What's Your WQ?
Crown of Heroic Sonnets Please see notes60 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
I doubt my WQ hits anywhere close to Solomon's score, but I'm content with it, so that's (in itself) rather wise, wouldn't you say? (LOL)
Steve, this is brilliant. There's little else to say, since anything I'd add would be valueless to one so talented and able; the most I can do is give my honest feeling about your poem, and it's just that - brilliant (and entertaining)!
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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I doubt my WQ hits anywhere close to Solomon's score, but I'm content with it, so that's (in itself) rather wise, wouldn't you say? (LOL)
Steve, this is brilliant. There's little else to say, since anything I'd add would be valueless to one so talented and able; the most I can do is give my honest feeling about your poem, and it's just that - brilliant (and entertaining)!
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Dawn.
Being content with your lot may be the greatest wisdom of all, despite what some cockamamie test may tell you!
Steve
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*Smile*
You're welcome - always such a pleasure to read your work. :)
Comment from rama devi
Bravo. This is 'seriously hilarious'. What a fantastic idea for a crown of sonnets. Each main criteria of WQ becoming the title of a each sonnet section and finally summing it up with the WQ factor.. Well done...and so highly entertaining!
Did not calculate mine, because I skipped most of it and went right to other countries, LOL.
I've no degree, never married, no children, (or home or car!), and have not had a full time paying job ever.
I guess Western nuns in India who volunteer almost all of their time without pay have a low WQ. HEE HEE
NOTES
It's obvious that a ton of time and work went into this finely crafted work... with flawless meter, clever, creative rhyming and great compositional style. Lots of fine poetic devices (too any to list for such a long poem but them). (Now, say that last bit aloud ten times without twisting your tongue!) LOL--I know you know I noticed them! *wink wink*
But anyway, I'll mention a few, plus my favorite parts and some tiny typos:
Superb alliteration and consonance of F in the first lines:
To be as wise as Solomon so famed -
How do you reach a goal so far aloft?
To start, an education soundly framed,
For surely he is wise who's deeply quaffed
*
Now, certainly a language,(WHY THIS COMMA?) 'twould be best;
*
French Lit.(,) perhaps(,) and Bio., Physics too.
*
Philosophy's important, less won't do.
Consider a dash (optional)
Philosophy's important--less won't do.
Congrats for fitting Latin into iambics:
Per ardua ad astra, as they say,
*Consider a dash (optional)
Then study 'arder,(--)there's no other way.
Brilliant:
You merely have the tools for Wise Man's Bluff,
Sweet Wisdom's Grail is not so softly found.
Enjoyed this:
Go forth, young man, and travel. Cross the seas;
Immerse yourself in cultures not your own.
Try London, Athens, Delhi, if you please,
In Luxor gaze at monuments of stone.
A loin-cloth will suffice in Bangalore;---LOL--not for ladies, though!
Well said: (note one spag)
The outback where a corro humpy's home,
Holds lessons greater than the Jersey Shore.(,)
Where simple people eke out simple lives
Or bustling Wall Street's canyons lined with greed,---BRILLIANT LINE
Also brilliant (and superb alliteration on D as well):
The denizens of dumpsters, dens and dives
Extol the virtues of the Wise Guy creed.
Consider using hyphen on Wise-Guy (optional)
Great rhyme pair...adjunct and defunct.
Well voiced:
Sagacity's imbibed with boom and bust -
Insider trading just helps pass the time.
nice coining of the phrase, offshoot of Wall Street:
In Struggle Street just getting by is tough;
Good one--brilliant reference too (grist for the mill):
From water-cooler gossip you can learn
The ins and outs of human nature's maze.
There's tragedy and comedy in turn,
The grist that's ground in Arthur Miller plays.
Fantastic phrasing using WING as a verb:
A thousand lifetimes' smiles and groans and fears
May wing you on your way to being wise,
Love this:
To teach, to love, and yet be loved and taught.
Good couplet:
The voyage done, the metaphor's complete;
Great wisdom's gained where love and marriage meet.
