There Is No Way To Calculate
rhyming tercets152 total reviews
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
I appreciate the simple and yet concise design of this entry. Your sentiment is logical and forthright, and would suggest that if everything seems to add up, you have a perfect match! It's funny how we judge potential partners, however, we look them over, crunch the numbers, good things against bad, and then decide if we want to "roll the dice"...which brings up gambling, which is always a sketchy way to enter a relationship, lol. Nice job with this prompt...Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Hello Brooke,
I appreciate the simple and yet concise design of this entry. Your sentiment is logical and forthright, and would suggest that if everything seems to add up, you have a perfect match! It's funny how we judge potential partners, however, we look them over, crunch the numbers, good things against bad, and then decide if we want to "roll the dice"...which brings up gambling, which is always a sketchy way to enter a relationship, lol. Nice job with this prompt...Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Bill, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from darknessgone
for feelings never hesitate,
and there's no need to calculate
a love that cannot be denied.
Loved it all but really loved the last three lines! You did an amazing job, it flowed wonderfully! Thanks for sharing! :)
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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for feelings never hesitate,
and there's no need to calculate
a love that cannot be denied.
Loved it all but really loved the last three lines! You did an amazing job, it flowed wonderfully! Thanks for sharing! :)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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darknessgone, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You're welcome again, lol! :)
Comment from TOMORAL
Sawyer is getting ready to computate (I made up that word)and calculate that machine, I can tell. Very excellent poetry with a style I now think I will try. I learn so much from you, poet.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Sawyer is getting ready to computate (I made up that word)and calculate that machine, I can tell. Very excellent poetry with a style I now think I will try. I learn so much from you, poet.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Tomoral :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
I love these rhyming tercets this love can certainly not be denied, from the proverbially winsome smile.
When numbers fail and words do too,
the only thing that's left to do
is let my instincts be my guide,
Well done. Mary
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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I love these rhyming tercets this love can certainly not be denied, from the proverbially winsome smile.
When numbers fail and words do too,
the only thing that's left to do
is let my instincts be my guide,
Well done. Mary
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Mary, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rondeno
Brooke, I swear that you could turn a photo of Sawyer rummaging in a dumpster into a charming and heart-warming poem. What a fertile brain you have!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Brooke, I swear that you could turn a photo of Sawyer rummaging in a dumpster into a charming and heart-warming poem. What a fertile brain you have!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2014
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Michael, thank you. Please let us pray my precious baby doesn't go rummaging in any dumpsters. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment from krys123
Brooke, I do particularly like the rhyming scheme and format which is very fluid and helps the rhythm flow smoothly throughout the poem. The shrines and neither forced, labored or strained. I like your and frames between a calculation and plane love which is done meticulously well. Very inventive and creative and it is also very illuminative. Thanks for sharing and posting your work and may you always find love work for you are.
Alex
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Brooke, I do particularly like the rhyming scheme and format which is very fluid and helps the rhythm flow smoothly throughout the poem. The shrines and neither forced, labored or strained. I like your and frames between a calculation and plane love which is done meticulously well. Very inventive and creative and it is also very illuminative. Thanks for sharing and posting your work and may you always find love work for you are.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke
I enjoyed this poem. How do you put a price tag on a baby's smile? You just can't. It's priceless. I am always trying to make little Alyssa smile for me. When she does, I feel like a million dollars. When she doesn't, I'm the poorest man in town.
"There is no way to calculate
nor words that can articulate
the power of your winsome smile."
I never give up. I'm right back at it, an old man talking silly stuff, coaxing a sparkle in her eyes.
"for feelings never hesitate,
and there's no need to calculate
a love that cannot be denied."
Nicely penned! Thanks for sharing. I'm sure you try to make little Sawyer smile too. Alyssa has just started cooing, baby talk. It's so fun to hear her!
(hugs)
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke
I enjoyed this poem. How do you put a price tag on a baby's smile? You just can't. It's priceless. I am always trying to make little Alyssa smile for me. When she does, I feel like a million dollars. When she doesn't, I'm the poorest man in town.
"There is no way to calculate
nor words that can articulate
the power of your winsome smile."
I never give up. I'm right back at it, an old man talking silly stuff, coaxing a sparkle in her eyes.
"for feelings never hesitate,
and there's no need to calculate
a love that cannot be denied."
Nicely penned! Thanks for sharing. I'm sure you try to make little Sawyer smile too. Alyssa has just started cooing, baby talk. It's so fun to hear her!
(hugs)
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Kimbob :-) I'm sure she would smile each and every time if she realized how much it means to her gramps :-)
When I talk to Miranda on the phone she puts it on speaker phone and tells me when Sawyer smiles when I talk to him, and especially when I sing to him. I do a mean rendition of The Bear Went over the Mountain that he's particularly fond of. LOL :-) Brooke
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When my oldest was young, back in 1977 & 1978, I'd take him with me to the dump. And we'd sing,
"to the dump, to the dump. to the dump-dump-dump
to the dump, to the dump, to the dump-dump-dump,
to the dump, to the dump, to the dump-dump-dump,
to the duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuump
to the dump-dump-dump!"
I'd hold that "duuuuuuuump" for the longest time, and he'd sing right along with, holding it too, and never knowing when I'd finish the song!
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now that song is going to be stuck in my head the rest of the damned day LOL :-)
Miranda just posted a 15 second facebook video in which Sawyer has the biggest smile on his face while he says Oh Geez Louise :-) Everyone is determined to make me laugh this afternoon :-)
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Laura bought Alyssa a Jolly Jumper today, and we set her up in it. Imagine, at just 3 months, she was moving her legs like she was trying to walk. She is coo-ing lately, like she is really talking... baby gibber-jabber. It's so funny! I'll bet you laughed over Sawyer too.
Comment from N.M Bernia
Another outstanding poem! One thing, though: on the line that runs 'When numbers fail and words do too, the only thing that's left to do' maybe take out the 'do' in the first line to avoid having the repeat. Just a thought.
Great work and another perfect picture :)
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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Another outstanding poem! One thing, though: on the line that runs 'When numbers fail and words do too, the only thing that's left to do' maybe take out the 'do' in the first line to avoid having the repeat. Just a thought.
Great work and another perfect picture :)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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N.M, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
Awe how sweet is this little guy. He sure has grown since I last reviewed any of your writings. This is a perfect write for little Sawyer and his calculating little mind. Hope you win the contest this is great .
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Awe how sweet is this little guy. He sure has grown since I last reviewed any of your writings. This is a perfect write for little Sawyer and his calculating little mind. Hope you win the contest this is great .
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Angel Debbie for your generous response to this poem. He keeps growing by leaps and bounds :-) Brooke
Comment from Starlit Ink
He looks like he's going to write a book, sitting there like that. This is a nice and original entry for the contest. I like the addition of a not-often used word of winsome to add to the originality. You speak of the power of a smile, and the power of love, with a good wrap-up that it can't be denied. Good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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He looks like he's going to write a book, sitting there like that. This is a nice and original entry for the contest. I like the addition of a not-often used word of winsome to add to the originality. You speak of the power of a smile, and the power of love, with a good wrap-up that it can't be denied. Good luck.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Starlit Ink, for your gracious review :-) Brooke
