Bumbershoots and Slickers
a slightly modified quatern169 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Brooke - modified or otherwise this sounds like a good poem to me. I have never heard of bumbershoots or slickers. Sounds good though. A nice poem - brave and bold, sailed the seas, both good alliteration. An enjoyable poem. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Hi Brooke - modified or otherwise this sounds like a good poem to me. I have never heard of bumbershoots or slickers. Sounds good though. A nice poem - brave and bold, sailed the seas, both good alliteration. An enjoyable poem. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
That picture Miranda took is just adorable and it looks like Sawyer is not a little bit too happy or confused.
I found your tail/poem to be written very well in so enjoyable was the reading. The rhythm flowed like a melody so smooth like a leaf on a meandering stream. The rhymes were neither forced, labored or strained which made for easy reading. Thank you so much for posting this poem, Brooke.
May you have a good one always.
Alex
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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That picture Miranda took is just adorable and it looks like Sawyer is not a little bit too happy or confused.
I found your tail/poem to be written very well in so enjoyable was the reading. The rhythm flowed like a melody so smooth like a leaf on a meandering stream. The rhymes were neither forced, labored or strained which made for easy reading. Thank you so much for posting this poem, Brooke.
May you have a good one always.
Alex
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Alex, the first time they took him out in the rain a couple days before this, his reaction was to yell, "All done. All done. Wet!" as he ran to go back in the door. LOL Thanks so much :-) Brooke
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Thank you for sharing Brooke That is so precious, your Sawyer.
Alex
Comment from nancyjam
A delightful child-like fantasy for
a rainy day. Rain and puddles, a little
boy's dream -
Imaginative images and your usual
flawless meter and rhyme. Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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A delightful child-like fantasy for
a rainy day. Rain and puddles, a little
boy's dream -
Imaginative images and your usual
flawless meter and rhyme. Nancy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rama devi
Charming! Love the closing twist--a worm--a whale--all a matter of perception. I also enjoyed the eloquent musicality of the repeated line:
when bumbershoots and slickers fail
Superb smattering of alliteration here and there, especially S and P
Good rhyme and slant rhyme. Flawless meter and fine fluid flow.
Sounds great read aloud. Adorable pic, too.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Charming! Love the closing twist--a worm--a whale--all a matter of perception. I also enjoyed the eloquent musicality of the repeated line:
when bumbershoots and slickers fail
Superb smattering of alliteration here and there, especially S and P
Good rhyme and slant rhyme. Flawless meter and fine fluid flow.
Sounds great read aloud. Adorable pic, too.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thanks so very much, rama devi :-) It's always good to hear from you :-) Brooke
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, I am so happy you defined bumpershoot for us - that was going to be my first question (LOL). Good heavens, woman, what a vocabulary! I have to tell you, in addition to your fantastic imagination, what amazes me is your ability to always, ALWAYS, portray whatever you write in such a fascinating way (even the 'dark' stuff)! You're amazing, Brooke. Who would ever think of looking for a whale in a puddle?
Why, a kid, of course! (Or a grandmother with the heart of one. :)
Much affection, Dawn XXOO
(wish I had a six for this!!!)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Oh, I am so happy you defined bumpershoot for us - that was going to be my first question (LOL). Good heavens, woman, what a vocabulary! I have to tell you, in addition to your fantastic imagination, what amazes me is your ability to always, ALWAYS, portray whatever you write in such a fascinating way (even the 'dark' stuff)! You're amazing, Brooke. Who would ever think of looking for a whale in a puddle?
Why, a kid, of course! (Or a grandmother with the heart of one. :)
Much affection, Dawn XXOO
(wish I had a six for this!!!)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Dawn, thank you so much :-) What? You never look for whales in your puddles? LOL ;-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
Ha! Good to know what a bumbershoot is. Nice quatrain styled poem with an ABAB rhyme scheme. The repetition of the line "when bumbershoots and slickers fail" adds nicely to the rhythm. 8-)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Ha! Good to know what a bumbershoot is. Nice quatrain styled poem with an ABAB rhyme scheme. The repetition of the line "when bumbershoots and slickers fail" adds nicely to the rhythm. 8-)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Your title was so fascinating, Brooke, had to read it. WHAT is are bumbershoots and slickers?? I bet they are something simple that we call something else, but I loved those names! Lovely, wonderful poem, (I have just read you authors notes!!! LOL I am going to have to remember that one!) An excellent poem. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Your title was so fascinating, Brooke, had to read it. WHAT is are bumbershoots and slickers?? I bet they are something simple that we call something else, but I loved those names! Lovely, wonderful poem, (I have just read you authors notes!!! LOL I am going to have to remember that one!) An excellent poem. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, sandra :-) Brooke
Comment from tony bronk
Clearly a child's imagination during a rainstorm, while wearing a raincoat and using an umbrella. Or, an imaginative child minded, spirited adult? There is no limit to the imagination, young or old, in rain or shine. My imagination has not halted any, for if it had, I wouldn't be much of an abstract artist. Good rhyme scheme. Good playful poem.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Clearly a child's imagination during a rainstorm, while wearing a raincoat and using an umbrella. Or, an imaginative child minded, spirited adult? There is no limit to the imagination, young or old, in rain or shine. My imagination has not halted any, for if it had, I wouldn't be much of an abstract artist. