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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Others, Endowments & Repetition."Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from ragamuffin
Thought provoking. Watched Ender's Game and The Purge not too long ago and thought they were excellent films for the same reason- thought provoking. We know who we are in the day to day, but what about when push comes to shove? What would our morals, ethics, beliefs really be? Only one suggestion with Jennifer being pregnant again and the meds running out for the psych patients, it seems time is moving quickly for conception to occur after a miscarriage (though getting pregnant ASAP, which is sooner than "doctor's orders," to "replace" what was lost is about as common as the opposite reaction which is to put it off so as not to risk dealing with another loss, but moving very slowly for the patients, unless a large supply of meds were brought on the trip. Maybe a mention of specifically how much time is passing. Great story. Enjoying every chapter.
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Thought provoking. Watched Ender's Game and The Purge not too long ago and thought they were excellent films for the same reason- thought provoking. We know who we are in the day to day, but what about when push comes to shove? What would our morals, ethics, beliefs really be? Only one suggestion with Jennifer being pregnant again and the meds running out for the psych patients, it seems time is moving quickly for conception to occur after a miscarriage (though getting pregnant ASAP, which is sooner than "doctor's orders," to "replace" what was lost is about as common as the opposite reaction which is to put it off so as not to risk dealing with another loss, but moving very slowly for the patients, unless a large supply of meds were brought on the trip. Maybe a mention of specifically how much time is passing. Great story. Enjoying every chapter.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from Sasha
You cover a lot in this one and convey the understandable fear each has over someone wandering into their camp. You are developing your characters very well and whether meant to or not dividing them into 'like' and 'dislike' groups. I am continuing to enjoy this very much and anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
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You cover a lot in this one and convey the understandable fear each has over someone wandering into their camp. You are developing your characters very well and whether meant to or not dividing them into 'like' and 'dislike' groups. I am continuing to enjoy this very much and anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. Murder is a good possibility. You have some potentially dangerous people in your midst. Is there a place to make isolation cells? You are right to not really trust anyone who wanders in. She said her food had been off the land. Did the disaster poison the plants? Is that what killed the people? There is a lot to study. Great work.
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I love the story. Murder is a good possibility. You have some potentially dangerous people in your midst. Is there a place to make isolation cells? You are right to not really trust anyone who wanders in. She said her food had been off the land. Did the disaster poison the plants? Is that what killed the people? There is a lot to study. Great work.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Excellent chapter filled with information. Lots of confliict and relationships forming. It appears that other survivors may be in more dire staits then they adding to the tension. NG
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Excellent chapter filled with information. Lots of confliict and relationships forming. It appears that other survivors may be in more dire staits then they adding to the tension. NG
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Good. Glad to hear you are seeing the need for these details. That gives me some confidence. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Nosha17
Yes, I wondered why your chapter 6 hadn't shown up in my mailbox, when I spotted it for review, anyway. This chapter was good, with the introduction of the woman and stray dog. Your telling of her story was good and it was well written. Enjoyable read. faye
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Yes, I wondered why your chapter 6 hadn't shown up in my mailbox, when I spotted it for review, anyway. This chapter was good, with the introduction of the woman and stray dog. Your telling of her story was good and it was well written. Enjoyable read. faye
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
This was interesting. JOe is probably better off if he died quietly without suffering. Now, who is the new lady with a dog? I hope they don't eat it to survive! :)
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This was interesting. JOe is probably better off if he died quietly without suffering. Now, who is the new lady with a dog? I hope they don't eat it to survive! :)
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from seaglass
I thought I read every chapter but I Seemed to have missed one. I will go back to your profile and pick it up.
When you refer to the paroles it reminded me of a true story. In 1983, there was a major earthquake in Idaho (6.9) and Challis, where I lived was the center. The town bordered a national forest. Suddenly dozens of wanted and escaped criminals poured out of that forest. No one had known they were hiding there. I've never felt comfortable camping in a national forest since. I would think the same might be true with national parks.
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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I thought I read every chapter but I Seemed to have missed one. I will go back to your profile and pick it up.
When you refer to the paroles it reminded me of a true story. In 1983, there was a major earthquake in Idaho (6.9) and Challis, where I lived was the center. The town bordered a national forest. Suddenly dozens of wanted and escaped criminals poured out of that forest. No one had known they were hiding there. I've never felt comfortable camping in a national forest since. I would think the same might be true with national parks.
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Something may have happened when the messages were temporarily lost. Hardly anyone reviewed chapter 6. We're so insecure. Hahaha. I thought everyone thought chapter 5 was terrible and I was banished!! That sounds like a cool and chilling short story. Earthquakes and escaped convicts sound like good times!
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There were two deaths, but the outlaws running out of the forests like cockroaches, was the shocking part. They had no news and thought the world was ending. We had after shocks for days.
