Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

gorgeous pairing of photo and poem, which is in good 5/3/5 syllable count for the Lune
you create a lovely scene and I really like the imagery of the third line :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014

Thank you Brooke for your wonderful feedback :D
The photograph is from a recent break in the Scottish Borders - it's a place called Coldingham Bay. It's stunning!
Kindest regards, Debra :)

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Debra

We have these colourful little beach huts in one place (that I know) in Australia. They always look so amazing with their bright colours holding fast in a burst of sunlight. Your Lune has moved the reader in a different direction and have presented a picturesque image in the reflection of low tide. A fusion of image and poem. Great allit. in "shallow/sea". I really like the joy expressed by "~watercolour tide~". Very creative. Well done. Warm Hugs - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014

Hi Lovi :) Thank you for your wonderful feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed the little creative touch in my final line... I had fun doing that (and nobody else noticed... or at least they didn't comment if they did LOL!) Kindest regards as always, Debra :) xx

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

My experience with poetry is minimal. But, I am developing a taste for it. And a Lune Poem is interesting. To me, a 'Lune' has to do with contemplation. I certainly liked yours. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014

Hi Victor66, Thank you so much for your lovely feedback :) I appreciate it! Kindest regards, Debra

reply by victor 66 on 26-Mar-2014

You are welcome.

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the view of the huts reflected on the ocean front. It is symbols of peaceful life. The water is where life begins. Life is carefree and relaxed by the ocean. Great work.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Hi nelliesellie :) Thank you so much for your great feedback. I appreciate it! Kindest regards as always...:)

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a great lune poem for the writing prompt. You have followed all of the rules. Best of luck in the contest:)
~Teresa~

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thank you Teresa for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from Karen B.

Excellent

So descriptive. I'd be able to see this image even without the photo. Very nicely done, looks like a contest winner to me.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thank you Karen for your kind and encouraging review. I appreciate it :) Warmest regards...:)

Comment from daniela.albu

Excellent

This nice haiku resembles a well done watercolour. You suggested very poetically the reflection of beach huts in the calm sea. It should do very well in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and encouragement. Kindest regards...:)

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Nicely written lune which describes the picture or vice versa.

The reflection reminds me of an impressionist painting and that works well the the art reference in the last line.

Good luck in the contest.

Keep writing.

dragonoet

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thank you dragenpoet for your great feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Ah ha, very nice! Fantastic imagery to go along with a clever and perfectly constructed lune. Witty play on words, with "watercolour tide".

This one should be a very strong contender. I wish you the best of luck.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thank you Dean for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes. I appreciate both! Kindest regards...:)

reply by Dean Kuch on 25-Mar-2014

It was my pleasure.

Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

Nice lune with a great presentation, and I love the idea of reflection of life in the water. You done a very nice job of conveying a "snap shot" of life, and have added a layer of meaning

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thank you so much Val for your lovely feedback. Kindest regards as always...:)