senryu (a dirty slinky)
senryu16 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahaha! Oh yeah, if that thing is getting dirty, those floors need some attention I'd say! Hahahahaha! What a fun poem!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Hahahaha! Oh yeah, if that thing is getting dirty, those floors need some attention I'd say! Hahahahaha! What a fun poem!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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So glad you enjoyed this, Dawn. Thank you~Debbie
Comment from royowen
Great art work, and a really clever senryu. You've managed to write a good one here! It has a nice double meaning, nicely woven ambiguity! Well done, Debbie, my friend, blessings,Roy.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Great art work, and a really clever senryu. You've managed to write a good one here! It has a nice double meaning, nicely woven ambiguity! Well done, Debbie, my friend, blessings,Roy.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. Have a blessed evening~Debbie
Comment from mumsyone
a dirty slinky--
it must be time for
'spring cleaning'
Cute senryu, Debbie, but did you have to remind me about spring cleaning? Ha! I haven't seen a Slinky for a long time, but your senryu implies that it could be dirty just from lying around OR from slinking down the stairs and picking up a cobweb or two. Either way, it makes the reader think. Good job.
Hugs,
Lois
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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a dirty slinky--
it must be time for
'spring cleaning'
Cute senryu, Debbie, but did you have to remind me about spring cleaning? Ha! I haven't seen a Slinky for a long time, but your senryu implies that it could be dirty just from lying around OR from slinking down the stairs and picking up a cobweb or two. Either way, it makes the reader think. Good job.
Hugs,
Lois
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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I've been sorting and organizing a bit. I am fortunate to have a homemaker 3 hours a week. Thank you, my friend. Hugs~Debbie
Comment from Gungalo
a dirty slinky--
it must be time for
'spring cleaning'
LOL I really like this one Debbie. It's very creative and original. Bravo.
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a dirty slinky--
it must be time for
'spring cleaning'
LOL I really like this one Debbie. It's very creative and original. Bravo.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
Comment from DALLAS01
Oh my. haven't seen one of those for years. Love the bold bright art work. A nice senryu of varied syllable count as opposed to the 5-7-5 format.
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Oh my. haven't seen one of those for years. Love the bold bright art work. A nice senryu of varied syllable count as opposed to the 5-7-5 format.
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Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
a dirty slinky--
it must be time for
'spring cleaning'
LOL! Debbie, this is brilliant! Wish I had thought of it! Very clever... good enuf to win a contest...too bad there wasn't one for it. :)
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a dirty slinky--
it must be time for
'spring cleaning'
LOL! Debbie, this is brilliant! Wish I had thought of it! Very clever... good enuf to win a contest...too bad there wasn't one for it. :)
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Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
