Clickety Clack (acrostic)
an acrostic poem171 total reviews
Comment from Bina1
Trains are just magical to me, we are a rail road family, my Grandpa was a engineer. What a fine entry for the contest, a fine life lesson is offered in your poem. Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Trains are just magical to me, we are a rail road family, my Grandpa was a engineer. What a fine entry for the contest, a fine life lesson is offered in your poem. Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Bina :-) Brooke
Comment from Millibrad
This is a wonderful acrostic poem with a good message. As someone who has moved on, I can testify to the good advice in this poem. I love the picture and the Clickety Clack title.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This is a wonderful acrostic poem with a good message. As someone who has moved on, I can testify to the good advice in this poem. I love the picture and the Clickety Clack title.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Millibrad, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from MAB
Very cool and interesting! Though Brooke I know you can use plenty of other adjectives that rhyme better and still have a smooth flow rather than using nowhere past or dwell and still won't ruin the syllable count. plus you used dwell twice (not sure if that is too picky either) I just feel it could be "spruced up" at least in my opinion from what i usually see from your great works. You really have inspired me.
Great overall entry. Best to you and keep it up!
SAM
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Very cool and interesting! Though Brooke I know you can use plenty of other adjectives that rhyme better and still have a smooth flow rather than using nowhere past or dwell and still won't ruin the syllable count. plus you used dwell twice (not sure if that is too picky either) I just feel it could be "spruced up" at least in my opinion from what i usually see from your great works. You really have inspired me.
Great overall entry. Best to you and keep it up!
SAM
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Sam, thank you for taking the time to review. If you're aware of plenty of other adjectives that rhyme better, good for you because I sure don't. Brooke
Comment from NadineM
Boy, I like the thought of blowing outta town to avoid trouble! Great poem, Brooke, with an inspirational message! Best wishes in the contest. With the alliteration and thought-provoking message, this will surely be a strong contender! The chosen color scheme is very bold and effective!
PS: Awesome bathtub pic! Adorable!!
Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Boy, I like the thought of blowing outta town to avoid trouble! Great poem, Brooke, with an inspirational message! Best wishes in the contest. With the alliteration and thought-provoking message, this will surely be a strong contender! The chosen color scheme is very bold and effective!
PS: Awesome bathtub pic! Adorable!!
Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Nadine, thank you so very much :-) Sawyer adores bath time. Puts him in the best mood ever. Brooke
Comment from w.j.debi
Wisdom of the clickety clack. This poem has a fun cadence that enhances the message. I like the rhyming scheme and the subtle change up in the scheme between the two stanzas. The black and white picture adds to the long ago feeling of ancient wisdom standing the test of time and moving toward progress. All of this supports your theme.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Wisdom of the clickety clack. This poem has a fun cadence that enhances the message. I like the rhyming scheme and the subtle change up in the scheme between the two stanzas. The black and white picture adds to the long ago feeling of ancient wisdom standing the test of time and moving toward progress. All of this supports your theme.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Debi, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Deborah Marie
Wow! What a lovely and cleverly written Acrostic poem entry. Title is clever and so is your wording. Love the photo too. Exceptional imagery seen throughout your poem. Keep 'em coming, Deb
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Wow! What a lovely and cleverly written Acrostic poem entry. Title is clever and so is your wording. Love the photo too. Exceptional imagery seen throughout your poem. Keep 'em coming, Deb
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Deborah, thank you so very much. I so appreciate your encouragement and generous rating. Brooke :-)
Comment from Emily George
This has such a clickety clack feel to it.
I agree look ahead "life has no reverse" I like that you use the word tarry it gives it the feel of an old steam train chugging through life so much better for its ability to keep going traight ahead.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This has such a clickety clack feel to it.
I agree look ahead "life has no reverse" I like that you use the word tarry it gives it the feel of an old steam train chugging through life so much better for its ability to keep going traight ahead.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Emily, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Joan E.
I must share this one with my son--you might remember he is a train buff. He recently became Federally certified as a conductor, and has to direct the engineer of the Fillmore train, especially when going in reverse. (It's a tourist train that might be fun for Sawyer to visit as well on a weekend.) I enjoyed your acrostic and never will forget the line "Life has no reverse". Your "rubble" metaphor, rhymes and punch line give your good advice more intensity. Your black and white presentation is very effective too. I'm only sorry I don't have a six to award this ensemble. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I must share this one with my son--you might remember he is a train buff. He recently became Federally certified as a conductor, and has to direct the engineer of the Fillmore train, especially when going in reverse. (It's a tourist train that might be fun for Sawyer to visit as well on a weekend.) I enjoyed your acrostic and never will forget the line "Life has no reverse". Your "rubble" metaphor, rhymes and punch line give your good advice more intensity. Your black and white presentation is very effective too. I'm only sorry I don't have a six to award this ensemble. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Joan. I think you told me about the Filmore train before. If I recall, that one was a bit expensive, and I thought I would recommend it to Miranda once Sawyer is a bit older and more appreciative of the experience. Your son must be thrilled about his certification. Brooke
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Yes, now he wants to study for the engineer certification! -J
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Good for him!!! :-) Sounds like he listens to the advice, follow your bliss.
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Indeed! When he was sixteen, he said he would be a conductor if he could make enough money at it--it's delightful to see him realize a dream. I also think he offsets the pressures of long hours at Disney during his clickety-clack weekends! -J
Comment from Deniz22
I gotta be honest...the best thing here is Sawyer's picture in the bathtub! But your poem is good...yet against that grin its a distant second...bet you knew that!LOL
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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I gotta be honest...the best thing here is Sawyer's picture in the bathtub! But your poem is good...yet against that grin its a distant second...bet you knew that!LOL
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Dennis, thank you :-) I am very content to play second fiddle to my adorable grandson the rest of my life. Brooke
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I knew it! You are prejudiced! :)
Comment from Janelle
Hi Brooke, been away a while and it was nice to come back to this lovely poem. The rhythm seemed to have a clickety clack to it and the message was clear and concise, with the photo a perfect match. I think the black and white choice wsas an excellent one as the message didn't have any grey in it at all; just get on with and stop whinging about how wrong everything is and get up and do something about it! Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke, been away a while and it was nice to come back to this lovely poem. The rhythm seemed to have a clickety clack to it and the message was clear and concise, with the photo a perfect match. I think the black and white choice wsas an excellent one as the message didn't have any grey in it at all; just get on with and stop whinging about how wrong everything is and get up and do something about it! Regards, Jan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Jan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
