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Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "Gateway to the West"
'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from dragonpoet
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Easy rhymes and good flow make this poem a tourist guide to St. Louis. It sounds like the poem I wrote about Chicago.

I have been up in the Arch. I have 2nd cousins that live in St. Louis.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
    Thanks dragonpoet for this awesome review. I am glad you enjoyed the Arch and the poem. :-) Carolyn
reply by dragonpoet on 06-Mar-2014
    You're welcome.

    Joan
Comment from boxergirl
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I like your poem about Gateway to the West. It makes me won't to hop on a plane and check it out. Nice AABB rhyme scheme to make it flow smoothly from start to finish. 8-)

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
    Hi boxergirl, I am happy you liked the poem, just fly on over any time. :-) Carolyn
Comment from c_lucas
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St Louis has carved its way through history. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good job.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
    Thanks for this super review. I am glad you enjoyed the read. :-) Carolyn
reply by c_lucas on 05-Mar-2014
    You're welcome, Carolyn. Charlie
Comment from chicken scratch love
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This is a very nice and 'pride-driven' piece! I can see it on a welcome brochure of some sorts. Well written, great word choice and flow! Thanks for the share.

 Comment Written 05-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 05-Mar-2014
    Thanks for your awesome comments. I am delighted you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn
Comment from nancyjam
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I enjoyed this poem about The Arch in
St Louis. You give the reader a lot of
information in well rhymed quatrains.
I did visit St Louis once - great city.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
    I am glad you enjoyed the Arch, I live about 40 mi west but see I often. Thanks for the great review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from lakeport
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Gateway to the west, indeed that's a beautiful city. I been up in the arch,a beautiful view from up there.
A beautiful expressed poem, nice rhyming. I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Hugs!Lakeport.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
    Thanks for this wonderful review, maybe we were there on the same day. :-) The world seems small sometimes. It is a great place to take visitors. :-) Carolyn
reply by lakeport on 02-Mar-2014
    your welcome.Hugs!lakport
Comment from adewpearl
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solid use of rhyming couplets
Six Flag's - should be Six Flags'
good alliteration in phrases like perhaps the planetarium
I love all your specific references to St. Louis - you create
a great feel for the city and the arch :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Thanks Brooke, I am happy you enjoyed this one, will fix Flags'
Comment from Righteous Riter
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with west/best...game/fame. Good description and alliteration. The flow is consistent for the most part. Here and there you could take out a syllable or two for a better over all flow. The photo is great and the message is thought provoking. Good work.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Thanks so much for this fine review. I appreciate your comments and fine edits, I will take a look. :-)
Comment from humpwhistle
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Your arch is a good choice. Such an American icon--the gateway that led to the coast-to-coast destiny of our nation.
Good luck in the contest. The rules to this one seem pretty strict.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Thank you Lee for this wonderful review. I hope I have met the criteria for the contest, but at any rate, it was a good writing project. I appreciate you, :-)
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
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I really enjoyed this lovely ode to a view that I enjoyed from my first apartment. It is very well written and evokes fond memories.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    I am delighted the poem brought back good memories to you. I moved to St Louis as a teenager when the last piece was going into place. Awesome,