Shepherd
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "My Shepherd"poems inspired by Psalm 23
28 total reviews
Comment from write hand blue
Your picture reflects beautifully the contents of the poem, with a harmonious light blue background..
The writing is a declaration of faith in the form of an eloquent Rispetto.
May your journeys be fruitful. Without disappointment.
:) mel.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Your picture reflects beautifully the contents of the poem, with a harmonious light blue background..
The writing is a declaration of faith in the form of an eloquent Rispetto.
May your journeys be fruitful. Without disappointment.
:) mel.
Comment Written 05-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful thoughts and gracious wishes, Mel. I appreciate it, and right back at you. Debi
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My pleasure... mel.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Beautifully written rispetto, and a lovely poetic proclamation of faith. Pretty impressive showing for your first time, I would think.
Your composition was very strong, and your presentation superbly done.
Good work!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Beautifully written rispetto, and a lovely poetic proclamation of faith. Pretty impressive showing for your first time, I would think.
Your composition was very strong, and your presentation superbly done.
Good work!
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Dean. I am just playing around with the new types of form poetry I'm learning about. I've always liked writing poetry, but had no idea there were so many formal structures out there.
I appreciate your gracious comments and encouragement. Thanks, Debi
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You are welcome, Debi, and I know the feeling. I had never really written poetry until I came to FanStory, only prose. I believe poetry helps you to become a better writer overall, more rounded. A better "story teller", if you will.
Comment from tony bronk
Yes. I remember the parable well, and you did a very good job of telling it in your own poetic version. I enjoyed the poem very much. Tony
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Yes. I remember the parable well, and you did a very good job of telling it in your own poetic version. I enjoyed the poem very much. Tony
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Tony. I am so happy you enjoyed this poem, especially since you are familiar with the story. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from michaelcahill
You put this just perfectly! Enough information to get it, but not too obvious. That made the revelation when it hit me so uplifting. I like to expand on stories of the Bible like you have here. You tell a little story about the lost soul, a kind of background to further amplify the meaning. This really made the story come alive. Well done, mikey
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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You put this just perfectly! Enough information to get it, but not too obvious. That made the revelation when it hit me so uplifting. I like to expand on stories of the Bible like you have here. You tell a little story about the lost soul, a kind of background to further amplify the meaning. This really made the story come alive. Well done, mikey
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Mikey. I am so pleased that you liked it! Thank you for the very kind comments and gracious stars. I appreciate your analysis and am so pleased that the story came alive for you. There couldn't be a nicer compliment. Thank you!
Comment from Selina Stambi
Oh, dear Debi,
How you've made the beautiful parable come to life so personally in this lovely poetic form.
You lifted my spirits and made them soar!
Hallelujah!
xxx
Love,
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Oh, dear Debi,
How you've made the beautiful parable come to life so personally in this lovely poetic form.
You lifted my spirits and made them soar!
Hallelujah!
xxx
Love,
Sonali :)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Oh, Sonali, thank you so much. This is a very gracious and encouraging review. I am so happy you liked the poem and it lifted your spirits. Bless you. Debi
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a lovely first Rispetto - very well done and made more understandable by your author notes - you were the lost sheep that Jesus left the other 99 in order to find you. Very good. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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This is a lovely first Rispetto - very well done and made more understandable by your author notes - you were the lost sheep that Jesus left the other 99 in order to find you. Very good. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the very generous remarks and stars, Dorothy. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from TAB_that's me
The rhyme and meter on your rispetto is very good. This is a great message to all the lost sheep. Very enjoyable read.
Teresa
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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The rhyme and meter on your rispetto is very good. This is a great message to all the lost sheep. Very enjoyable read.
Teresa
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Teresa. I appreciate the generous comments and stars. It is encouraging.
Comment from GracieAnn
w.j., this is a powerful Rispetto that is well done and would seem by its quality that it is not the first one that you have written. Very good first try. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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w.j., this is a powerful Rispetto that is well done and would seem by its quality that it is not the first one that you have written. Very good first try. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you, GracieAnn. I appreciate the encouragement. It is my first. Maybe I'll try another later on. I appreciate the gracious comments and generous stars. Debi
Comment from Spitfire
What a great story. Thanks for the notes, although I would have figured out the analogy anyway. This makes me think of the times we take the wrong road in our journey and the happiness of finding the way back.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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What a great story. Thanks for the notes, although I would have figured out the analogy anyway. This makes me think of the times we take the wrong road in our journey and the happiness of finding the way back.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great comments. I'm sure you would have figured it out. I didn't put notes originally, but a couple of people asked so I added them. I appreciate the insights about finding the road back.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abab and the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with be/me...so/go. Good alliteration with called/come...no/near...ninety/nine. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Good use of the abab and the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with be/me...so/go. Good alliteration with called/come...no/near...ninety/nine. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the detailed review. I always appreciate you analysis and comments.
