Clickety Clack (acrostic)
an acrostic poem171 total reviews
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Oh...This is beautiful, Brooke, one of the best acrostics that I have read. It has beautiful rhyming and meter and sounds so very natural... not forced at all. Giddy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Oh...This is beautiful, Brooke, one of the best acrostics that I have read. It has beautiful rhyming and meter and sounds so very natural... not forced at all. Giddy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Giddy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Aussie
Black and white has such appeal from days gone by - it suited your acrostic so well. Your poem has a strong message about living in the past and how many problems that the past presents; especially liked the last two lines - Keep your sights on what's ahead and blow on out of town! Good luck with your contest entry. ****** six virtual because we are not given enough real ones!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Black and white has such appeal from days gone by - it suited your acrostic so well. Your poem has a strong message about living in the past and how many problems that the past presents; especially liked the last two lines - Keep your sights on what's ahead and blow on out of town! Good luck with your contest entry. ****** six virtual because we are not given enough real ones!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Kay, thank you so much. I'm so pleased with the reception this poem has been given :-) Brooke
Comment from joeakeefe
Boy, does this one "grab you" when you read it. What a positive philosophy of life it entertains. One could frame these lines and put them under the glass on the desk for constant attention.
You have a great gift in yoiur writingskills..
joeakeefe
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Boy, does this one "grab you" when you read it. What a positive philosophy of life it entertains. One could frame these lines and put them under the glass on the desk for constant attention.
You have a great gift in yoiur writingskills..
joeakeefe
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Joe, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from judiverse
Very creative to use the Clickety Clack sound for your acrostic. Excellent rhyme, and the rhythm flows along like a train steadily moving. Good thoughts about not crying and not dwelling on the past. Take that train to get a new perspective! Great concluding lines: "Keep your sights on what's ahead/and blow on out of town!" An excellent though, because as you say there's no reverse. Just keep moving ahead. judi
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Very creative to use the Clickety Clack sound for your acrostic. Excellent rhyme, and the rhythm flows along like a train steadily moving. Good thoughts about not crying and not dwelling on the past. Take that train to get a new perspective! Great concluding lines: "Keep your sights on what's ahead/and blow on out of town!" An excellent though, because as you say there's no reverse. Just keep moving ahead. judi
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Judi, for your most thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. It was delightful. By the way, in my tanka, I changed "treasures safely stashed" to ''treasures safely stored" to eliminate the near-rhyme. I did like the sound of stashed. Thanks for calling that to my attention. judi
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke - this has such great images that I can hear the train. Cutie Pie looks so small compared to those massive trains. Excellent post as always skillfully weaved. I enjoyed it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Dear Brooke - this has such great images that I can hear the train. Cutie Pie looks so small compared to those massive trains. Excellent post as always skillfully weaved. I enjoyed it.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Maureen. This morning Sawyer went to play with cars he keeps on the windowsill in the corner of his playroom, and he started pointing excitedly at the sky. Miranda asked him what he was excited about, and he repeated "Luna, Luna." Miranda asked him what that meant, and he answered, "The moon!" He has obviously been paying attention to Myra, his new nanny, who speak English quite well, but is Hispanic :-) Brooke
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LOL It's amazing what they pick up.....like sponges at that age - too bad we tend to lose that sense of awe and excitement that young ones have so effortlessly.
Hugs
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Comment from minopavlic
The significance and very strength within the words of your poem are very enlightening, inspiring and highly motivating. Without an expectation, there can be no positive progression through life.
Mino
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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The significance and very strength within the words of your poem are very enlightening, inspiring and highly motivating. Without an expectation, there can be no positive progression through life.
Mino
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Mino, thank you so very much :-) It is good to hear from you, and I appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from crookedtoes
There is a lot of truth to your poem. I also liked how it flowed and rhymed fairly well. Problem is; we so often like to dwell on the past, and all the terrible mistakes that we make. Good Luck!! Dean
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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There is a lot of truth to your poem. I also liked how it flowed and rhymed fairly well. Problem is; we so often like to dwell on the past, and all the terrible mistakes that we make. Good Luck!! Dean
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Dean, thank you so much for your gracious comments and generous rating :-) Brooke
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You're welcome!! Dean
Comment from Selina Stambi
You always have a deep truth embedded in your lovely poems, Brooke.
If only we could all live by this one, the psychiatrists' offices would be empty.
xxx
Sonali
p.s. Someone recently paid me the ultimate compliment of thinking one of my poems had been written by you .. imagine how I felt!!! :)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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You always have a deep truth embedded in your lovely poems, Brooke.
If only we could all live by this one, the psychiatrists' offices would be empty.
xxx
Sonali
p.s. Someone recently paid me the ultimate compliment of thinking one of my poems had been written by you .. imagine how I felt!!! :)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Sonali, what a sweet thing to share with me :-) Thank you so much. Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
the message alone is worthy of the six stars awarded here. then you add in the poetic verve and this poem just shines brightly. this was an outstanding poetic performance in every way... John
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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the message alone is worthy of the six stars awarded here. then you add in the poetic verve and this poem just shines brightly. this was an outstanding poetic performance in every way... John
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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John, thank you so much :-) I so appreciate your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from marycec
An excellent acrostic for an onomatopoeic title! The steady rhythm mimics the movement of the train and I read it aloud to get the best effect.the message of the poem is a salutary one :keep on moving along those tracks of life. Have not been on site as we were 5 weeks in Africa and then celebrating the birth of our new grandson, Adam.Tom is now officially a big brother.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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An excellent acrostic for an onomatopoeic title! The steady rhythm mimics the movement of the train and I read it aloud to get the best effect.the message of the poem is a salutary one :keep on moving along those tracks of life. Have not been on site as we were 5 weeks in Africa and then celebrating the birth of our new grandson, Adam.Tom is now officially a big brother.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Congratulations on your new grand baby and I am so envious of your trip! Thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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My husband is South African as you know and we go over quite often but this year was special as we visited the Eastern Cape and visited Qunu where Nelson Mandela grew up and where he was laid to rest.Watch
this space when I get round to writing about it.
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I am sure you will make me cry with that poem.
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:-) x
