Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the story. A mini space ship caught up in an elevator. How many space men have we vacuumed up? I think an elevator might be a scary place to another race. How many flies have we Swatted that were not flies? Is this why they disappear? Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you for the great review.

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

face on [anther/another] human.
Now this story got me hooked to the end. I was even expecting this to be continued. Why don't you make it a book? Best Wishes
Sylvia

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you for the great review.

Comment from zeezeewriter

Excellent

Very good story. Very entertaining and extremely clever. It's nice to read something worth reading.

Nice flow, good dialogue.

Good luck in this contest.

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014

Thank you for the great review.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

We're trapped, captain - add comma for direct address
Don't know, cap - add comma
feeling just a little nauseous, gripped - add comma
Damn it, Neutron - add comma
We're trying, captain - add comma
useless in his comfy chair, - add comma
What's going on down there, Tander - add comma
That's all we need now, Pro thought - add comma
I'm not noting any more commas needed with direct address
Bill, relieved, forgot -add second comma
can you hear me? - add question mark
Good natural-sounding dialogue
An exciting plot that holds the reader's attention
Brooke

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014

Thank you very much for the review and for the spag tips.
I'm glad you liked the story.

Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

Well this one is different. Aliens visiting our world.

I wondered if those names that sound Latin are Earth names or alien.

Well written with plenty of dialogue. Giving a good visual and flow to the story.

:) mel.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014

Thanks for the kind review. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from EvaGriffin

Excellent

Really cute. Very creative response to "stuck in an elevator". I suppose the sequel could be "stuck in a vacuum cleaner"?

Good job.
Eva

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014

Thank you very much for the fine review.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

That was cute. The tiny aliens found themselves in quite a predicament. You need to do a little editing. elevator's doesn't need the apostrophe. The ship should be in attack mode, not attach.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014

Thank you for the review and for the pointers. I'm glad you liked it.