Clickety Clack (acrostic)
an acrostic poem171 total reviews
Comment from Norbanus
Devoid of hesitation, and of whine,
she shakes the demons stirring up our grief,
while showing us the burdens we design,
and pointing to the path of sweet relief.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Devoid of hesitation, and of whine,
she shakes the demons stirring up our grief,
while showing us the burdens we design,
and pointing to the path of sweet relief.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Norbanus, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from ragamuffin
A fun and light rhyme pattern that fits the "clickety clack" of train running down a track. An uplifting piece that presents a wise offerings. Often easier said than done when blows are repeated, but no one said life was going to be easy. Nice write.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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A fun and light rhyme pattern that fits the "clickety clack" of train running down a track. An uplifting piece that presents a wise offerings. Often easier said than done when blows are repeated, but no one said life was going to be easy. Nice write.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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ragamuffin, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from mfowler
I think the name 'Clickety Clack' is quite masterful. It implies rolling on. But, I doubt anyone would have picked your theme from the name. It is a piece of wisdom, so often spoken, but rarely offered in such a fun lyrical form. Good one, Brooke.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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I think the name 'Clickety Clack' is quite masterful. It implies rolling on. But, I doubt anyone would have picked your theme from the name. It is a piece of wisdom, so often spoken, but rarely offered in such a fun lyrical form. Good one, Brooke.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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mfowler, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry meeting the desired norms!
It beautifully depicts its theme.
Simple and impressive wording.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
Sum and substance lies in these lines:
"Crying gets you nowhere --
Life has no reverse....
Keep your sights on what's ahead
and blow on out of town!
Excellent! Best of Luck!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Thought provoking lovely piece of poetry meeting the desired norms!
It beautifully depicts its theme.
Simple and impressive wording.
Nice rhyming scheme with lively imagery.
Sum and substance lies in these lines:
"Crying gets you nowhere --
Life has no reverse....
Keep your sights on what's ahead
and blow on out of town!
Excellent! Best of Luck!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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RP, thank you so much :-) If I don't reciprocate the review, it's because of site screw ups. Brooke
Comment from Deepakurup
I read your this wonderful poem just when I needed such Pacifying sweet words.On Reading your each line I felt as if you were sitting in-front comforting me:)A very lively and lovely poem.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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I read your this wonderful poem just when I needed such Pacifying sweet words.On Reading your each line I felt as if you were sitting in-front comforting me:)A very lively and lovely poem.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Mini, thank you so very much for your generous six stars and gracious comments. :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
A fantastic acrostic poem, it has a wonderful message in it as well as the flow and the great rhyming.
I enjoyed it immensely Sawyer must have loved the trains.
well done Brooke. a well deserved six. Mary
the past is gone forever
the future is not ours yet
the present is now, the only real time we have.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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A fantastic acrostic poem, it has a wonderful message in it as well as the flow and the great rhyming.
I enjoyed it immensely Sawyer must have loved the trains.
well done Brooke. a well deserved six. Mary
the past is gone forever
the future is not ours yet
the present is now, the only real time we have.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Mary, thank you so very much :-) I appreciate your gracious comments and generous rating. Brooke
Comment from Dibul
A perfect Acrostic with a great message. I love the way the poem carries a fun title with a deep meaning.
The rhymes are great and the rhythm is just like you're sitting in a train and listening to something nice. :)
Good luck with the contest, Brooke!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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A perfect Acrostic with a great message. I love the way the poem carries a fun title with a deep meaning.
The rhymes are great and the rhythm is just like you're sitting in a train and listening to something nice. :)
Good luck with the contest, Brooke!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Divya, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from the blue pixel
This was the very first poetic form I ever tried Brooke so thanks for the memory. I really wouldn't have even noticed the poetic form had you not told me which is of course a compliment as writing to form without it reading as such is the skill in these. Clever title my friend and unforced lines to follow. Cute and surprising ending which added a little touch of humour and a double meaning always appreciated by yours truly. I'm sure you'll "clickety clack" your way to the top of the voting poll with this one.
xx C
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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This was the very first poetic form I ever tried Brooke so thanks for the memory. I really wouldn't have even noticed the poetic form had you not told me which is of course a compliment as writing to form without it reading as such is the skill in these. Clever title my friend and unforced lines to follow. Cute and surprising ending which added a little touch of humour and a double meaning always appreciated by yours truly. I'm sure you'll "clickety clack" your way to the top of the voting poll with this one.
xx C
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Carol, thank you so very much, my thoughtful friend :-) Brooke
Comment from heyjude
Brooke, what a great job on this acrostic poem for
the contest. I like the message. Don't dwell on
your problems. Sawyer looks tiny up to that train.
Bet he had a good time.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Brooke, what a great job on this acrostic poem for
the contest. I like the message. Don't dwell on
your problems. Sawyer looks tiny up to that train.
Bet he had a good time.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Judy, thank you so much :-) Yes, he truly is dwarfed by that huge train :-) Brooke
Comment from michaelcahill
I have never read anything like this. It is more than an acrostic. I read the title and then it runs through my mind as I read your piece like I'm on the train taking the journey that your words send me on. It's mesmerizing. Onomatopoeia acrostic? Isn't that what it really is? The acrostic is so much a part of the piece. More than any piece I have ever read. Oh, and it is a wonderful uplifting write as well and everything else that a perfect poem should be. It's two A.M. and my knees are stiff, but...Standing ovation!! mikey
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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I have never read anything like this. It is more than an acrostic. I read the title and then it runs through my mind as I read your piece like I'm on the train taking the journey that your words send me on. It's mesmerizing. Onomatopoeia acrostic? Isn't that what it really is? The acrostic is so much a part of the piece. More than any piece I have ever read. Oh, and it is a wonderful uplifting write as well and everything else that a perfect poem should be. It's two A.M. and my knees are stiff, but...Standing ovation!! mikey
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014
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Mikey, thank you for such a thoughtful response to my poem. You've started my day off with a smile :-) Brooke
