Counting Dogs
Observing dogs9 total reviews
Comment from Andrewajgblue
The poem is so stark and harsh , I know it's like this , but your poem catches the reality so keenly , it's really well done , it did disturb after I read though , but thank you
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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The poem is so stark and harsh , I know it's like this , but your poem catches the reality so keenly , it's really well done , it did disturb after I read though , but thank you
Comment Written 05-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review of my work
Comment from N.M Bernia
Those poor last two dogs :(
Great work, it is well written and well rhymed. I'm not a poet, but I was wondering: is the second line is supposed to rhyme with any of the others? I couldn't find any.
Love the picture; keep up the good work
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Those poor last two dogs :(
Great work, it is well written and well rhymed. I'm not a poet, but I was wondering: is the second line is supposed to rhyme with any of the others? I couldn't find any.
Love the picture; keep up the good work
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the kind review of my work. In this type of poem none of the lines have to rhyme at all... I just happened to make those few rhyme for affect. This format was all based on syllable count for each line ... 9-8-7-6-5-4-3-2-1. Thanks again
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I like the affect the rhyming lines made :)
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Nine dogs stand behind HIGH metal gate
Eight now left as one's adopted
Seven dread THEIR PENDING fate
Six QUIVER AS THEY wait
Five STAND STILL AND PRAY
Four PUSHED AWAY
Three REMAIN
Two will
Die.
A very powerful message. Suggestions only. No disrespect intended.
REGARDS:
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Nine dogs stand behind HIGH metal gate
Eight now left as one's adopted
Seven dread THEIR PENDING fate
Six QUIVER AS THEY wait
Five STAND STILL AND PRAY
Four PUSHED AWAY
Three REMAIN
Two will
Die.
A very powerful message. Suggestions only. No disrespect intended.
REGARDS:
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Great suggestions and thanks so much for your kind rating and review.
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Dear Judith: My pleasure to help out. Well deserved. Do drop by sometime. Just invented new sonnet form called a CARRET. Check out the contest. Thanks.
XXOO Steve
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I will do. I work with animals..have to go meet with a family and assist as their Great Dane crosses the "Rainbow Bridge" .. sad day--I should be filled with emotions.. a writing day indeed. Thanks for the invite.
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Dear Judith: Am posting 'Mule' very soon. Stay tuned. Thanks.
XXOO Steve
PS: I hear that 'Giant George' has passed on
Comment from Righteous Riter
This piece meets the criteria of the Nonet poem as the syllable count descends from nine syllable to one. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with gate/fate. Good complimentary photo followed by a sad message.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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This piece meets the criteria of the Nonet poem as the syllable count descends from nine syllable to one. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with gate/fate. Good complimentary photo followed by a sad message.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind review
Comment from zanya
O-h-h so sad to see our beloved canines left to this fate and forgotten when they give us humans so much love and loyalty and happiness
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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O-h-h so sad to see our beloved canines left to this fate and forgotten when they give us humans so much love and loyalty and happiness
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for your kind review of my work
Comment from buzclick
Sensitive piece. Good for ad for pet adoption.
Well written, good form.
I get my dogs from people too lazy to go to the pound. They just drop them off to die but I feed them.
Bones is the resident now. Good dog runs like a deer. That's how he learned to run watching deer.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Sensitive piece. Good for ad for pet adoption.
Well written, good form.
I get my dogs from people too lazy to go to the pound. They just drop them off to die but I feed them.
Bones is the resident now. Good dog runs like a deer. That's how he learned to run watching deer.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for your kind review of my work. Thanks for giving Bones a forever home.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, Judith, you did an excellent job writing this nonet that counts down the dogs until the final breath of the last two. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, Judith, you did an excellent job writing this nonet that counts down the dogs until the final breath of the last two. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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thank you so much for the kind review of my work
Comment from seaglass
This is a great poem to remind us that dogs in shelters are euthanized every day. I have always picked my pets from shelters but even when many of us do, there are never enough homes. Using numbers and the decreasing lines do a great job of making the point.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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This is a great poem to remind us that dogs in shelters are euthanized every day. I have always picked my pets from shelters but even when many of us do, there are never enough homes. Using numbers and the decreasing lines do a great job of making the point.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Glasstruth
Sad, indeed. Considering that many of these dogs are abandoned. It just breaks my heart. Very clever in your numbering their fate. Well done! Les
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Sad, indeed. Considering that many of these dogs are abandoned. It just breaks my heart. Very clever in your numbering their fate. Well done! Les
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review of my work
