Treasure is Transported
rhyming quatrains152 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
You must have channeled Emily Dickinson for this one. Perfect for springtime, and we do need some springtime cheer. Lovely thought about transporting treasure in dandelions. Laying a golden carpets really gives us a picture of the dandelions. Beautiful rhyming couplets, and it flows so smoothly. Great alliteration, too. I especially like treasure is transported. judi
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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You must have channeled Emily Dickinson for this one. Perfect for springtime, and we do need some springtime cheer. Lovely thought about transporting treasure in dandelions. Laying a golden carpets really gives us a picture of the dandelions. Beautiful rhyming couplets, and it flows so smoothly. Great alliteration, too. I especially like treasure is transported. judi
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Judi, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're so welcome. judi
Comment from Cajungirl
Well-written and very beautiful, Isn't it funny how a simple thing like blowing dandelions to the wind can be so special. How lucky or the parents and grandparents who share these very special moments with a child. Thanks for sharing. Sawyer is growing before our eyes.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Well-written and very beautiful, Isn't it funny how a simple thing like blowing dandelions to the wind can be so special. How lucky or the parents and grandparents who share these very special moments with a child. Thanks for sharing. Sawyer is growing before our eyes.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so very much for your encouraging and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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you are welcome
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Make sure he's making his wishes when he blows all the seeds to wherever they go. You always make a wish when you do it. Great job with this
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Make sure he's making his wishes when he blows all the seeds to wherever they go. You always make a wish when you do it. Great job with this
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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ExperiencingLiphe, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Lawson81
I quite enjoyed this poem.
This part:
Treasure is transported
in dandelion seeds --
gives a sense to the beauty the dandelion brings, the looming of the spring.
It has a very smooth flow, really beautiful.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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I quite enjoyed this poem.
This part:
Treasure is transported
in dandelion seeds --
gives a sense to the beauty the dandelion brings, the looming of the spring.
It has a very smooth flow, really beautiful.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Angel, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Opal H.
What an adorable poem! It beautifully combines your love of dandelions and Sawyer :D. Spreading springtime cheer is the indeed the greatest!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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What an adorable poem! It beautifully combines your love of dandelions and Sawyer :D. Spreading springtime cheer is the indeed the greatest!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Opal, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bill Schott
The quatrains make me wonder what this thing known as springtime could be. I have a faint memory of grass and the little golden weeds. Nice.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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The quatrains make me wonder what this thing known as springtime could be. I have a faint memory of grass and the little golden weeds. Nice.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Petriesan
a golden carpet of dandelions. . . .many would not like that. . .we have become so. . . .accustomed. . .to the unnatural grass we work on so much. and yet, they are so pretty, the spring flowers, when not on a lawn in a suburb. . . .
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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a golden carpet of dandelions. . . .many would not like that. . .we have become so. . . .accustomed. . .to the unnatural grass we work on so much. and yet, they are so pretty, the spring flowers, when not on a lawn in a suburb. . . .
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Petriesan, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke, as I read your well metered verse, I have to wonder if your writing this from memory, or with the good hopes of all snow-bound people everywhere, lol. I suppose Spring may also be thought of as a frame-of-mind, and expressed to others in a bright manner of attitude. So, are you getting a break in the weather, or any positive news of a break in the future? It can't last forever. Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke, as I read your well metered verse, I have to wonder if your writing this from memory, or with the good hopes of all snow-bound people everywhere, lol. I suppose Spring may also be thought of as a frame-of-mind, and expressed to others in a bright manner of attitude. So, are you getting a break in the weather, or any positive news of a break in the future? It can't last forever. Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) We had a few springlike days, but now we're back to normal with snow predicted for tomorrow. I'm convinced we've entered the next ice age :-) Brooke
Comment from Peter@Poole
What a lovely two stanza commentary on an activity children enjoy so much and their parents and/or grandparents savour again what they treasured as toddlers! I love the rhyme and meter, the alliteration and assonance. This is a poetic jewel. Peter
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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What a lovely two stanza commentary on an activity children enjoy so much and their parents and/or grandparents savour again what they treasured as toddlers! I love the rhyme and meter, the alliteration and assonance. This is a poetic jewel. Peter
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Peter, thank you so much, my generous friend :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
Another sweet write with this darling child, Sawyer. Oh to be so young. Nice write as always. Thank you for sharing this wonderful write with such a beautiful child.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Another sweet write with this darling child, Sawyer. Oh to be so young. Nice write as always. Thank you for sharing this wonderful write with such a beautiful child.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Angel Debbie, thank you so very much for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
