I Wish I Were a Bumble Bee
rhyming quatrains in 8/7/8/7162 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
Here's another sweet and simple poem with a big and hearty message. Smooth thyme and meter giving us a playful "I wish, and a firm reminder that life holds the sweetness we desire.
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Here's another sweet and simple poem with a big and hearty message. Smooth thyme and meter giving us a playful "I wish, and a firm reminder that life holds the sweetness we desire.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from Pili Pubul
I always find so much pleasure reading your poems
and this one is not exception, beautiful thoughts
expressed with such optimism. Love the style and
I imagine Sawyer was not hurt by a bumble bee , is no fun... Pili
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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I always find so much pleasure reading your poems
and this one is not exception, beautiful thoughts
expressed with such optimism. Love the style and
I imagine Sawyer was not hurt by a bumble bee , is no fun... Pili
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Pili, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome. I won't be much in FS for three weeks, my daughter and granddaughters are visiting me from Scotland Big smile...
Comment from hifein
some of us are indeed able to gather in the sweetness and needn't be a bumblebee to do it. and some of us are able to gather in the sweetness and write about it too!!. enjoyed this. best to you, brooke. hi
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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some of us are indeed able to gather in the sweetness and needn't be a bumblebee to do it. and some of us are able to gather in the sweetness and write about it too!!. enjoyed this. best to you, brooke. hi
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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hi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Another good one, Brooke. Nice ABCB rhyme scheme and alliterations of bumble bee, perfumed pools,seeds/sown help to make it flow smoothly. Beautiful picture to compliment. 8-)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Another good one, Brooke. Nice ABCB rhyme scheme and alliterations of bumble bee, perfumed pools,seeds/sown help to make it flow smoothly. Beautiful picture to compliment. 8-)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
If only I was a bubble bee oh what fun that would seem, but instead I'll use its example and fill my basket with joy.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Dear Brooke,
If only I was a bubble bee oh what fun that would seem, but instead I'll use its example and fill my basket with joy.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Winslow, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Glasstruth
Is a bumble bee better off than us humans? Who knows. Yet, our existence is the some, in that we must live life to the fullest. A perfect spring poem!!!! Les
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Is a bumble bee better off than us humans? Who knows. Yet, our existence is the some, in that we must live life to the fullest. A perfect spring poem!!!! Les
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Poem flows nicely with good word choice of rhymes. More importantly to me is the feeling of this long winter about to finally end.
L.M.Mullins
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Poem flows nicely with good word choice of rhymes. More importantly to me is the feeling of this long winter about to finally end.
L.M.Mullins
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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L.M., thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ennahanid
Another piece that pulls this reader in by the very vibrant presentation (plus the fact it is one of yours sure doesn't hurt either LOL) As always such a pleasure to read you - Dinah
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Another piece that pulls this reader in by the very vibrant presentation (plus the fact it is one of yours sure doesn't hurt either LOL) As always such a pleasure to read you - Dinah
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Dinah, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
Brooke, how magnificently you write your rhythm that flow so smoothly throughout your poem is though it was written by an Angel who uses one of her own feathers as a quill pen. Fascinated by your creativity, resourcefulness and inventiveness. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Brooke, how magnificently you write your rhythm that flow so smoothly throughout your poem is though it was written by an Angel who uses one of her own feathers as a quill pen. Fascinated by your creativity, resourcefulness and inventiveness. Thank you so much for sharing and posting your work for everyone and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Alex, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Brooke, you are so entirely and sincerely welcome.
Alex
Comment from dmt1967
This is another great poem my friend I wish I was a bubble bee as well because of your poem lol which is a surprise as I am scared of them lol thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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This is another great poem my friend I wish I was a bubble bee as well because of your poem lol which is a surprise as I am scared of them lol thank you for sharing
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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dmt, thank you so much for your encouraging and generous review :-) Brooke
