I Wish I Were a Bumble Bee
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7162 total reviews
Comment from Kingsland
This poem has a soft levity about its thoughts. It also has a good commentary on life and the joy of living. This was a well written piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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This poem has a soft levity about its thoughts. It also has a good commentary on life and the joy of living. This was a well written piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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John, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Cedar
This is a wonderful spring poem. Once we see the bumble bees and butterflies, then everything must be in full bloom. AND, that means warm weather! It's cold and frosty here this morning. I really like the smooth easy flow of your words. They seem to have a bounce (or "spring") to them. Take care. Bill
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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This is a wonderful spring poem. Once we see the bumble bees and butterflies, then everything must be in full bloom. AND, that means warm weather! It's cold and frosty here this morning. I really like the smooth easy flow of your words. They seem to have a bounce (or "spring") to them. Take care. Bill
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Bill, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Great little poem, yes, the nectar of love and affection is probably the most valuable thing we can acquire - but, like the bumble bee we have to do our part for the other half in return.
Patrick
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Great little poem, yes, the nectar of love and affection is probably the most valuable thing we can acquire - but, like the bumble bee we have to do our part for the other half in return.
Patrick
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Patrick :-) Brooke
Comment from Janet Foor
But since I'm not a bumble bee,
I'll gather in the sweetness
wherever seeds of joy are sown
in fields of life's completeness.
A wonderful philosophy for life and conclusions to your delightful rhyming quatrains. Great picture and good alliteration with bumble bee.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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But since I'm not a bumble bee,
I'll gather in the sweetness
wherever seeds of joy are sown
in fields of life's completeness.
A wonderful philosophy for life and conclusions to your delightful rhyming quatrains. Great picture and good alliteration with bumble bee.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Janet, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your generous sixth star. Brooke
Comment from rouskin
I can completely relate to that :I'll gather in the sweetness wherever seeds of joy are sown in fields of life's completeness
Cause I'm almost a Drone:)
Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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I can completely relate to that :I'll gather in the sweetness wherever seeds of joy are sown in fields of life's completeness
Cause I'm almost a Drone:)
Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Rouskin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
A perfectly formatted, rhythmic quatrain whose rhyming pattern is consistent throughout and maintains a cohesive quality among the stanzas. The poem flows smoothly and the meter is solid exhibiting word choices that accentuate imagery allowing the reader to clearly envision the image of a happy bee gathering sweet pollen from a plethora of flowers. I love the line "awash in waves of succulence" it is rich in word choice and laden with imagery. Well written poem, consisting of an upbeat, positive tone enhanced by a fabulous photo showing nature at its finest! Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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A perfectly formatted, rhythmic quatrain whose rhyming pattern is consistent throughout and maintains a cohesive quality among the stanzas. The poem flows smoothly and the meter is solid exhibiting word choices that accentuate imagery allowing the reader to clearly envision the image of a happy bee gathering sweet pollen from a plethora of flowers. I love the line "awash in waves of succulence" it is rich in word choice and laden with imagery. Well written poem, consisting of an upbeat, positive tone enhanced by a fabulous photo showing nature at its finest! Well done!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Rainbows, thanks so much :-) Brooke
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As always your writing fills one with a positive outlook on life. You are quite welcome for the review! :-)
Comment from Lulube
I don't believe that Sawyer likes bumble bees. Does he tried to pick them up too? You'll have to tell him the little traights I mentioned about them. If you forgot I'll tell him through you. let me know
cute poem Wishing you were one of them with sweet imagery of your portrayals of their life.
and of course we are not usually what we wish we were.
lulube
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I don't believe that Sawyer likes bumble bees. Does he tried to pick them up too? You'll have to tell him the little traights I mentioned about them. If you forgot I'll tell him through you. let me know
cute poem Wishing you were one of them with sweet imagery of your portrayals of their life.
and of course we are not usually what we wish we were.
lulube
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I think he likes them more from children's books than actually trying to touch them. LOL The other day while his mom and I were conversing, he starting saying bumble bee for no apparent reason. :-) I assume he was thinking about one of his picture book characters. Thanks so much, Lulube :-) Brooke
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lol that's too funny maybe he likes the way his lips move with a little vibration in it. bumble bee kinda gives it a sound too.
lulube
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a lovely poem, Brooke, and your descriptive words as to why you want to be a bumble bee, are perfect. In fact, I want to be one now! A lovey poem for Sawyers book. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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This is a lovely poem, Brooke, and your descriptive words as to why you want to be a bumble bee, are perfect. In fact, I want to be one now! A lovey poem for Sawyers book. xsx sandra
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Sandra, thank you so very much for your thoughtful comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Lovely 'Wish'!
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Pleasant flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"But since I'm not a bumble bee,
I'll gather in the sweetness
wherever seeds of joy are sown
in fields of life's completeness."
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Lovely 'Wish'!
Simple as well as impressive wording.
Pleasant flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
The most striking lines are:
"But since I'm not a bumble bee,
I'll gather in the sweetness
wherever seeds of joy are sown
in fields of life's completeness."
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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RP, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bayberry
This is a poem sure to please a little boy fond of the bumble bees. It's an uplift to read, Brooke, especially the last verse. Blessings, Janet
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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This is a poem sure to please a little boy fond of the bumble bees. It's an uplift to read, Brooke, especially the last verse. Blessings, Janet
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Janet, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
