Homeless Jesus
What would He think?35 total reviews
Comment from Bayberry
This is both dramatic in presentation and emotionally powerful in message. I used to run a homeless assistance program in Joplin, Missouri, and your words touch my heart and bring back a lot of memories about the people I recruited in shelters for the Life Skills/employment assistance class I was teaching. Homelessness is a tragedy. It's been said that if the churches were doing their job there would be no needy people. However, sadly, people are increasingly falling away from the churches. But 'this too, shall pass' and it won't be like that one day in the future. Thank you for sharing this exceptional posting with FS readers. Blessings always, Janet
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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This is both dramatic in presentation and emotionally powerful in message. I used to run a homeless assistance program in Joplin, Missouri, and your words touch my heart and bring back a lot of memories about the people I recruited in shelters for the Life Skills/employment assistance class I was teaching. Homelessness is a tragedy. It's been said that if the churches were doing their job there would be no needy people. However, sadly, people are increasingly falling away from the churches. But 'this too, shall pass' and it won't be like that one day in the future. Thank you for sharing this exceptional posting with FS readers. Blessings always, Janet
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you for taking the time to read it and sharing your story with me, Janet. I am truly grateful.
Comment from TheWriteTeach
This piece, Dean, without a doubt, is exceptional. Well-chosen words provide rhymes, rhythm, and a smooth flow that form a synergistic element to create thought-provoking stanzas and deliver a strong message. The magnitude of the message, in this particular case, dwarfs the exceptional writing behind the message. However, isn't this the perfection every writer strives to accomplish? Doesn't every writer want the creation, itself, to be in the limelight rather than the writing behind the creation? Awesome work, my friend. If I could give you two sixers for this one, I would. You'll have to settle for one.
Suzanne
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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This piece, Dean, without a doubt, is exceptional. Well-chosen words provide rhymes, rhythm, and a smooth flow that form a synergistic element to create thought-provoking stanzas and deliver a strong message. The magnitude of the message, in this particular case, dwarfs the exceptional writing behind the message. However, isn't this the perfection every writer strives to accomplish? Doesn't every writer want the creation, itself, to be in the limelight rather than the writing behind the creation? Awesome work, my friend. If I could give you two sixers for this one, I would. You'll have to settle for one.
Suzanne
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you Suzanne. I'll settle for the simple fact that you enjoyed it, my friend. That in and of itself is reward enough for me!
Thanks for such an awesome review...
Comment from TAB_that's me
I love this poem and the message it carries. We must not judge. We can't help them all but still we can't judge them either. We can only send them love and pray for them and them when we can.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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I love this poem and the message it carries. We must not judge. We can't help them all but still we can't judge them either. We can only send them love and pray for them and them when we can.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Teresa, very much. I couldn't agree with you more...
Comment from DonandVicki
A well written poetic essay about what would Jesus do?. I'm quite sure he wouldn't act as we do, Giving the homeless a wide berth. Although Jesus did say there will always be poor, we can at least empathise and help where we can. Don
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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A well written poetic essay about what would Jesus do?. I'm quite sure he wouldn't act as we do, Giving the homeless a wide berth. Although Jesus did say there will always be poor, we can at least empathise and help where we can. Don
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Yes, you're absolutely right, Don. Luke 6:30 says, "Give to every man that asks of you; and of him that takes away your goods ask them not again." Giving to those in need is the least that we can do.
Thanks for the review, my friend.
Comment from manicblue
You've used some clever passages with this sad but awesome poem. What saddens me the most is nobody got close enough to see that it was a statue, and spitting venom about another human being less fortunate.
This was well written. I wrote a poem about a homeless man, and used a wonderfully touching song by Phil Collins that nails it on the head - I can't remember it's name, may be "sad sad world".
Tonight I'll say a special prayer. Thank you for speaking out.
mb xoxo
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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You've used some clever passages with this sad but awesome poem. What saddens me the most is nobody got close enough to see that it was a statue, and spitting venom about another human being less fortunate.
This was well written. I wrote a poem about a homeless man, and used a wonderfully touching song by Phil Collins that nails it on the head - I can't remember it's name, may be "sad sad world".
Tonight I'll say a special prayer. Thank you for speaking out.
mb xoxo
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank for sharing your thoughts with me on this topic, manicblue. It's one I feel very passionate about, and I'm pleased to see that you do as well.
Thanks again, my friend.
