senryu (high expectations)
to all those wonderful working women39 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Alvin was one-of-a-kind and his sense of humor informed a lot of his work. Thank you for sharing a satiric senryu in his honor and with a nod to working women. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Alvin was one-of-a-kind and his sense of humor informed a lot of his work. Thank you for sharing a satiric senryu in his honor and with a nod to working women. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for reading this work. I share your nod to working women. An honor.
Comment from Saucey
Exceptional write indeed, content on point, lol I had to laugh. Many men seem to think we still need to be grateful and obedient but they tend to get caught with their pants down every time. I guess one must do what they gotta do, the news reveals more men in that predicament, women not so much, she dropped her hemline and then move on and upwards, while he loses his high ranking job and his family. (Classic movie starring Barbara Stanwick really played they dropping hemline part well lol)
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Exceptional write indeed, content on point, lol I had to laugh. Many men seem to think we still need to be grateful and obedient but they tend to get caught with their pants down every time. I guess one must do what they gotta do, the news reveals more men in that predicament, women not so much, she dropped her hemline and then move on and upwards, while he loses his high ranking job and his family. (Classic movie starring Barbara Stanwick really played they dropping hemline part well lol)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much Saucey!
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent senryu form if I compress corporate into two syllables
I'm sure Alvin would get a great laugh at your satiric look at human nature in this witty play on words
love the idea of "high" expectations made literal as this woman figures out the way to advance for a woman in the business world is to grab the attention of upper echelon men who pay more attention to her legs than her brains :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Your poem is in excellent senryu form if I compress corporate into two syllables
I'm sure Alvin would get a great laugh at your satiric look at human nature in this witty play on words
love the idea of "high" expectations made literal as this woman figures out the way to advance for a woman in the business world is to grab the attention of upper echelon men who pay more attention to her legs than her brains :-) Brooke
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Bravo, so well said dear Brooke. I just love your phrase "men who put more attention to her legs than her brains!!!" Nooooo.
Comment from Glasstruth
Very real. Each line setups the next. The last line shows the ends justify the means. What's more important than how the job was obtained, is the performance of the worker afterwards. Well done! Les
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Very real. Each line setups the next. The last line shows the ends justify the means. What's more important than how the job was obtained, is the performance of the worker afterwards. Well done! Les
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much Les for following this work from line to line. Thank you.
Comment from skye
high expectations--
gazing at corporate's top floor
she raises hemline
This is very good. It follows the rules for senryu, with an excellent last line that is thoughtful and a little deep.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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high expectations--
gazing at corporate's top floor
she raises hemline
This is very good. It follows the rules for senryu, with an excellent last line that is thoughtful and a little deep.
Excellent.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for your high remarks to my work. It means a lot to me.
Comment from krys123
Amada, I do say so much with so few words is totally remarkable. You captured the reality of corporate upscaling and you pictured and portrayed the woman involved is being very lucid or transparent to the integrity of her lifestyle.
Thanks for sharing and posting and may you always find peace wherever you are.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Amada, I do say so much with so few words is totally remarkable. You captured the reality of corporate upscaling and you pictured and portrayed the woman involved is being very lucid or transparent to the integrity of her lifestyle.
Thanks for sharing and posting and may you always find peace wherever you are.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Alex, thank you so much for your support. And the blessings, especially the blessings.
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Amada, You are so sincerely and entirely welcome.
Comment from ravenblack
Great satire. Though equality in the workplace is declared mission accomplished, as far as the glass ceiling goes, we are still not there. Can't say that I complain about raising hemlines.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Great satire. Though equality in the workplace is declared mission accomplished, as far as the glass ceiling goes, we are still not there. Can't say that I complain about raising hemlines.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Ha, ha. I just love your understanding and sense of humor.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello amada, Very good. There are many ways to climb a corporate ladder, and poem gives us one of the oldest examples ... perhaps blackmail is older - lol. Great 5-7-5 format and humor, especially:
she raises hemline
(Hopefully, she has good "yams")
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Hello amada, Very good. There are many ways to climb a corporate ladder, and poem gives us one of the oldest examples ... perhaps blackmail is older - lol. Great 5-7-5 format and humor, especially:
she raises hemline
(Hopefully, she has good "yams")
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Thank you, thank you delightful LateBloomer. :-)
Comment from tfawcus
Delicious satire in this one, Amada. Sadly, despite all the push for gender equality these days, there is still some truth in what you say. Women have to be clever on many levels to succeed in this male-dominated environment.
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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Delicious satire in this one, Amada. Sadly, despite all the push for gender equality these days, there is still some truth in what you say. Women have to be clever on many levels to succeed in this male-dominated environment.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Oh yes, oh yes. Thank you so much for catching so well this satirical work.
