Cats and Laps
a lune165 total reviews
Comment from NadineM
Brooke, I like your lune poem. Things that go so well together! I like how you state the obvious in the first two lines but leave the reader with a question in the last line, almost to ask shyly if these two are also a natural match! This poem is playful and fun and well-written. The required syllable count is spot on. Best wishes in the contest! Thanks for sharing this with me. Love Potato's tail... raccoon-like! Too cute!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Brooke, I like your lune poem. Things that go so well together! I like how you state the obvious in the first two lines but leave the reader with a question in the last line, almost to ask shyly if these two are also a natural match! This poem is playful and fun and well-written. The required syllable count is spot on. Best wishes in the contest! Thanks for sharing this with me. Love Potato's tail... raccoon-like! Too cute!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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thank you so very much, Nadine :-) Brooke
Comment from alexgardiner
Love fried eggs and bacon
have three cats but only one lap
Wife and I still lovers:)
All so so true Brooke Bonny Lass.
Have a good day Bonny Lass.
The Auld Yin.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Love fried eggs and bacon
have three cats but only one lap
Wife and I still lovers:)
All so so true Brooke Bonny Lass.
Have a good day Bonny Lass.
The Auld Yin.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Alex, how great to hear from you - thank you so much for your generous sixth star :-) I hope things are well with you and your family. Brooke
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice picture. If only all our days could be filled with such easy questions.
The cat looks comfortable, although cats never look uncomfortable when people take pictures of them.
This poem bring in two different kinds of love.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Nice picture. If only all our days could be filled with such easy questions.
The cat looks comfortable, although cats never look uncomfortable when people take pictures of them.
This poem bring in two different kinds of love.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 11-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Joan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Any time, Brooke.
Joan
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Any time, Brooke.
Joan
Comment from Janelle
Oh my goodness Brooke, I've been looking everywhere for Lilo, our cat, and there she was all the time, sitting in Miranda's lap squillions of miles away!!! (A bit strange tho, because I'm pretty sure it was her in the laundry last night having her tea! Potato has a twin called Lilo!)
Succinct poem, says much about a cats ability to make us feel relaxed and special because it has chosen our particular lap to take a snooze on! Great picture too. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Oh my goodness Brooke, I've been looking everywhere for Lilo, our cat, and there she was all the time, sitting in Miranda's lap squillions of miles away!!! (A bit strange tho, because I'm pretty sure it was her in the laundry last night having her tea! Potato has a twin called Lilo!)
Succinct poem, says much about a cats ability to make us feel relaxed and special because it has chosen our particular lap to take a snooze on! Great picture too. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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LOL - I'll tell Potato all about it :-) Thanks so much, Janelle. Brooke :-)
Comment from rod007
Very interesting poem. The eggs and bacon-the cat fills me with a relaxing warm Sunday morning lounging on my favorite sofa. Well done, Brooke.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Very interesting poem. The eggs and bacon-the cat fills me with a relaxing warm Sunday morning lounging on my favorite sofa. Well done, Brooke.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from jluzzle
Nice little poem here, it matches the artwork beautifully. Nice message, makes me want to go back home and just hang with my dog.
nice write...
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Nice little poem here, it matches the artwork beautifully. Nice message, makes me want to go back home and just hang with my dog.
nice write...
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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jluzzle, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barkingdog
Now, that's one huge Potato. LOL
Cats and laps do go together. I like your paring in this piece. It flows well from line to line, making perfect sense.
Best of luck in the contest, Brooke.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Now, that's one huge Potato. LOL
Cats and laps do go together. I like your paring in this piece. It flows well from line to line, making perfect sense.
Best of luck in the contest, Brooke.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Ellen, how lovely to hear from you. Thanks so much. Are you going to start posting a new book for me soon??? LOL Brooke
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Nothing yet. I'm expecting company soon, so am getting ready for arrival in April. Also doing taxes... Ugh. Maybe, I'll start writing again in May when things calm down.
Comment from DR DIP
hehehe..very short but i get the point plus i know its written to certain parameters of competition i admire you that you can write poems with parameters i can't write with restrictions thats why i never even bvother entering competitions..good luck with it anyway
xxdip
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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hehehe..very short but i get the point plus i know its written to certain parameters of competition i admire you that you can write poems with parameters i can't write with restrictions thats why i never even bvother entering competitions..good luck with it anyway
xxdip
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thanks, dip. Yep, I join the contests because they're free to enter and have a big payout to the winner. Once I won a hundred bucks for a senryu, not bad money for 17 syllables. LOL Brooke
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hmm 100/17 thats approx. $5.90 per syllable yep thats not bad!! lol
good on you, with the flat pussy! haha
dip
Comment from Maltese Falcon
what a sweet poem you have here. its well written and I like the picture you used. am more of a dog person but I still enjoyed this.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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what a sweet poem you have here. its well written and I like the picture you used. am more of a dog person but I still enjoyed this.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Maltese Falcon, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hi Brooke,
I loved your take on the similarities between those classic pairings that couple so well, lol, right down to the innocent proposal of creating a possible new one. As far as punctuation, it looks OK to me. I realize there are those who live to split the detailed hair...some people's kids, tut tut. Miranda's cat has the same markings as one of ours, although, hers definitely looks bigger. Nice work with this lune...Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke,
I loved your take on the similarities between those classic pairings that couple so well, lol, right down to the innocent proposal of creating a possible new one. As far as punctuation, it looks OK to me. I realize there are those who live to split the detailed hair...some people's kids, tut tut. Miranda's cat has the same markings as one of ours, although, hers definitely looks bigger. Nice work with this lune...Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for your insightful reading of this poem, Bill :-) Brooke
