Face Off
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Comment from Sylvia Page
A brother can easily remember a sister's mannerisms and those will definitely show through all the face lift. It will confuse Hamid for a while but once he sees her together with her father and Edward I dread to think what the outcome would be from all quarters.
Enjoyed this chapter. Being away I have all the sixes I want to give away and I think there's no one better than you to have one.
Cheers,
Sylvia
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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A brother can easily remember a sister's mannerisms and those will definitely show through all the face lift. It will confuse Hamid for a while but once he sees her together with her father and Edward I dread to think what the outcome would be from all quarters.
Enjoyed this chapter. Being away I have all the sixes I want to give away and I think there's no one better than you to have one.
Cheers,
Sylvia
Comment Written 03-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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Oh, look at that sixer! Thanks so much. And yes, while Ari might not recognize her, a brother would on so many levels. No, she'd better not meet with them anywhere.
I think they're going home.
Hugs and thanks,
Gayle
Comment from bookishfabler
The moon, undaunted, zipped beneath the clouds that floated over its face. It was a night to write home about.(lovely description)
The bones accompanied the meat like some kind of artistic tepee, standing tall and proud with their little ankle puffs raised in the air, and yet, totally superfluous to the meal. Succulent medallions of beef, beautifully arranged on the plate, nestled in a dab of sauce. They awaited the fork. Neither knife, nor hardly a tooth needed to enjoy these incredible, melt-in-your-mouth morsels
( you are making me so so hungry)
So sorry I missed a bunch of this. I just haven't had enough time to come here like I would like to do. I saw not a single nit and realized how much I enjoyed this book.
hugs Heidi
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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The moon, undaunted, zipped beneath the clouds that floated over its face. It was a night to write home about.(lovely description)
The bones accompanied the meat like some kind of artistic tepee, standing tall and proud with their little ankle puffs raised in the air, and yet, totally superfluous to the meal. Succulent medallions of beef, beautifully arranged on the plate, nestled in a dab of sauce. They awaited the fork. Neither knife, nor hardly a tooth needed to enjoy these incredible, melt-in-your-mouth morsels
( you are making me so so hungry)
So sorry I missed a bunch of this. I just haven't had enough time to come here like I would like to do. I saw not a single nit and realized how much I enjoyed this book.
hugs Heidi
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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Hello my sweet friend, and look at you, bearing sixes! Thank you so much.
Couldn't you just see that plate? Gosh, I miss catering.
Thanks so much and hope all is well with you and Joe,
Hugs,
Gayle
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I don't, I was just in the local library and I overheard this guy talking to Ruth, the librarian, about how two cooks quit today, and he hasn't off and he work 14 hours yesterday, bla, bla, bla. I said, I'm so glad I don't do the S%^& anymore.
Comment from lindalcreel
She has narrowly escaped her brother a couple of times now, but he won't be going home until he finds her and kills her. I hope Julia isn't stupid enough to meet with her father at Ella's. That's one face that her brother would recognize and then he would know that Hali was in fact in LA. Love where this is going.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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She has narrowly escaped her brother a couple of times now, but he won't be going home until he finds her and kills her. I hope Julia isn't stupid enough to meet with her father at Ella's. That's one face that her brother would recognize and then he would know that Hali was in fact in LA. Love where this is going.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Hi Linda, all this bumping into each other! We've gotta get this nailed down. It's like working with quick silver!
Thanks so much for the great comments,
Hugs,
Gayle
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My pleasure. I am determined to finish my story,but life always seems to get in the way. LOL
Comment from Writingfundimension
What a great chapter, Gayle. You kept me gripping the edges of my seat with the chance that Hamid might identify Hali/Julia. And you set the scene, as always, in such a way that I want to run out and get myself some food! Great attention to details and terrific action make this truly an exceptional chapter, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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What a great chapter, Gayle. You kept me gripping the edges of my seat with the chance that Hamid might identify Hali/Julia. And you set the scene, as always, in such a way that I want to run out and get myself some food! Great attention to details and terrific action make this truly an exceptional chapter, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Oh my, a great sixer! Thank you so much for the great comments. This one just came together. Now, we've got to stop meeting at restaurants and get some action going, lol.
Rex is getting dusty, just sitting on the shelf!
Again, Bev, thanks so much for everything.
Hugs,
Gayle
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You're very welcome, Gayle. xxx Bev
Comment from Norbanus
Close calls everywhere. It seems like a shame to let Hamid and his crew corrupt Ella's by eating there. Amy might have smelled a rat.
Sorry I was so long getting to this one. I've been busy rehabbing another old house. Some people never learn. :-)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Close calls everywhere. It seems like a shame to let Hamid and his crew corrupt Ella's by eating there. Amy might have smelled a rat.
Sorry I was so long getting to this one. I've been busy rehabbing another old house. Some people never learn. :-)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hey Freddie, like ships in the night. They're bound to collide soon!
Thanks for the great comments and take care with the rehabbing! Very fulfilling when it's done, though.
Hugs,
Annabelle
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Hamid would be quite perplexed, and I for one can't wait for the next time he hears Julia speak. I have a feeling of impending doom, and certainly some close calls for some of your characters. Great writing, Giddy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hamid would be quite perplexed, and I for one can't wait for the next time he hears Julia speak. I have a feeling of impending doom, and certainly some close calls for some of your characters. Great writing, Giddy
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hey Giddy, always so good to see you and thank you for the fine comments and rating.
Reality is about to set in here. Here we go!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from TervLass
Wow. A tremendous amount of story progression on a variety of levels is happening in this chapter!
