Yosemite
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Stalking Lester & Romance?"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
18 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
Another banner chapter Mikey. Romance! I was hoping for this christine and Johnny seem so connected in a way that transcends age and even sexuality perhaps. Love the discussion about tthe murder. Good! New folks discovered always goid. Some comic relief and mire. NG
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
  |
Another banner chapter Mikey. Romance! I was hoping for this christine and Johnny seem so connected in a way that transcends age and even sexuality perhaps. Love the discussion about tthe murder. Good! New folks discovered always goid. Some comic relief and mire. NG
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
Oh good! I am pleased. I thought someone needed to get out of camp and see what was out there. Some comedy is always good. But, plan on some drama too. mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I like the addition of this family or group they found, people who seem more comfortable with living off the land. I wonder if they were on vacation from the Ozarks or somehwere similar?
Great job on this chapter!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
 |
I like the addition of this family or group they found, people who seem more comfortable with living off the land. I wonder if they were on vacation from the Ozarks or somehwere similar?
Great job on this chapter!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
Thank you so much. I'm listening! Or, trying to anyway. Yes, I'm thinking a little hillbilly family. A little comic relief, but a serious side too. Glad you are liking it. I didn't want to go too far with the violence. mikey
-
Perfect time for it!
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. The group has started weeding out their weakest links. I think the government may be starting that too. They most likely think the people caught in the center of the disaster have been driven mad. Johnny and his group may be hiding from their own government soon. Great work.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
|
I love the story. The group has started weeding out their weakest links. I think the government may be starting that too. They most likely think the people caught in the center of the disaster have been driven mad. Johnny and his group may be hiding from their own government soon. Great work.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
Hmm. That's a thought. Love your comments, I always get ideas from them. Thank you so much, mikey. I'm so behind in responses that I'm going backwards again. I do read with great interest and appreciation every review though!! Thanks for this one and all the others even if I haven't answered them yet. mikey
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Mikey.
This is another great chapter. You have brought in new character, added dialogue and upped the tension. Well done. This is now taking on a different direction. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
|
Hi, Mikey.
This is another great chapter. You have brought in new character, added dialogue and upped the tension. Well done. This is now taking on a different direction. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
I don't know what happens, but my short stories don't seem to end! Someone always shows up. Glad you are liking it. I hope you see some of your influence. I'm listening! mikey
-
Hi, Mikey.
Your last two chapters are really good. You've added the dialogue, kept the visuals and upped the tension. Excellent job! :)
Comment from robina1978
When they decided to go further away from their own camp, the bumped into two people hunting. While following them the pair of them wondered who of them had killed. Looking at the other people had to wait till dark.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
|
When they decided to go further away from their own camp, the bumped into two people hunting. While following them the pair of them wondered who of them had killed. Looking at the other people had to wait till dark.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
About time they got out to look around! mikey
Comment from Michaelk
Interesting. A group of survivors that seem unaware of the disaster, Johnny and Christine sounding like they're starting up a relationship. I think it's funny that you mentioned this new group doesn't seem like they're in an emergency situation when just a few chapters ago the main group seemed to have the same attitude. I also found it interesting that they can't figure out who killed David. Intrigue abounds. Another solid chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
|
Interesting. A group of survivors that seem unaware of the disaster, Johnny and Christine sounding like they're starting up a relationship. I think it's funny that you mentioned this new group doesn't seem like they're in an emergency situation when just a few chapters ago the main group seemed to have the same attitude. I also found it interesting that they can't figure out who killed David. Intrigue abounds. Another solid chapter.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
I thought it was time for them to venture out and see what was out there. Glad you liked this chapter. This was supposed to be a short story. Hahaha. Mine never are I guess! mikey
Comment from Sankey
Good story you got me sucked in in some strange fashion. Going well I will stay for a while longer ok.
Only one spag in tbe intro above....
In the last ins(a)tallment
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
|
Good story you got me sucked in in some strange fashion. Going well I will stay for a while longer ok.
Only one spag in tbe intro above....
In the last ins(a)tallment
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
Thanks. Trying to cut down on the horror!! Oh. Good eye as always. I'll get in and fix that. mikey
Comment from seaglass
This new group will be interesting although in joining together would probably mean a fight with Big Mama to keep her from taking over. They do sound like some bumpkins. And all those kids, there has to be women somewhere to have mothered all of them. Doesn't sound like the came from a smart gene pool. Just have to wait and see. A littler fixer below.
'In the last insatallment" misspelled word or typo?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
|
This new group will be interesting although in joining together would probably mean a fight with Big Mama to keep her from taking over. They do sound like some bumpkins. And all those kids, there has to be women somewhere to have mothered all of them. Doesn't sound like the came from a smart gene pool. Just have to wait and see. A littler fixer below.
'In the last insatallment" misspelled word or typo?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
-
Yep, typo. I think I'll give them horse sense, but have them provide a little comic relief. Don't want it to be too slapstick. I think maybe they'll get along perhaps. Not sure, I wasn't expecting them to show up. Hahaha. mikey
-
Back in the 70's, I was visiting my parents in the Ozarks. I took my toddlers to a swimming hole on the Swan creek river. Wouldn't you know I had a flat. When I pulled out the spare, it was flat too. I was getting ready to start hiking out to the road when three men like the ones in your story, walked out of the woods. I guess they had been watching us all along. Must have had a still in the woods there. Sacred me to death at first but they turned out to be nice. They took my spare back in the woods and pumped it back up and changed my tire. They smelled really bad and hardly had teeth. I had forgotten about that till I read your characters. lol
-
Great story. I'm thinking that these folks are going to be all right too. Everyone that lives a simple life can't be running around with a chainsaw, right? I'd think they'd probably tend to be pretty decent with simple honest values.