Comment from reconciled
It is apparent to me....after years of "finding" truth in His Word, listening to others interpretations of the same....that He is right about everything....He says "many"...and "few"....more than once....with shocking conclusion. His Word is life history....all leading to Jesus The Christ...Savior. "Christian"...the name alone tastes beautiful.....and what does it mean..."to be like Christ"....hmm....so....what was He like...? God forgive us all.....-headshake-.....every account given of His sojourn in flesh..."He went about doing good"....restoration....making whole....helping...all who asked. He says...if you are asked...give it...and even more. I am sick at heart...at the stark contrast carried by "some" who wear His Name....."few" He says....more than once....finally find the Kingdom. Great write Dean....love Michael
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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It is apparent to me....after years of "finding" truth in His Word, listening to others interpretations of the same....that He is right about everything....He says "many"...and "few"....more than once....with shocking conclusion. His Word is life history....all leading to Jesus The Christ...Savior. "Christian"...the name alone tastes beautiful.....and what does it mean..."to be like Christ"....hmm....so....what was He like...? God forgive us all.....-headshake-.....every account given of His sojourn in flesh..."He went about doing good"....restoration....making whole....helping...all who asked. He says...if you are asked...give it...and even more. I am sick at heart...at the stark contrast carried by "some" who wear His Name....."few" He says....more than once....finally find the Kingdom. Great write Dean....love Michael
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much for all of your thoughtful comments, Michael. You are right, we all must strive to be like Christ. And while none of us can ever hope to attain His perfection, it is the experience of that journey that defines us as a person in the end.
Blessings to you, my friend.
Comment from royowen
Scripture says " if you did not do it to the least of these, you did not do it me" Jesus words ( my paraphrasing! ) I have seen the homeless sleeping where they could get some modicum of shelter all over the world + the beggars in the streets, and it sill moves me deeply, and I find it confronting! I wrote a poem called " I hear ", it covers this subject! A really well written, well presented poem, with great artwork, and a wonderful, rhyming, rhythmic work! Well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Scripture says " if you did not do it to the least of these, you did not do it me" Jesus words ( my paraphrasing! ) I have seen the homeless sleeping where they could get some modicum of shelter all over the world + the beggars in the streets, and it sill moves me deeply, and I find it confronting! I wrote a poem called " I hear ", it covers this subject! A really well written, well presented poem, with great artwork, and a wonderful, rhyming, rhythmic work! Well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thanks for such a thoughtful review, Roy. I am very glad that you enjoyed this one!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, Dean, the thing is, we write, we speak, but it's not possible for a man (or woman) to change a heart - all we can do is pray for those with hearts of stone...
As always, your presentation is magnificent, and the poem addresses homelessness in the same sort of way I did with my poem, "The Stranger" (published). We're on the same wavelength.
Wonderful job! I enjoyed it immensely.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Ah, Dean, the thing is, we write, we speak, but it's not possible for a man (or woman) to change a heart - all we can do is pray for those with hearts of stone...
As always, your presentation is magnificent, and the poem addresses homelessness in the same sort of way I did with my poem, "The Stranger" (published). We're on the same wavelength.
Wonderful job! I enjoyed it immensely.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much for your wonderful comments, Dawn. I am truly grateful.
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You're most welcome.
Comment from Ben Colder
Reminds me of the day Jesus had the last supper saying one among them was a devil and would betray him. It would be the one that dip his bread. Well done poet. Good to you channel your beautiful talent to the light of the world. Blessings
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Reminds me of the day Jesus had the last supper saying one among them was a devil and would betray him. It would be the one that dip his bread. Well done poet. Good to you channel your beautiful talent to the light of the world. Blessings
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Ben. I can't take all of the credit for the inspiration, though. A writer on Fanstory called 4hisglory gave me the inspiration. Check her out, it's well worth it.
God bless, my friend...
Comment from juliaSjames
I suppose that anything that threatens our way of life creates discomfort - homelessness, beggars, mental and physical illness, old age - the list goes on. Somewhere in our magical thinking, we believe that poverty and misfortune are contagious.
An excellent write, Dean. I find your author notes compelling.
One piece of spag in the first stanza - "walking past past".
Jesus told the parable of the Good Samaritan for a reason. Compassion is part of the human psyche - we fall into sin if we ignore our true nature.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I suppose that anything that threatens our way of life creates discomfort - homelessness, beggars, mental and physical illness, old age - the list goes on. Somewhere in our magical thinking, we believe that poverty and misfortune are contagious.
An excellent write, Dean. I find your author notes compelling.
One piece of spag in the first stanza - "walking past past".
Jesus told the parable of the Good Samaritan for a reason. Compassion is part of the human psyche - we fall into sin if we ignore our true nature.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for such a wonderfully detailed review, Julia, and for pointing out that error for me. I have made the correction, and I'm very grateful to you for pointing it out to me. Don't know how I did that, LOL.
Thanks, again!
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Your indignation got the better of you! I admire you and the stand you took in this write, Dean.
