Cats and Laps
a lune165 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Spud looks most comfortable - like he needs a diet or it's old age around the tummy. Punctuation is slowly being eliminated and that is sad because it helps the reader get the gist of the writing - and the worst offence (I feel) is beginning a line or sentence with a small 'i' - I don't know why it is done (we don't do it in Oz) I liked your Lune and wish you well in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Spud looks most comfortable - like he needs a diet or it's old age around the tummy. Punctuation is slowly being eliminated and that is sad because it helps the reader get the gist of the writing - and the worst offence (I feel) is beginning a line or sentence with a small 'i' - I don't know why it is done (we don't do it in Oz) I liked your Lune and wish you well in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Kay, thank you so much :-) He is definitely comfy - I should tell Miranda to start calling Potato Spud. LOL What a great nickname. Brooke :-)
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We call potatoes spuds, all the time - catchy eh?
Comment from Janet Foor
I love how you take everyday items and concepts and put them together in a poem. This is clever and a joy to read Brooke. Our cat Leland loves to do just what Potato is doing. Great lune.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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I love how you take everyday items and concepts and put them together in a poem. This is clever and a joy to read Brooke. Our cat Leland loves to do just what Potato is doing. Great lune.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Janet, thank you so much for your generous sixth star - Leland, great name :-) Brooke
Comment from madhatter1977
Nice lune, Brooke. It's a bit different from what you normally write but cats are nice and laps need warming! Best wishes, Pete :)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Nice lune, Brooke. It's a bit different from what you normally write but cats are nice and laps need warming! Best wishes, Pete :)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Pete, thanks so much. I only write a Lune when there is a site contest :-) Brooke
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Brooke
I think you're safe from the Lune gods this evening. Your poem is in fine form and provides a fun read. I liked the comparisons of bacon and eggs, cat and lap and then you and me. I might have exchanged the cat for 'wine and cheese'. lol
Ray
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Good Evening, Brooke
I think you're safe from the Lune gods this evening. Your poem is in fine form and provides a fun read. I liked the comparisons of bacon and eggs, cat and lap and then you and me. I might have exchanged the cat for 'wine and cheese'. lol
Ray
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Yeah, you're a tad more fond of wine than I am LOL Thanks so much, Ray :-) Brooke
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:-)
Comment from GWHARGIS
I liked the duo of the eggs and bacon. I'm no cat person, but a beagle on the lap, I can go for. Great lune and great flow. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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I liked the duo of the eggs and bacon. I'm no cat person, but a beagle on the lap, I can go for. Great lune and great flow. Nicely done.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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beagles make nice friends to pet too :-) Thanks so much, Gretchen :-) Brooke
Comment from His Grayness
Dear Brooke: loved this one and again..no sixes left in the bucket but certainly deserved. Lots of emotional power in that photo and your words to express. Excellent! Vance
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Dear Brooke: loved this one and again..no sixes left in the bucket but certainly deserved. Lots of emotional power in that photo and your words to express. Excellent! Vance
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Vance :-) Brooke
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More than welcomed as always! Blessings Vance
Comment from catch22
What an adorable lune with a bonus rhyme and a cute little message about how two people just go together like cats and laps. I also like how you formed this poem into a question. Very clever.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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What an adorable lune with a bonus rhyme and a cute little message about how two people just go together like cats and laps. I also like how you formed this poem into a question. Very clever.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Gail :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I don't know about these Lune's (loons, maybe?). Someone had bacon and eggs, but who? I like the rhyming descriptive part as well. Good luck Brooke. Kenny
I got it--bacon and eggs equal comfort.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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I don't know about these Lune's (loons, maybe?). Someone had bacon and eggs, but who? I like the rhyming descriptive part as well. Good luck Brooke. Kenny
I got it--bacon and eggs equal comfort.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Kenny - it's not my favorite form either, but I always enter the free site-sponsored contests :-) Brooke
Comment from emrpoems
fried eggs and bacon
cats and laps --
you and me, perhaps?
Seems that the family cat is trying to usurp Sawyer's position.LOL
Perfect 5-3-5 syllable count for the Lune prompt
love your thoughts on this subject. I don't love cats the way most people do. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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fried eggs and bacon
cats and laps --
you and me, perhaps?
Seems that the family cat is trying to usurp Sawyer's position.LOL
Perfect 5-3-5 syllable count for the Lune prompt
love your thoughts on this subject. I don't love cats the way most people do. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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emrpoems, not to worry, this took place during Sawyer's nap time :-) Thanks so much. Brooke
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Glad to hear that. Sawyer is now an established Fanstorian so it will not be easy to replace him LOL
Comment from Zue65
You really are a genius in poetry, and even in short verses like this lune, you excel too. Anything you dip your hands on Brooke, will light up any page. God bless.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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You really are a genius in poetry, and even in short verses like this lune, you excel too. Anything you dip your hands on Brooke, will light up any page. God bless.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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nassus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