Superb transitional lines from marriage to children. :)
Well voiced:
The pitter-patter pound of tiny feet
Interesting verb choice here:
inflict your genes
Superb alliteration and consonance of T:
Through teddies, tears and tantrums, joys and woes,
You nurture each dependent little wight;
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Then driving lessons, college, on it goes,(Consider a dash--optional)
Your hair grows silver with each sleepless night.
Insightful and apt:
Be angry, patient, loving, pay the fines;
Be parent, mentor, jailer, friend and priest.
*
Insanity's inherited(,) they say -
Clever twist:
You catch it from your children every day.
LOL-
"You're growing old, you're past it, Elvis Who?!"
LOL-
In any world that's fair they'd bow to you.
Well portrayed:
You wear the scars of battle: fading looks,
The greying temples, wrinkled brow and slouch.
You've heard more music, seen more films, read books,
Absorbed a lifetime's learning from the couch. (LOL)
What a combo:
With War and Peace and Archie Bunker's wit.
(all in the family...I'm old enough to remember that)
I'm glad Gandhi headed this list:
There's Gandhi, Stalin, Hitler, Eisenhower,
And Churchill, Mussolini and de Gaulle.
Well said:
The ones who know it all - when were they born?
Great:
You've seen what they've just heard of and you've worn
Bell-bottom trousers! Climb the sacred mount.
*
The evidence lies there(, or --) they must concede.
Clever closing, drawing your readers:
So check below, did you hit where you aimed,
To be as wise as Solomon so famed?
No sixes left, alas.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Bravo. This is 'seriously hilarious'. What a fantastic idea for a crown of sonnets. Each main criteria of WQ becoming the title of a each sonnet section and finally summing it up with the WQ factor.. Well done...and so highly entertaining!
Did not calculate mine, because I skipped most of it and went right to other countries, LOL.
I've no degree, never married, no children, (or home or car!), and have not had a full time paying job ever.
I guess Western nuns in India who volunteer almost all of their time without pay have a low WQ. HEE HEE
NOTES
It's obvious that a ton of time and work went into this finely crafted work... with flawless meter, clever, creative rhyming and great compositional style. Lots of fine poetic devices (too any to list for such a long poem but them). (Now, say that last bit aloud ten times without twisting your tongue!) LOL--I know you know I noticed them! *wink wink*
But anyway, I'll mention a few, plus my favorite parts and some tiny typos:
Superb alliteration and consonance of F in the first lines:
To be as wise as Solomon so famed -
How do you reach a goal so far aloft?
To start, an education soundly framed,
For surely he is wise who's deeply quaffed
*
Now, certainly a language,(WHY THIS COMMA?) 'twould be best;
*
French Lit.(,) perhaps(,) and Bio., Physics too.
*
Philosophy's important, less won't do.
Consider a dash (optional)
Philosophy's important--less won't do.
Congrats for fitting Latin into iambics:
Per ardua ad astra, as they say,
*Consider a dash (optional)
Then study 'arder,(--)there's no other way.
Brilliant:
You merely have the tools for Wise Man's Bluff,
Sweet Wisdom's Grail is not so softly found.
Enjoyed this:
Go forth, young man, and travel. Cross the seas;
Immerse yourself in cultures not your own.
Try London, Athens, Delhi, if you please,
In Luxor gaze at monuments of stone.
A loin-cloth will suffice in Bangalore;---LOL--not for ladies, though!
Well said: (note one spag)
The outback where a corro humpy's home,
Holds lessons greater than the Jersey Shore.(,)
Where simple people eke out simple lives
Or bustling Wall Street's canyons lined with greed,---BRILLIANT LINE
Also brilliant (and superb alliteration on D as well):
The denizens of dumpsters, dens and dives
Extol the virtues of the Wise Guy creed.
Consider using hyphen on Wise-Guy (optional)
Great rhyme pair...adjunct and defunct.
