Romance Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "As We Hold Hands"Non-biographical LovePoems
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Comment from barleygirl
This poem describes love in stilted, cerebral terms, from my point of view, rather than a raw outpouring of passion or desire. I sometimes blame heavily structured poetic formats for torturing the message to fit the form. But all in all, the poem is well structured, if not heartrending.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This poem describes love in stilted, cerebral terms, from my point of view, rather than a raw outpouring of passion or desire. I sometimes blame heavily structured poetic formats for torturing the message to fit the form. But all in all, the poem is well structured, if not heartrending.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you barley girl. I know what you mean, I find tercets particularly hard to get a smooth flow when interlinked like this format.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with hold/hands...gentle/grip...love/linked...reflection/romance...bond/bound...lasting/link...feeling's/found. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with hold/hands...gentle/grip...love/linked...reflection/romance...bond/bound...lasting/link...feeling's/found. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you Righteous, for your detailed review and positive comments.
Comment from Visheshta Dahiya
a beautiful poem.
the words have so much of love and pure romance.
they are really sweet and cute. the rhyming scheme adds glitters to the poem.
best wishes
Visheshta
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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a beautiful poem.
the words have so much of love and pure romance.
they are really sweet and cute. the rhyming scheme adds glitters to the poem.
best wishes
Visheshta
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you Visheshta. I appreciate your review and comments.
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welcome :)
Comment from Aplgwest
Your poem reads very well and conveys a great deal about a loving relationship. Though I have not inspected the nuances of your metrical lines, as to whether it meets a Terzanelle's criteria, its beautiful flow assures me that it does.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Your poem reads very well and conveys a great deal about a loving relationship. Though I have not inspected the nuances of your metrical lines, as to whether it meets a Terzanelle's criteria, its beautiful flow assures me that it does.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you skylight.
Comment from in777wr#
This was a well written poem. The poem reads well, and the message is beautiful.
Our love connects as we hold hands
That line opened the poem well. The poem flows well. I enjoyed reading this poem. Nice job.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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This was a well written poem. The poem reads well, and the message is beautiful.
Our love connects as we hold hands
That line opened the poem well. The poem flows well. I enjoyed reading this poem. Nice job.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reading and reviewing, in777wr
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You're welcome.
Comment from Gungalo
A lasting link where feeling's found,
Our love connects as we hold hands
It's in our bond that we are bound.
Our love connects as we hold hands.
What an endearing write this is Tom. Wonderful in its flow and amazing in its rhyming. You have outdone yourself this time.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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A lasting link where feeling's found,
Our love connects as we hold hands
It's in our bond that we are bound.
Our love connects as we hold hands.
What an endearing write this is Tom. Wonderful in its flow and amazing in its rhyming. You have outdone yourself this time.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thank you Gungalo. I am pleased you like it so well.
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Oh yes, I would because I am the one who introduced it here. LOL
Comment from darla1977
This is so well written!!! I find these complicated to write, but it looks to come easy to you! Great presentation, with strong, lovely rhyme! Nice job!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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This is so well written!!! I find these complicated to write, but it looks to come easy to you! Great presentation, with strong, lovely rhyme! Nice job!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thank you darla. It's a gift.
Comment from sunnilicious
That photo looks like an arm wrestling match, Tom. She won... She won!
Nice visual imagery. Creative and expressive. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes.
God bless a good marriage for an infinity. Have a lovely weekend. :)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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That photo looks like an arm wrestling match, Tom. She won... She won!
Nice visual imagery. Creative and expressive. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes.
God bless a good marriage for an infinity. Have a lovely weekend. :)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thank you Alicia. She did win.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is so beautiful, Tom, really lovely. I imagine this is for your wife, so romantic with the perfect photo to illustrate that love. Beautiful. xsx Sandra.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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That is so beautiful, Tom, really lovely. I imagine this is for your wife, so romantic with the perfect photo to illustrate that love. Beautiful. xsx Sandra.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thank you Sandra. You guessed right. Those hands are our hands.
Comment from adewpearl
Yet another stunning photo
excellent terzanelle form
I love the way you show the outward expression of their love through the held hands
good alliteration in phrases like hold hands and love linked
and reflection of romance
strong rhymes
I love the way it all comes together in the closing quatrain
Well done, my friend :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Yet another stunning photo
excellent terzanelle form
I love the way you show the outward expression of their love through the held hands
good alliteration in phrases like hold hands and love linked
and reflection of romance
strong rhymes
I love the way it all comes together in the closing quatrain
Well done, my friend :-) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much Brooke. I am very pleased that someone who I consider an expert takes the time to offer such a nice review.
