No One Knows
ABC Poem147 total reviews
Comment from poetbear
I have always been enchanted with buttteflies which why I like to photograph them.
This is beautifully written and very touching.
I like the image,flow and feeling.
It is a gem!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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I have always been enchanted with buttteflies which why I like to photograph them.
This is beautifully written and very touching.
I like the image,flow and feeling.
It is a gem!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Maddy, thank you so very much. There really is something magical about butterflies - Sawyer has loved them since long before he could talk. I so appreciate your generous and gracious review :-) Brooke
Comment from barleygirl
I love this poem so much! I love the moon & I love butterflies, so I really appreciate your use of the lyrical words "luna" and "mariposa". This is precious & the artwork is stunning. I love the way the "ABC" aspect is so natural, it's barely noticed. Most of all, I love the lesson in the final line. Thanks for sharing!!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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I love this poem so much! I love the moon & I love butterflies, so I really appreciate your use of the lyrical words "luna" and "mariposa". This is precious & the artwork is stunning. I love the way the "ABC" aspect is so natural, it's barely noticed. Most of all, I love the lesson in the final line. Thanks for sharing!!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Barleygirl, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Congrats on this high place finish, Brooke. This was such a lovely poem. Rose.
Original review:
It is such a wonderful thing to watch as children discover new words and thoughts on what they are seeing and enjoying. Butterfly is also Papillion. I remember how delighted I was when I discovered that word. This is a good entry into the ABC Poetry contest.
It's full with the mystery and joy of what we can see in the sky when the sun goes down.
Rose.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Congrats on this high place finish, Brooke. This was such a lovely poem. Rose.
Original review:
It is such a wonderful thing to watch as children discover new words and thoughts on what they are seeing and enjoying. Butterfly is also Papillion. I remember how delighted I was when I discovered that word. This is a good entry into the ABC Poetry contest.
It's full with the mystery and joy of what we can see in the sky when the sun goes down.
Rose.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Yes, that is the beautiful French word for it :-) Thank you so very much, Rose :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
You have captured the wonder of a child who looks into the sky and sees two seemingly-unrelated things and has that look in his eyes.
I like the alliteration of "Luna luminates" and using a butterfly's other name "Mariposa."
The AABBB rhyme scheme works very well in this poem.
Nicely done, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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You have captured the wonder of a child who looks into the sky and sees two seemingly-unrelated things and has that look in his eyes.
I like the alliteration of "Luna luminates" and using a butterfly's other name "Mariposa."
The AABBB rhyme scheme works very well in this poem.
Nicely done, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Rod, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from rod007
This is a wonderful tribute to a child's imagination. I remember as a child I was fascinated by the man that I saw in the moon. Sometime later we saw the first man walk on the moon!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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This is a wonderful tribute to a child's imagination. I remember as a child I was fascinated by the man that I saw in the moon. Sometime later we saw the first man walk on the moon!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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rod, thank you so much :-) Boy do I remember that space walk and how we all felt that night. Brooke
Comment from Louise Michelle
Good grief, girl! I had to look Mariposa up and it's humiliating that little Sawyer knows that word, lol. Please ask your daughter if she would mind tutoring me, ha ha ha. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Good grief, girl! I had to look Mariposa up and it's humiliating that little Sawyer knows that word, lol. Please ask your daughter if she would mind tutoring me, ha ha ha. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Lou, thank you so much for the laugh and the review :-) Brooke
Comment from Kimberly216
Great ABC poem. I love the Luna as that is my true last name. I love Mariposa. Great use of language in your poem. I liked the mystery but not too much the "till" they lift their eyes to see. I would have kept it a mystery and change the term "till." But that is just me and I am new so its all up to you. I really enjoyed it though and thank you.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Great ABC poem. I love the Luna as that is my true last name. I love Mariposa. Great use of language in your poem. I liked the mystery but not too much the "till" they lift their eyes to see. I would have kept it a mystery and change the term "till." But that is just me and I am new so its all up to you. I really enjoyed it though and thank you.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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thank you so much, Kimberly, for your thoughtful feedback :-) Brooke
Comment from chasennov
'No One Knows.' This is again one of your excellent poems, Brooke, and I thoroughly enjoy the reading thereof. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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'No One Knows.' This is again one of your excellent poems, Brooke, and I thoroughly enjoy the reading thereof. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Chasennov, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are most welcome, Brooke.
Comment from Rondeno
Knowing that these two words are Sawyer's favorites enriches what is already a delightful alphabet poem, Brooke. I really hope that you are assembling these for a published collection!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Knowing that these two words are Sawyer's favorites enriches what is already a delightful alphabet poem, Brooke. I really hope that you are assembling these for a published collection!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Michael, thank you so very much :-) I so appreciate your encouragement and generosity. Brooke
Comment from CR Delport
The sky sure holds many mysteries, and although the moon is so familiar, it a lot of ways still a mystery. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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The sky sure holds many mysteries, and although the moon is so familiar, it a lot of ways still a mystery. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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CR, thank you so much :-) Brooke