Well voiced:
Sagacity's imbibed with boom and bust -
Insider trading just helps pass the time.
nice coining of the phrase, offshoot of Wall Street:
In Struggle Street just getting by is tough;
Good one--brilliant reference too (grist for the mill):
From water-cooler gossip you can learn
The ins and outs of human nature's maze.
There's tragedy and comedy in turn,
The grist that's ground in Arthur Miller plays.
Fantastic phrasing using WING as a verb:
A thousand lifetimes' smiles and groans and fears
May wing you on your way to being wise,
Love this:
To teach, to love, and yet be loved and taught.
Good couplet:
The voyage done, the metaphor's complete;
Great wisdom's gained where love and marriage meet.
Superb transitional lines from marriage to children. :)
Well voiced:
The pitter-patter pound of tiny feet
Interesting verb choice here:
inflict your genes
Superb alliteration and consonance of T:
Through teddies, tears and tantrums, joys and woes,
You nurture each dependent little wight;
*
Then driving lessons, college, on it goes,(Consider a dash--optional)
Your hair grows silver with each sleepless night.
Insightful and apt:
Be angry, patient, loving, pay the fines;
Be parent, mentor, jailer, friend and priest.
*
Insanity's inherited(,) they say -
Clever twist:
You catch it from your children every day.
LOL-
"You're growing old, you're past it, Elvis Who?!"
LOL-
In any world that's fair they'd bow to you.
Well portrayed:
You wear the scars of battle: fading looks,
The greying temples, wrinkled brow and slouch.
You've heard more music, seen more films, read books,
Absorbed a lifetime's learning from the couch. (LOL)
What a combo:
With War and Peace and Archie Bunker's wit.
(all in the family...I'm old enough to remember that)
I'm glad Gandhi headed this list:
There's Gandhi, Stalin, Hitler, Eisenhower,
And Churchill, Mussolini and de Gaulle.
Well said:
The ones who know it all - when were they born?
Great:
You've seen what they've just heard of and you've worn
Bell-bottom trousers! Climb the sacred mount.
*
The evidence lies there(, or --) they must concede.
Clever closing, drawing your readers:
So check below, did you hit where you aimed,
To be as wise as Solomon so famed?
No sixes left, alas.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Rama
The insight into your life highlights the fatal flaw of such nonsensical 'Test'.
Unfortunately, a few reviewers took the test theory far too seriously, actually believing that I was sincerely advocating its use....
Thanks a million for such a thorough review and for taking the time to apply your eagle eye to the little things - much appreciated.
Steve
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He he he--thanks! Some people will believe anything in writing... :)
Comment from kiwijenny
Yy u r yy u b
U r yy 4me
That was in my autograph book years ago
Well done KiwiSteve....I love your kish standard ...
Well written and even better well played
God bless
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Yy u r yy u b
U r yy 4me
That was in my autograph book years ago
Well done KiwiSteve....I love your kish standard ...
Well written and even better well played
God bless
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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I remember that one, although I think the second line should be I C U R YY 4 me
Thanks for the fun review.
Steve
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U R right :o)
Comment from mountainwriter49
HI, STeven
You've penned an excellent Crown and I applaud your efforts and end product. The poem reads beautifully and its theme is well developed. I enjoyed the lighter side humor and wish you the very best in the contest.
Ray
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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HI, STeven
You've penned an excellent Crown and I applaud your efforts and end product. The poem reads beautifully and its theme is well developed. I enjoyed the lighter side humor and wish you the very best in the contest.
Ray
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Ray
I guess I'm just a subversive at heart - can't stand for anything being too serious.
Steve
Comment from DonandVicki
I took the test and I am afraid that I fell far short of where I wish I had. Nevertheless I enjoyed the essay and poetic verse. Don and Vicki
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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I took the test and I am afraid that I fell far short of where I wish I had. Nevertheless I enjoyed the essay and poetic verse. Don and Vicki
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Don.
I feel obliged to point out that the whole thing was a joke since a couple of people took it too literally...
