Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

You made me smile kiwisteveh
You are so right once you get a pile of leaves raked another gust of win comes along and blows them right back
The best to you in the contest.
Smile for been know by Fanstory.
Gert

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014

Thanks, Gert.

The leaves are falling as I write this.....

Steve

Comment from Carrie Carson

Excellent

Writer of the Month!! Congratulations! I like this, too, I wonder if it's my Fall birthday that makes it my favorite. Of course, it'd be fair to say I spent a fair time, in youth, falling...

All Time Best, I can sure see why. Leaves do tease and scamper this pretty damn good, the more I ponder it, the more I like it. Thanks, :) Carrie

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014

Thanks, Carrie.

Glad you enjoyed this mischievous little piece.

Haiku are not really my strong point - I do better with rhyme and meter, but I like to have a go at these from time to time.

Steve

Comment from ccto12

Excellent

Very well written haiku. Made me laugh because always there are leaves that get away from one when raking...like they're mocking or teasing as you so eloquently put it. Perfect image.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014

Thanks for the kind ords.

Steve

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A match, burning leaves, and the house too. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a smooth flow of words. Good job.

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2014

Thanks, Charlie.

Steve

reply by c_lucas on 12-Mar-2014

You're welcome, Steve. Charlie

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Oh those playful leaves running away from the rake. There are so fun to watch as they scamper away, but not so much fun to pile up. Great imagery in your verse.
I especially like "teasing leaves." Looks like the contest is closed and a decision expected soon. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014

Thank you for the kind words we are surrounded by poplar trees here - there's only a trickle falling at the moment, but soon o become a torrent!

Steve

Comment from Raoul D'Harmental

Good

Hi,

This is a good haiku with the concept of autumn leaves blowing hither thither. All the best in the contest and thanks for sharing this.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks, Raoul!

Steve

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

excellent pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
While personification is not encouraged in traditional haiku, I personally love it :-)
scamper is the perfect verb choice to describe the movement and to create a playful tone
great assonance in flailing rake
and a delightful satori line
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks, Brooke

You are right, I don't like being bound by the traditional rule-book, so I write what 'feels' good.

Steve

Comment from Angel Blessings

Excellent

what a nice piece. good imagery, good flow and good presentation, good example of a Haiku. thank you for sharing Angel Blessings

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks, AB

Steve

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a great little haiku for the contest. It is written in the correct format. Good luck to you in the contest.
~Teresa~

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks, Teresa.

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

They may be teasing but we don't always see the funny side! It's a never-ending job... raking leaves in autumn; and I think we are going to get an early autumn this year, so your haiku is most appropriate, Steve. Good luck, Giddy

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014

Thanks, Giddy

As well as our own trees, we are surrounded by huge poplars so it's a matter of sit back and enjoy - the rake is rarely used. The goat, however, does make an excellent mulcher - trouble is she will mulch any plant in sight as well!

Steve