Brad and Julia's dinner outing nicely reinforces Julia's background (heritage and medical both)to balance her calm demeanor after killing Ari. Hamid and Assad's entry to Ella's allows yet further clarification of cultural differences, albeit from the male pov, while heightening reader concern for Julia's discovery. That a lot of thought was given to chapter planning shows through your attention to detail. Including letting readers meander through a wonderful meal (diffusing the day's angst) before bumping eyes onto the new trio. Nicely done :-)
To close with Hamid and Assad dealing with confusion about Hali, who couldn't possibly speak, reveals they haven't discovered the clinic visit - yet.
Must add - Fun to read of the Poodle entry, too; a perfect foil.
Helen (TervLass)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Wow. A tremendous amount of story progression on a variety of levels is happening in this chapter!
Brad and Julia's dinner outing nicely reinforces Julia's background (heritage and medical both)to balance her calm demeanor after killing Ari. Hamid and Assad's entry to Ella's allows yet further clarification of cultural differences, albeit from the male pov, while heightening reader concern for Julia's discovery. That a lot of thought was given to chapter planning shows through your attention to detail. Including letting readers meander through a wonderful meal (diffusing the day's angst) before bumping eyes onto the new trio. Nicely done :-)
To close with Hamid and Assad dealing with confusion about Hali, who couldn't possibly speak, reveals they haven't discovered the clinic visit - yet.
Must add - Fun to read of the Poodle entry, too; a perfect foil.
Helen (TervLass)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hi Helen, well we packed this one full to the brim! Poor Rex! Talk about bored and underutilized. His time is coming, for sure.
Always so good to hear from you, my friend, and your take on how we're progressing. Glad you liked the poodles, lol. Gotta give some other breed a shot!
Hugs and big thanks,
Gayle
Comment from Ted T
Hi Gayle :)
Outstanding chapter, impeccable prose and description.
I'm tossing in a virtual "Sixer" to go with the real one just for good measure.
Your chapter ending couldn't be any better.
The following passage is a gem among others in the chapter:
They watched the night settle in and shivered lightly. He pulled her close and kissed her cheek. Only the most intrepid of stars insisted on peeking out of
the scudding clouds and making their presence known. The moon, undaunted, zipped beneath the clouds that floated over its face. It was a night to write home about.
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I'll have an order of that meal, wine and all.
You've obviously done some fine dining a time or two.
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I don't know what Ouzo is? Chances are, other readers don't know what the word/dish is either.
* * * *
Perfectly written, every paragraph.
Ted
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hi Gayle :)
Outstanding chapter, impeccable prose and description.
I'm tossing in a virtual "Sixer" to go with the real one just for good measure.
Your chapter ending couldn't be any better.
The following passage is a gem among others in the chapter:
They watched the night settle in and shivered lightly. He pulled her close and kissed her cheek. Only the most intrepid of stars insisted on peeking out of
the scudding clouds and making their presence known. The moon, undaunted, zipped beneath the clouds that floated over its face. It was a night to write home about.
* * * *
I'll have an order of that meal, wine and all.
You've obviously done some fine dining a time or two.
* * * *
I don't know what Ouzo is? Chances are, other readers don't know what the word/dish is either.
* * * *
Perfectly written, every paragraph.
Ted
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hey Ted, wow, a sixer! You saved one back just for me! Thanks.
Ouzo is a sweet, anise-flavored aperitif that Greece is known for. Very strong, lol. Jeff and I love to go out to eat and we're blessed with so much great dining nearby, we get to eat all kinds of unusual things.
thanks again for the great comments and for that sixer and a virtual! Whoopie!
Hugs,
Gayle
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I'll take your word for it, but I still don't know what 'Ouzo' is :)
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, your wonderful food descriptions always stir up my appetite and make me stop reading to go eat. Not that I need it. Thanks for another great chapter that keeps me tuned in, never knowing what to expect next. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Well, your wonderful food descriptions always stir up my appetite and make me stop reading to go eat. Not that I need it. Thanks for another great chapter that keeps me tuned in, never knowing what to expect next. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hey Ric, that's the one thing all my readers say - Gayle always makes me hungry!
Glad you liked this one, now I've got to get Rex something to do besides walk around town eating bones!
Hugs and thanks,
Gayle
Comment from Ritsal
Moving right along--I can just imagine Hamid's surprise when he finds out it was Hali..that should be fun.
I spotted just a couple of things you might want to look at:
update from (the)Cedar-Sinai hospital - Hospital
He'd first realized that [about her] back at the clinic - probably don't need wording because it follows with...those days when her face...
standard(-)sized poodles
poodles who knew just how gorgeous they were - really? And, have you checked my profile photo? I believe I could give them a run for their money! lol
Best wishes,
Rita
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Moving right along--I can just imagine Hamid's surprise when he finds out it was Hali..that should be fun.
I spotted just a couple of things you might want to look at:
update from (the)Cedar-Sinai hospital - Hospital
He'd first realized that [about her] back at the clinic - probably don't need wording because it follows with...those days when her face...
standard(-)sized poodles
poodles who knew just how gorgeous they were - really? And, have you checked my profile photo? I believe I could give them a run for their money! lol
Best wishes,
Rita
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Well, I did, indeed, which is why they're poodles!! Of course, they're super-sized so they could get in the way, lol.
Glad you're liking this one. I'm doing do much editing after submission, it's going to be a whole new book by the time it's published.
Thanks so much, Twinnie,
Hugs,
Gayle
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LOL - Are their names Victoria and Priscilla? That's Tori on my page. Cilla is her sister.
