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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Lost and Found"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from adewpearl
You do a compelling job of showing what becomes of people when starvation is a real possibility and life is reduced to survival. It sure makes one think about what would happen in my community if such disaster struck. Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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You do a compelling job of showing what becomes of people when starvation is a real possibility and life is reduced to survival. It sure makes one think about what would happen in my community if such disaster struck. Brooke
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I like the way you put that. I did look out my window and thought about what would happen on my block under similar circumstances. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I think distraction is the best way. Distract, divide and conquer. The enemies took over the camp too easy. I do not think they amp ed for violence. They are also not aware of all they are sitting on. Old Man Johnny can depend on his lady warriors. Great work.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I love the picture. I think distraction is the best way. Distract, divide and conquer. The enemies took over the camp too easy. I do not think they amp ed for violence. They are also not aware of all they are sitting on. Old Man Johnny can depend on his lady warriors. Great work.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Gotta love the gals. Johnny's no fool, he knows what the superior sex is! Gotta go write chapter 21. Thanks for your help and input as always, mikey
Comment from ravenblack
The key to rescuing the camp- take out the traitorous little hairy rat of a dig. The dog is obviously the leader. (Sorry, I Don't like little dogs).
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The key to rescuing the camp- take out the traitorous little hairy rat of a dig. The dog is obviously the leader. (Sorry, I Don't like little dogs).
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Mike, another fine and intriguing chapter. When you publish this book, I am definitely buying it. This is a very good read. Job well done.
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Mike, another fine and intriguing chapter. When you publish this book, I am definitely buying it. This is a very good read. Job well done.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from Sankey
good work had read this but vrrtigo and Louise wanting to get on I left it before writing this. Quite an exciting story unfolding. With you all the way mate. great drama and suspense.
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good work had read this but vrrtigo and Louise wanting to get on I left it before writing this. Quite an exciting story unfolding. With you all the way mate. great drama and suspense.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from l.raven
OK Michael, this should be good...now what is going to happen???or do you have to sleep on it...??/LOL...it's a great story Michael...and very well written...love it!! Luff Linda xoxo
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OK Michael, this should be good...now what is going to happen???or do you have to sleep on it...??/LOL...it's a great story Michael...and very well written...love it!! Luff Linda xoxo
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from 24chas
Another great chapter, mikey. I really like the way this story is going. It's very unusual to have the narrator, a guy, end up with women as his allies. And them be strong as well. Nice job.
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Another great chapter, mikey. I really like the way this story is going. It's very unusual to have the narrator, a guy, end up with women as his allies. And them be strong as well. Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
Comment from jmdg1954
I've read a number of your postings along the way, prose and poetry. This post is the first for me, have not read any previous chapters. Looking at this by itself I found the chatector's interesting and developing through this chapter. Each showing there strengths .
The story kept my attention, which is a plus. I bore easily. So as far as I'm concerned, you're two for two. What the hell, a baseball player gets three hits every ten times up, chances are he's Hall of Fame potential.
Nicely done... John
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I've read a number of your postings along the way, prose and poetry. This post is the first for me, have not read any previous chapters. Looking at this by itself I found the chatector's interesting and developing through this chapter. Each showing there strengths .
The story kept my attention, which is a plus. I bore easily. So as far as I'm concerned, you're two for two. What the hell, a baseball player gets three hits every ten times up, chances are he's Hall of Fame potential.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
Congratulations again on winning the poetry contest. Personally, I think your poetry is more lyrical and shows off your talent better than your prose. This is good, though. The plot is moving along, it's well-formatted, and we're learning more about the characters. Not too sure about the love affair. I'm sure it adds spark to the story, but somehow it seems a little forced right now. I think I'd flesh it out more; maybe give us some backstory on how these two were connected previously, or something.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Congratulations again on winning the poetry contest. Personally, I think your poetry is more lyrical and shows off your talent better than your prose. This is good, though. The plot is moving along, it's well-formatted, and we're learning more about the characters. Not too sure about the love affair. I'm sure it adds spark to the story, but somehow it seems a little forced right now. I think I'd flesh it out more; maybe give us some backstory on how these two were connected previously, or something.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Oh, thank you. I started writing poetry when I was little. Prose is new to me. It's like piano and guitar. I'm much better on piano, but guitar is more fun! I'll work on the romance. That is actually based on an actual romance. I just feel funny having them get too steamy in the middle of everything!! Plus, I'm not sure how to write much more than a sweet little kiss. Hahaha. Working on it though. mikey
Comment from Nosha17
It's developing into a really good story now with some action in the offing. Your characters are life-like and likeable and the dialogue is sharp. Sorry, I can't be of more help, I'm only good with animal adventures!! Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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It's developing into a really good story now with some action in the offing. Your characters are life-like and likeable and the dialogue is sharp. Sorry, I can't be of more help, I'm only good with animal adventures!! Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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That is helpful! That is exactly what I want to know. If it's believable and the dialogue sounds good, all of that. Very encouraging. Maybe I'll get Sprinkles, the dog, to talk some sense into them!! mikey
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Glad to be of some help, definitely call on Sprinkles, he may be the only sane one left soon! Faye
