Behold This Child
For my godson's christening65 total reviews
Comment from Brocha1
I think the simplicity of the form actually perfectly reflects the theme-the child.
It's interesting the way you have touched so any different aspects of the child, the innocence of this particular child, reflections of your own journey, prayers for this child and also advice all wrapped up in a simpler message.
I liked this verse the best:
" Behold this child -- as he begins
The journey all embark,
Where all will stall, lose ground, and fall
Or stumble in the dark."
excellent use of enjambment.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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I think the simplicity of the form actually perfectly reflects the theme-the child.
It's interesting the way you have touched so any different aspects of the child, the innocence of this particular child, reflections of your own journey, prayers for this child and also advice all wrapped up in a simpler message.
I liked this verse the best:
" Behold this child -- as he begins
The journey all embark,
Where all will stall, lose ground, and fall
Or stumble in the dark."
excellent use of enjambment.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Brocha, for your great review! I really appreciate it.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, marillion, you did an excellent job writing this sweet poem about the promise of life that a new child offers. i enjoyed reading this one...
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, marillion, you did an excellent job writing this sweet poem about the promise of life that a new child offers. i enjoyed reading this one...
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, swj, for your sixer, and your very kind words.
Comment from Katzintx
Once more you tap into universal emotions that find expression in well chosen words and thoughtful themes.
You must be getting tired of me say Well Done! katz
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Once more you tap into universal emotions that find expression in well chosen words and thoughtful themes.
You must be getting tired of me say Well Done! katz
Comment Written 06-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Katz, I really appreciate your sixer, my friend, as well as your kind words about this poem...which will live on beyond me with my godson.
Comment from kiwijenny
Nice.....there is something purely poetical about a baby , loved, embarking on a journey with cumulative effort to support this sweet innocent child
Well written . Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Nice.....there is something purely poetical about a baby , loved, embarking on a journey with cumulative effort to support this sweet innocent child
Well written . Well done
God bless
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, Jenny. I appreciate it.
Comment from Mastery
Absolutely perfect, Dave! I wish I had six or seven stars for it. What heart and soul shines through these very believable words. One of your best ...Bob
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Absolutely perfect, Dave! I wish I had six or seven stars for it. What heart and soul shines through these very believable words. One of your best ...Bob
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Bob. I really appreciate that, my friend.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. It may not be typical of your style, but it is typical of your care. This is a lovely poem for a christening. The child is a lucky boy to have such a godfather. It is not every godparent who can give such a gift.
May he be well.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Hello. It may not be typical of your style, but it is typical of your care. This is a lovely poem for a christening. The child is a lucky boy to have such a godfather. It is not every godparent who can give such a gift.
May he be well.
padumachitta
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Pad. I appreciate it very much. I'm pleased to do it!
Comment from The Death
Hi, David.
The most simple and small things in our lives have the capability to provide us with happiness.
This one is lovely and is so rich in emotions.
The tone of this is perfect for the ceremony.
A very well written poem celebrating the beginning of his journey. I'm sure your friend will feel blessed to have this for the little baby...loved the pic. :-) He's adorable.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Hi, David.
The most simple and small things in our lives have the capability to provide us with happiness.
This one is lovely and is so rich in emotions.
The tone of this is perfect for the ceremony.
A very well written poem celebrating the beginning of his journey. I'm sure your friend will feel blessed to have this for the little baby...loved the pic. :-) He's adorable.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. I really appreciate it!
Comment from michaelcahill
It is typical in excellence. This has a very old feel to it. It impresses me as something written long ago and yet the language is more modern. Like perhaps you have a clear memory of a previous life in Victorian times that mixes with your current views. It makes for a great piece and a damn strange review!! mikey
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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It is typical in excellence. This has a very old feel to it. It impresses me as something written long ago and yet the language is more modern. Like perhaps you have a clear memory of a previous life in Victorian times that mixes with your current views. It makes for a great piece and a damn strange review!! mikey
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Mikey! I know what you mean, and I sort of planned it that way. Love your review, my friend.
Comment from sunnilicious
Nice photograph. You are very kind. I know you'll make a splendid Godfather. Make sure to take the baby for pizza when he grows a touch older.
Beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Nice photograph. You are very kind. I know you'll make a splendid Godfather. Make sure to take the baby for pizza when he grows a touch older.
Beautiful poem.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, sunni! So nice of you!
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Very lovely and I am sure it will be well received by his parents and loved ones.
What a kind gift to offer. He will have it always as a token from his
Godfather. Smiles, robin :)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Very lovely and I am sure it will be well received by his parents and loved ones.
What a kind gift to offer. He will have it always as a token from his
Godfather. Smiles, robin :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, Robin. I appreciate it!
