There Is No Way To Calculate
rhyming tercets152 total reviews
Comment from RodG
That Sawyer does get around! I really like how you use tech to describe this winsome fellow: his smile, his love for others, and the overall effect he has on the Speaker.
Good rhymes throughout and a very even flow to your meter.
Nice use of semi-refrain "There is no way/need to calculate."
A clear message to those we love and who love us.
Rod
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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That Sawyer does get around! I really like how you use tech to describe this winsome fellow: his smile, his love for others, and the overall effect he has on the Speaker.
Good rhymes throughout and a very even flow to your meter.
Nice use of semi-refrain "There is no way/need to calculate."
A clear message to those we love and who love us.
Rod
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Rod - a visit to Daddy's office filled with Daddy's very expensive things is truly a treat :-) Brooke
Comment from Spitfire
Great picture inspired poem. Good choice of words with math metaphor: calculate, sum, numbers. A unique approach to a contest where entries are often trite.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Great picture inspired poem. Good choice of words with math metaphor: calculate, sum, numbers. A unique approach to a contest where entries are often trite.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Spitfire, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lancellot
Very good and very true. Numbers and words are usually creations of logic and reason. Those take time, but emotions are raw, primal and come from someplace that defies waiting or thinking. Nicely said.
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Very good and very true. Numbers and words are usually creations of logic and reason. Those take time, but emotions are raw, primal and come from someplace that defies waiting or thinking. Nicely said.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Your right there is no equation for love. I like the flow of your poem. Nice picture but I don't feel it does your poem justice. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Your right there is no equation for love. I like the flow of your poem. Nice picture but I don't feel it does your poem justice. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Linda, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Emeka13
I love the consistency in your aab rhyme scheme. The immense power / value of love is incalculable.
'for feelings never hesitate,
and there's no need to calculate
a love that cannot be denied' - like grandma's.
Well done.
Emeka
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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I love the consistency in your aab rhyme scheme. The immense power / value of love is incalculable.
'for feelings never hesitate,
and there's no need to calculate
a love that cannot be denied' - like grandma's.
Well done.
Emeka
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Emeka, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from SDTracyHarper
very enjoyable and use of direction is spot on. Your math here is, quite frankly, perfect. smooth delivery and a very simple Disney type ending. good job.
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very enjoyable and use of direction is spot on. Your math here is, quite frankly, perfect. smooth delivery and a very simple Disney type ending. good job.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from Lysa Schuler
This is a well written piece. I like the poem very much. The meter, and rhyming were perfect. I could find no flaws. Good writ.
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This is a well written piece. I like the poem very much. The meter, and rhyming were perfect. I could find no flaws. Good writ.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from Ben Colder
He would charm the horns off a Billy Goat. Great photo to brings to life a well worded poem. Blessings to you Grandmother. You too Sawyer.
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He would charm the horns off a Billy Goat. Great photo to brings to life a well worded poem. Blessings to you Grandmother. You too Sawyer.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from MagKing
Lovely indeed!
What a beautiful poem you've got here.
"For feelings never hesitate and there's no need to calculate love that cannot be denied"
Beautiful and splendid!
Good luck in the contest!
MagKing
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Lovely indeed!
What a beautiful poem you've got here.
"For feelings never hesitate and there's no need to calculate love that cannot be denied"
Beautiful and splendid!
Good luck in the contest!
MagKing
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
Comment from c_lucas
Sawyer looks right at home. (LOL) This is very well written and a good entry for the love poem contest. Your poem has good imagery. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Sawyer looks right at home. (LOL) This is very well written and a good entry for the love poem contest. Your poem has good imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Charlie, thank you so much, my friend :-)Brooke
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
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You're welcome, Brooke. Charlie