Steve
Comment from lancellot
Well said, and you are very correct the development of true wisdom takes all these things and more. Not much I can judge this is beyond my capabilities. just one thing I noted:
Where simple people eke out simple lives
Or bustling Wall Street's canyons lined with greed,
- nice, but this part reeks of stereotyping.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Well said, and you are very correct the development of true wisdom takes all these things and more. Not much I can judge this is beyond my capabilities. just one thing I noted:
Where simple people eke out simple lives
Or bustling Wall Street's canyons lined with greed,
- nice, but this part reeks of stereotyping.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
I haven't read your poem yet, but I busted a gut laughing over your author notes :-)
solid rhymes in sonnet format with good use of the repeated/transition lines
nice use of iambic meter to maintain a steady cadence when read aloud
good touches of alliteration
what a witty and amusing crown of sonnets, something I don't say very often :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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I haven't read your poem yet, but I busted a gut laughing over your author notes :-)
solid rhymes in sonnet format with good use of the repeated/transition lines
nice use of iambic meter to maintain a steady cadence when read aloud
good touches of alliteration
what a witty and amusing crown of sonnets, something I don't say very often :-) Brooke
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Brooke.
I must be a subversive at heart - can't bear to see things taken too seriously!
Steve
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I knew this was going to be good because your stuff always is. And you wrote all this light-hearted (but brilliant) work in flawless iambic pentameter, with a few feminine rhymes for a bit of variety in rhythm, with flawless grammar and punctuation and adherence to the rules of the contest. Plus, you successfully lured me into taking the Wisdom Quotient quiz (I'm shamefully addicted to puzzles and quizzes). If anybody cares, my score was 335 - if only I had gone to college! Or if only I could count my PHT (putting hubby through), I might reach KISH plus.
Among the many clever phrases that amuse, I particularly like "How 'bout dem Knicks?" and "Be fruitful, multiply, inflict your genes on future generations; let them soar..."
I followed directions and hit the six button, but only because it was truly deserved. Best regards, Jeanie
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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I knew this was going to be good because your stuff always is. And you wrote all this light-hearted (but brilliant) work in flawless iambic pentameter, with a few feminine rhymes for a bit of variety in rhythm, with flawless grammar and punctuation and adherence to the rules of the contest. Plus, you successfully lured me into taking the Wisdom Quotient quiz (I'm shamefully addicted to puzzles and quizzes). If anybody cares, my score was 335 - if only I had gone to college! Or if only I could count my PHT (putting hubby through), I might reach KISH plus.
Among the many clever phrases that amuse, I particularly like "How 'bout dem Knicks?" and "Be fruitful, multiply, inflict your genes on future generations; let them soar..."
I followed directions and hit the six button, but only because it was truly deserved. Best regards, Jeanie
Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Jeanie.
Like you I love puzzles and quizzes, but I always take 'tests' such as this with a huge grain of salt. Even with all the clues, some people took this one too seriously.
I loved your 'Mother's Kitchen' piece - can't remember if I reviewed it, but I remember it made me hungry!
Best of luck in the booth!
Steve
Comment from Rondeno
Glorious, Steve - simply glorious! "Drink deep, o taste not the Pierian Spring!" I would say that your suite of Mock-heroics is sure to sweep the Oscars, but I fear many of our colleagues will fail to understand. Whatever the outcome, you have the satisfaction of having produced something which is impish, intricate, learned and damn funny. Well done!
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Glorious, Steve - simply glorious! "Drink deep, o taste not the Pierian Spring!" I would say that your suite of Mock-heroics is sure to sweep the Oscars, but I fear many of our colleagues will fail to understand. Whatever the outcome, you have the satisfaction of having produced something which is impish, intricate, learned and damn funny. Well done!
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Mike - high praise indeed.
I had fun, but I'm not expecting even a podium finish with this - not when I see the calibre of the opposition, beginning with your own wonderful crime passionel.
Steve
Comment from c_lucas
It's not how dumb you are, but hot smart others think you are. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an entertaining read.
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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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It's not how dumb you are, but hot smart others think you are. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an entertaining read.
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Charlie.
Yes, you can fool some of the people all of the time! That's what I try to do.
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve. Charlie
