a message. So easy to conform and box our thoughts and passions,go with the flow of convention and popular opinion... No way, I am with you and love my 'unboxed' lifestyle. I love your style, cheers Judester
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A simple poem with a message. So easy to conform and box our thoughts and passions,go with the flow of convention and popular opinion... No way, I am with you and love my 'unboxed' lifestyle. I love your style, cheers Judester
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from Leineco
Do I discern a poet here,
commenting on the strictures of form,
reminding those who want to hear
only poems that fit expected structured norm
that sometimes what we want to do
just happens to fit laid-out rules
and other times we change the beat
or break-out other crafty tools
to shape and hone our work?
Or was it just a clever ploy
to metaphor-asize
Sawyer's brand new toy?
(LOL)
Very enjoyable poem :-)
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Do I discern a poet here,
commenting on the strictures of form,
reminding those who want to hear
only poems that fit expected structured norm
that sometimes what we want to do
just happens to fit laid-out rules
and other times we change the beat
or break-out other crafty tools
to shape and hone our work?
Or was it just a clever ploy
to metaphor-asize
Sawyer's brand new toy?
(LOL)
Very enjoyable poem :-)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Adorable, and a great time for male bonding. Good for Mommy
a day at the spar. We all need that special time. Sawyer is sure
growing. Smiles :)
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Adorable, and a great time for male bonding. Good for Mommy
a day at the spar. We all need that special time. Sawyer is sure
growing. Smiles :)
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Robin. Daddy knows how much time and energy Mommy spends caring for their son, so he has the good sense to facilitate a break for her from time to time :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming walls/calls. Good alliteration with living/life...cannot/contain...their/thoughts. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming walls/calls. Good alliteration with living/life...cannot/contain...their/thoughts. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Righteous Riter :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
Another delightful poem and another adorable picture of Sawyer. A great philosophy for raising a child. How far they can go if they believed they could. Perfect abcb rhyme and good use of alliteration with cannot contain.
Fun to read.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Another delightful poem and another adorable picture of Sawyer. A great philosophy for raising a child. How far they can go if they believed they could. Perfect abcb rhyme and good use of alliteration with cannot contain.
Fun to read.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Janet, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
Sounds like everyone had a delightful day! Give a kid a box and his imagination flies, what a delight to read. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Sounds like everyone had a delightful day! Give a kid a box and his imagination flies, what a delight to read. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Bina, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RYME4U
Very nicely written. The rhythm is bouncy and the message is so true. The "fort" is well constructed, too. The quatrain style is befitting and well presented. Great job!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Very nicely written. The rhythm is bouncy and the message is so true. The "fort" is well constructed, too. The quatrain style is befitting and well presented. Great job!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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RYME4U, thank you so much :-) Brooke
