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A 5-7-5 Poem on ambitions
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Comment from
manicblue
This was nicely penned about elusive love. Being a 5/7/5 poem, the last line needs to be 5 syllables, not 7. If it's an entry, you can change this before the contest is judged.
Our dreams are stalling, = 5
I catch them before they drift, = 7
We can't fail in this thin life. = 7
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Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
Jesus...that just shows how spaced out I am all the time. I'll correct it. Thanks!!
Comment from
judester
Good haiku. Catch your dreams because they will fill up your thin life. This resonated with me because I am feeling my dreams are fading and my life is feeling thin. Perfect timing to shake up my life. I am going to gather my dreams today and fatten up my life, cheers Judester
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
Thanks for your kind words! I just realized there's a mistake because the last one is supposed to have 5 and not 7 syllables! Anyway, when you feel your bucket's empty you can start all over, there's nothing left to loose!
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