senryu (high expectations)
to all those wonderful working women39 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
She raises hemline........lol
Yep she is climbing the rungs one flirt at a time..............
Well written.....thanks for the laugh
God bless
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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She raises hemline........lol
Yep she is climbing the rungs one flirt at a time..............
Well written.....thanks for the laugh
God bless
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for reading and catching the fun of it.
Comment from LovnPeace
Love this. It is so clever. I've been gone too lone. I didn't know Alvin passed. May he R.I.P. He was a good contributor and person. I know he is missed by many. Blessings. Barbara
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Love this. It is so clever. I've been gone too lone. I didn't know Alvin passed. May he R.I.P. He was a good contributor and person. I know he is missed by many. Blessings. Barbara
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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So nice to hear from you. I wrote you a PM some time ago. Just wanted to know you are OK.
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Was in the hospital for a few days then back and forth to hospital 2x a day to 2 antibiotics pumped into a picc. Had a bad case of cellulitis. I had to postpone surgery and have decided not to have it now. the pain is manageable with a med for spasms. Just limits me somewhat. Been a rough yr for this old bod. LOL. Haven't felt very spiffy, but doing great now knock on wood. Thank you so much for caring and Bless you mightly my friend.
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Glad to hear you are storming the weather, very well, old bod! Same year, problems with my eyes...No able to read or write for six weeks...now I am ddoing better. Hugs!
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Bravo Thank Jesus. Much love :)
Comment from GWHARGIS
I suppose this still happens. LOL. I like the references to raising the sights to the hemline. Nice and clever. Great syllable count and strong word choice. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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I suppose this still happens. LOL. I like the references to raising the sights to the hemline. Nice and clever. Great syllable count and strong word choice. Great job.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting in my work.
Comment from Righteous Riter
high expectations
gazing at corporate's top floor
she raises hemline
This piece meets the criteria of the Senryu poem as the syllable count does not exceed 17 syllables. Good alliteration with high/hemline. Clear message that is short and simple.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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high expectations
gazing at corporate's top floor
she raises hemline
This piece meets the criteria of the Senryu poem as the syllable count does not exceed 17 syllables. Good alliteration with high/hemline. Clear message that is short and simple.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reading my work and the awesome comments.
Comment from nancyjam
Some girls will do anything to get ahead.
I love your clever Senryu and I'm sure Alvin
would as well.
Great word choice to convey theme.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Some girls will do anything to get ahead.
I love your clever Senryu and I'm sure Alvin
would as well.
Great word choice to convey theme.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you Nancy for reading this Senryu and for the best wishes.
Comment from Pili Pubul
LOL love it Amada. Good senryu to wake up too
laughing ... Few word Big story ... Truly very clever.
I am sure Alving must be laughing and proud. Hugs. Pili
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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LOL love it Amada. Good senryu to wake up too
laughing ... Few word Big story ... Truly very clever.
I am sure Alving must be laughing and proud. Hugs. Pili
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you Pili for laughing with my work. Mission accomplished.
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Definitely LOL
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah-h-h-hhhhhhhh... seems little miss corporate ladder climber has deduced that her womanly wiles will help propel her to the top. More likely than not, she's probably right.
Very clever, amada.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Ah-h-h-hhhhhhhh... seems little miss corporate ladder climber has deduced that her womanly wiles will help propel her to the top. More likely than not, she's probably right.
Very clever, amada.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reading this little story. It happens!
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Oh, you bet it does! I've seen it many times myself.
Comment from The Death
Hi,
This is a wonderful senryu....with great wit and humor as well.
I love the satire in "she raises hemline".
Your words comment on an issue many can relate with.
Nice use of phonetics as well with T consonance and A assonance making it sound lovely.
I like how you associated with "high" expectations..lol
Really well written. :-)
Regards,
Anupam
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Hi,
This is a wonderful senryu....with great wit and humor as well.
I love the satire in "she raises hemline".
Your words comment on an issue many can relate with.
Nice use of phonetics as well with T consonance and A assonance making it sound lovely.
I like how you associated with "high" expectations..lol
Really well written. :-)
Regards,
Anupam
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for reading my work and especially for commenting in those consonance and assonances; I like to use them whenever possible...close to musicality.
Comment from rama devi
Pitch perfect senryu, dear, with superb satire. Witty and well worded--phrases in just the right order--(wink!) I bet Alvin would love the humor here. Scrumptious assonance of A in raises and gazing.
An outstanding entry, true to form, clever and unique. The six is for the irony ad satire elements so finely woven in as per Alvin's teaching of good senryu. Bravo!
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Pitch perfect senryu, dear, with superb satire. Witty and well worded--phrases in just the right order--(wink!) I bet Alvin would love the humor here. Scrumptious assonance of A in raises and gazing.
An outstanding entry, true to form, clever and unique. The six is for the irony ad satire elements so finely woven in as per Alvin's teaching of good senryu. Bravo!
Love,
rd
Comment Written 18-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for this honor. What a great morning!
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:-)))
Comment from JM daSilva
Seduction to get to the top. This has been done since time immemorial. But it's a modest way to do so, so it's not so serious.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Seduction to get to the top. This has been done since time immemorial. But it's a modest way to do so, so it's not so serious.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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So well to hear from you dear Jim. Thank you.
