Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "The Dying Art"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Dustybones
Are you telling of the feeling you may know what depression can make a person think is real. Oh, I mean what came first,feeling depression's symptoms or depression?
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Are you telling of the feeling you may know what depression can make a person think is real. Oh, I mean what came first,feeling depression's symptoms or depression?
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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that is for you to find
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I always think that Depression come first.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. I liked this a lot. I would tend to make the sentences shroter, but that is only an opinion. I like the dying art of compassion. It is wisdom compassion, that I hope to understand before this life ends and the next starts with the karmic energy i have amassed.
Thanks for the thoughtful afternoon.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Hello. I liked this a lot. I would tend to make the sentences shroter, but that is only an opinion. I like the dying art of compassion. It is wisdom compassion, that I hope to understand before this life ends and the next starts with the karmic energy i have amassed.
Thanks for the thoughtful afternoon.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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welcome
Comment from Kingsland
You lost me to the poem's over all meaning. I thought I knew what you were heading to. But then the way you ended this poem just left me scratching my head. This was a prose poem that has depth to its meaning. It was so deep for me it went right over my head... John
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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You lost me to the poem's over all meaning. I thought I knew what you were heading to. But then the way you ended this poem just left me scratching my head. This was a prose poem that has depth to its meaning. It was so deep for me it went right over my head... John
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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thanks for reading John
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
A very honest, poignant description of humanity and the emotions endured throughout a lifetime. The writer attempts through this poem to enlighten the reader about how far society has veered away from the ability to show compassion for one another. Our society is rather egocentric at times until something bad happens to us and then we expect all the come running to comfort us in our time of need. But that doesn't always come, which is why you need to keep true friends in your life and weed out those that are superficial. It is only when our lives end, that we finally see the errors of our ways, but abet too late to do anything about them. I love how this poem seems to take the span of a lifetime and compress it into a few stanzas drawing on the most integral lessons one should take from life. This arrangement of different aspects of life lessons is enhanced through addressing each one individually in separate stanzas. The writer's emotion and passion about this topic are clearly felt by the reader due to intense word choices chosen to create the greatest impact on the reader. This poem flows in a sequential manner dedicated to an entire lifetime in a few stanzas which transition seamlessly making this poem cohesive and easy to read. Well written and constructed!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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A very honest, poignant description of humanity and the emotions endured throughout a lifetime. The writer attempts through this poem to enlighten the reader about how far society has veered away from the ability to show compassion for one another. Our society is rather egocentric at times until something bad happens to us and then we expect all the come running to comfort us in our time of need. But that doesn't always come, which is why you need to keep true friends in your life and weed out those that are superficial. It is only when our lives end, that we finally see the errors of our ways, but abet too late to do anything about them. I love how this poem seems to take the span of a lifetime and compress it into a few stanzas drawing on the most integral lessons one should take from life. This arrangement of different aspects of life lessons is enhanced through addressing each one individually in separate stanzas. The writer's emotion and passion about this topic are clearly felt by the reader due to intense word choices chosen to create the greatest impact on the reader. This poem flows in a sequential manner dedicated to an entire lifetime in a few stanzas which transition seamlessly making this poem cohesive and easy to read. Well written and constructed!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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thank you
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You are very welcome! :-)
Comment from ELumpkins
I don't see this as poetry. It is an excellent piece discussing what we all must face, Life and death. The piece is well written it just doesn't strike me as poetry.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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I don't see this as poetry. It is an excellent piece discussing what we all must face, Life and death. The piece is well written it just doesn't strike me as poetry.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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thanks for reading
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello deepwater,
Profound piece - a great philosophical essay with thoughts and directions for daily living.
The first line, in particular struck a deep note within me.
However, this reads more as a passage of prose, not poetry, hence the rating. I think a little tweaking of the individual lines could bring about a good free verse poem.
Hope you have a wonderful day. Welcome back to Fanstory. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Hello deepwater,
Profound piece - a great philosophical essay with thoughts and directions for daily living.
The first line, in particular struck a deep note within me.
However, this reads more as a passage of prose, not poetry, hence the rating. I think a little tweaking of the individual lines could bring about a good free verse poem.
Hope you have a wonderful day. Welcome back to Fanstory. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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thanks Sonali
Comment from Janie King
So very true and we are blessed when and if we can find the kind of friends/family that will stand by you through the storms of life. God loves you and so do I.
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So very true and we are blessed when and if we can find the kind of friends/family that will stand by you through the storms of life. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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thank you
Comment from Pili Pubul
Is some very good wisdom in this prose, love your first two lines, basic.
And yes trust is the solid base for any good relation , impossible to have a it without trust. Good introspective thinking. Pili
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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Is some very good wisdom in this prose, love your first two lines, basic.
And yes trust is the solid base for any good relation , impossible to have a it without trust. Good introspective thinking. Pili
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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welcome Pili
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My pleasure. Pili
Comment from ennahanid
I notice you are were born pretty close to where I was - Surbiton is my hometown. Very thought provoking write here. I especially liked the first 4 lines. An interesting read to think on a bit today - DInah
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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I notice you are were born pretty close to where I was - Surbiton is my hometown. Very thought provoking write here. I especially liked the first 4 lines. An interesting read to think on a bit today - DInah
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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thank you Dinah
Comment from Dirus
HI there,
Very nice, I liked what you said in the first lines. All looks good here. Keep up the nice work and thank you for the nice read. :)
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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HI there,
Very nice, I liked what you said in the first lines. All looks good here. Keep up the nice work and thank you for the nice read. :)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2014
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welcome
