Run Toward Joy
a rispetto165 total reviews
Comment from hifein
again and again in a few rhyming words, you capture basic human truths. how often the fear of joy overrides the need for joy. your tender poetic touch is always well received by me. my best to you brooke, hi
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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again and again in a few rhyming words, you capture basic human truths. how often the fear of joy overrides the need for joy. your tender poetic touch is always well received by me. my best to you brooke, hi
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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hifein, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Debra White
Hi Brooke :)
I totally agree with the sentiment in your rispetto, which is wonderfully well written - nice alliteration in tender touch and good use of enjambment in stanza 1. It's sad when a tender touch is mistaken for a grasping clutch... I have been guilty of making that mistake in the past and have hurt the person reaching out to me by not appreciating the loving gesture :( I am more careful now...
I love the photograph... the sheer joy on Nora's face is priceless!
Kindest regards as always, Debra
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke :)
I totally agree with the sentiment in your rispetto, which is wonderfully well written - nice alliteration in tender touch and good use of enjambment in stanza 1. It's sad when a tender touch is mistaken for a grasping clutch... I have been guilty of making that mistake in the past and have hurt the person reaching out to me by not appreciating the loving gesture :( I am more careful now...
I love the photograph... the sheer joy on Nora's face is priceless!
Kindest regards as always, Debra
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Debra, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from the blue pixel
Before I review your rispetto Brooke, I want you to know that I only found it accidentally for, like quite a few others lately, I did NOR receive this in my inbox. Others have asked me if I received their new posts to which I answered no, and I have wondered why my review numbers are suddenly down and perhaps this is the reason. I wondered where you were so checked and found this poem. Tom has been notified but apparently, there was no satisfactory explanation of answer to what seems to be happening to who knows how many others. Anyway, down to business. To me, the Rispetto seems just perfect to express so many things and as always, you have given me some great wisdom here. We DO run run from many things when it seems so obvious that we are going the wrong way. I sensed paranoia in your second stanza or at the very least, suspicion, such a common human feeling yet so often, foundless. If we only had the sense to recognize love when it is offered to us as you so wisely say, we would all be saved a great deal of trouble. I will look at your port folio if I don't see a poem from you soon and I am wondering what it will take to make Tom listen to what seems to be happening to a lot of people. It effects our review numbers, potential six star ratings and of course our rankings. Even though yours is of course, safe, I thought that you should know that if I did not receive this post, then who knows how many others didn't and how long this problem may continue. Anyway, loved your rispetto my friend. xx Carol
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Before I review your rispetto Brooke, I want you to know that I only found it accidentally for, like quite a few others lately, I did NOR receive this in my inbox. Others have asked me if I received their new posts to which I answered no, and I have wondered why my review numbers are suddenly down and perhaps this is the reason. I wondered where you were so checked and found this poem. Tom has been notified but apparently, there was no satisfactory explanation of answer to what seems to be happening to who knows how many others. Anyway, down to business. To me, the Rispetto seems just perfect to express so many things and as always, you have given me some great wisdom here. We DO run run from many things when it seems so obvious that we are going the wrong way. I sensed paranoia in your second stanza or at the very least, suspicion, such a common human feeling yet so often, foundless. If we only had the sense to recognize love when it is offered to us as you so wisely say, we would all be saved a great deal of trouble. I will look at your port folio if I don't see a poem from you soon and I am wondering what it will take to make Tom listen to what seems to be happening to a lot of people. It effects our review numbers, potential six star ratings and of course our rankings. Even though yours is of course, safe, I thought that you should know that if I did not receive this post, then who knows how many others didn't and how long this problem may continue. Anyway, loved your rispetto my friend. xx Carol
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Carol, thank you for sharing that information with me. I received notification of your poem, so I have no idea what is going on. I appreciate your insightful review :-) Brooke
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Thank you Brooke. I'll let you know if I fail to receive another post from you. xx Carol
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thanks so much, Carol :-)
Comment from MagKing
I read a bit about your profile, and I must say, your piece is not far from what or how you described yourself and style to be.
What a lovely poem!
And you were right to have placed it on the commentary and philosophic category.
Thanks for sharing!
MagKing
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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I read a bit about your profile, and I must say, your piece is not far from what or how you described yourself and style to be.
What a lovely poem!
And you were right to have placed it on the commentary and philosophic category.
Thanks for sharing!
MagKing
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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MagKing, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Brooke: very uplifting and enthusiastic message here with lovely photo to deliver the right energy to endorse the message. Very well done and much enjoyed! Vance
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Dear Brooke: very uplifting and enthusiastic message here with lovely photo to deliver the right energy to endorse the message. Very well done and much enjoyed! Vance
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Vance, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I love this form for you. You seem to have a real sense of pace here and use the rhyming scheme to your advantage by turning it into a sprint in the second stanza. Perfect word choice all the way through. I can feel the tape break at the end as the goal is reached! Great piece. mikey
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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I love this form for you. You seem to have a real sense of pace here and use the rhyming scheme to your advantage by turning it into a sprint in the second stanza. Perfect word choice all the way through. I can feel the tape break at the end as the goal is reached! Great piece. mikey
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Mikey, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from JonnyRhymes
This is a , well-written poem with a true message about how people can be afraid to accept joy and love into their hearts, perhaps because the worry about subsequent pain, injury or loss. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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This is a , well-written poem with a true message about how people can be afraid to accept joy and love into their hearts, perhaps because the worry about subsequent pain, injury or loss. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Jonny :-) Brooke
Comment from DALLAS01
An interesting commentary on how we view love. I know some people who see it as a responsibility. then of course their are those afraid to trust it. Looks like Sawyer has virtual sister.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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An interesting commentary on how we view love. I know some people who see it as a responsibility. then of course their are those afraid to trust it. Looks like Sawyer has virtual sister.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Dallas, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke - sorry I got behind in my reviews.:) This is a delight to read though I haven't a clue on a rispetto - I don't really care. This has that light and fun feel to it and I was smiling as I read it. That is the greatest gift you share with me....
Thanks so much for a work that lifts the spirits.
Maureen
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Dear Brooke - sorry I got behind in my reviews.:) This is a delight to read though I haven't a clue on a rispetto - I don't really care. This has that light and fun feel to it and I was smiling as I read it. That is the greatest gift you share with me....
Thanks so much for a work that lifts the spirits.
Maureen
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Maureen :-) You've made my night. Brooke
Comment from Aplgwest
Hello, a joyful picture that is for sure. Some may think they are undeserving of happiness, or they have been tricked before. How interesting how the same action can be perceived so differently as "tender touch" or "grasping clutch." A thoughtful poem that encourages us to not to lose our childhood trust.
My only suggestion is on the 4th line of the first stanza. "as if it's a" does not easily flow. Perhaps, "away as if a great mistake."
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Hello, a joyful picture that is for sure. Some may think they are undeserving of happiness, or they have been tricked before. How interesting how the same action can be perceived so differently as "tender touch" or "grasping clutch." A thoughtful poem that encourages us to not to lose our childhood trust.
My only suggestion is on the 4th line of the first stanza. "as if it's a" does not easily flow. Perhaps, "away as if a great mistake."
Comment Written 27-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014
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Skylight, thank you for your thoughtful feedback. I will check out that line. Brooke
