Treasure is Transported
rhyming quatrains152 total reviews
Comment from GWinterwin
Another great one by you my friend, good word flow and rhyming, as you tell the story about transporting treasure. Nothing more precious than the deeds and actions of innocent children.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Another great one by you my friend, good word flow and rhyming, as you tell the story about transporting treasure. Nothing more precious than the deeds and actions of innocent children.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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GWinterwin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
Ah, that photo of the Cute Little One is just too precious. It is good that he has an appreciation for nature at such a young age. Another gem of a poem.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Ah, that photo of the Cute Little One is just too precious. It is good that he has an appreciation for nature at such a young age. Another gem of a poem.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sanku
As usual a perfectly crafted poem that is a harbinger of spring in your country.What fun it must be for kids to blow the dandelion seeds!The picture is lovely and Sawyer would definitely be the one to start the golden carpet.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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As usual a perfectly crafted poem that is a harbinger of spring in your country.What fun it must be for kids to blow the dandelion seeds!The picture is lovely and Sawyer would definitely be the one to start the golden carpet.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Sanku, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
Hmmm, has Sawyer been playing in my yard? lol :) This is adorable, Brooke! Thank you for sharing this beautiful little gem and spreading smiles... Happy spring!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Hmmm, has Sawyer been playing in my yard? lol :) This is adorable, Brooke! Thank you for sharing this beautiful little gem and spreading smiles... Happy spring!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Gypsy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from 24chas
This was a very heartwarming piece, Brooke. Love the imagery in this one and the flow as well. Great job and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This was a very heartwarming piece, Brooke. Love the imagery in this one and the flow as well. Great job and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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24chas, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Maria C.
Love the picture, Brooke and figured you would get around to writing a dandelion poem in regards to to Sawyer. Very clever second verse. Laying golden carpets... ah ha ha. I am thinking of my poor dad who would cringe when when blew seeds into the wind. He told us to take them down the street! Great mechanics as usual with rhyme and meter. Good alliteration with treasure/transported, and spreading/springtime.
Fun reading.
Blessings,
Maria
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Love the picture, Brooke and figured you would get around to writing a dandelion poem in regards to to Sawyer. Very clever second verse. Laying golden carpets... ah ha ha. I am thinking of my poor dad who would cringe when when blew seeds into the wind. He told us to take them down the street! Great mechanics as usual with rhyme and meter. Good alliteration with treasure/transported, and spreading/springtime.
Fun reading.
Blessings,
Maria
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Maria, thank you so much :-) My dad was at peace with the dandelions in our yard - we had lots of clover, dandelions, wild violets, buttercups...and he lay back in his hammock in the middle of the lawn and didn't seems to mind them all one bit :-) Brooke
Comment from EmberSnowcat
Yes bring on the springtime! I love your poetry. :) Whenever I am upset or down, I know I can just look on Fanstory, and find something you wrote to bring me back to smiles. Your rhyming is great, the flow perfect. Great work as usual!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Yes bring on the springtime! I love your poetry. :) Whenever I am upset or down, I know I can just look on Fanstory, and find something you wrote to bring me back to smiles. Your rhyming is great, the flow perfect. Great work as usual!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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EmberSnowcat, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from honeytree
I really love the art work and words here very much.
I am sure we all did this very often as children
It was so much fun. Sawyer is having a great time here
Annie
I have no six
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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I really love the art work and words here very much.
I am sure we all did this very often as children
It was so much fun. Sawyer is having a great time here
Annie
I have no six
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Annie, thank you so much, my friend :-) Brooke
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He is so cute your grandson.
Waiting for one of our boys to have a baby.
The other isn't married yet.
annie
Comment from barleygirl
The title & photo instantly made this a "must read" . . . & you did not disappoint. I'm reminded of how many fussy lawn keepers would be cringing to think of all those dandelion seeds spreading across their green carpets! But the sign of being truly in a childlike state of mind is not even thinking of it from that point of view. Your poems always reach the height of childlike wonder & playfulness. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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The title & photo instantly made this a "must read" . . . & you did not disappoint. I'm reminded of how many fussy lawn keepers would be cringing to think of all those dandelion seeds spreading across their green carpets! But the sign of being truly in a childlike state of mind is not even thinking of it from that point of view. Your poems always reach the height of childlike wonder & playfulness. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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barleygirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Yvon
Happy Spring! Nature has perhaps one of the greatest careers, cheers! I liked the poem. I must admit that I had to read it twice to grasp the full meaning.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Happy Spring! Nature has perhaps one of the greatest careers, cheers! I liked the poem. I must admit that I had to read it twice to grasp the full meaning.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Yvon, thank you so much :-) brooke
