I Wish I Were a Bumble Bee
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7162 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
So much in so few words. It is a lighthearted poem and fitting for the newly begun Spring. A bees life seems simple enough but it a lot of work to be covered in sweetness each day of your life. If we could only match that.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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So much in so few words. It is a lighthearted poem and fitting for the newly begun Spring. A bees life seems simple enough but it a lot of work to be covered in sweetness each day of your life. If we could only match that.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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lancellot, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A great poem, Brooke. I'm glad Sawyer likes bumble bees. I stepped on one with bare feet at the pool when I was 4. I am still terrified of anything that stings. The first time I had a wasp in the house and I was home alone, I seriously considered checking into a hotel until someone could get rid of it for me. Enjoyable poem, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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A great poem, Brooke. I'm glad Sawyer likes bumble bees. I stepped on one with bare feet at the pool when I was 4. I am still terrified of anything that stings. The first time I had a wasp in the house and I was home alone, I seriously considered checking into a hotel until someone could get rid of it for me. Enjoyable poem, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
A beautiful flowing little delicacy for early Monday morning, as I've said before some of your poems have a nursery rhyme quality to them, your rhyme is wonderful and your meter would do a musician proud! Well done, Brooke, blessings, Roy.
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A beautiful flowing little delicacy for early Monday morning, as I've said before some of your poems have a nursery rhyme quality to them, your rhyme is wonderful and your meter would do a musician proud! Well done, Brooke, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from donaldcolson
Lovely, cheerful poem. However I have Type 2 diabetes and the thought of that much sweetness throws me into a panic. I wish I was a buble bee and then we could buzz around together. don
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Lovely, cheerful poem. However I have Type 2 diabetes and the thought of that much sweetness throws me into a panic. I wish I was a buble bee and then we could buzz around together. don
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Brooke,
I know you are ready for spring after that brutal winter. I just put my Hummingbird feeder out two days ago and I saw one today. Another joyful and optimistic poem.
Hugs,
Lou
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Hi Brooke,
I know you are ready for spring after that brutal winter. I just put my Hummingbird feeder out two days ago and I saw one today. Another joyful and optimistic poem.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from amahra
No job but finding perfumed pools
of sugar by the hour, [I really love this line, especially the words 'perfumed pools'] Your rhyming is always strong and realistic. But I don't know about Sawyer being a Bubble Bee, he's much too busy as is. Smile.
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No job but finding perfumed pools
of sugar by the hour, [I really love this line, especially the words 'perfumed pools'] Your rhyming is always strong and realistic. But I don't know about Sawyer being a Bubble Bee, he's much too busy as is. Smile.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from RYME4U
What a sweet message this poem has. The picture is great and the description are well done. The words flow smooth as honey
Your Bee poem gets an "A".
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What a sweet message this poem has. The picture is great and the description are well done. The words flow smooth as honey
Your Bee poem gets an "A".
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from juliaSjames
Gorgeous picture of a foraging bumble bee to illustrate your charming and meticulously rhymed poem.
"perfumed pools of sugar" is an exquisite description - inspired!
Beautiful metaphor to end the write with a soupcon of philosophical comment.
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Gorgeous picture of a foraging bumble bee to illustrate your charming and meticulously rhymed poem.
"perfumed pools of sugar" is an exquisite description - inspired!
Beautiful metaphor to end the write with a soupcon of philosophical comment.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from mountainwriter49
HI, Brooke
I apologize for missing so many of your posts. I'm in such a busy period I hardly have time to sleep much less read. :(
But I am glad I took time to read a bit today after work. I love this poem. It's whimsical, thoughtful and thought provoking. The ending stanza is perfect. And it goes without saying, your metre and rhyme are perfect.
Well done, my friend.
Ray
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HI, Brooke
I apologize for missing so many of your posts. I'm in such a busy period I hardly have time to sleep much less read. :(
But I am glad I took time to read a bit today after work. I love this poem. It's whimsical, thoughtful and thought provoking. The ending stanza is perfect. And it goes without saying, your metre and rhyme are perfect.
Well done, my friend.
Ray
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from tony bronk
I wish I were a Hummingbird; thanks for reminding me. I love the tiny wascals. I love this poem. It is fresh and alive. It goes very well with my day today. It neared 60 degrees, and church was very inspirational too. Plus, we are now getting ready to grill two New York Strips. Can my day get any better? I don't need to comment on your poem's mechanics... they're perfect. Have a wonderful day, and thanks for the pretty poem. Hi Sawyer! Tony
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I wish I were a Hummingbird; thanks for reminding me. I love the tiny wascals. I love this poem. It is fresh and alive. It goes very well with my day today. It neared 60 degrees, and church was very inspirational too. Plus, we are now getting ready to grill two New York Strips. Can my day get any better? I don't need to comment on your poem's mechanics... they're perfect. Have a wonderful day, and thanks for the pretty poem. Hi Sawyer! Tony
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
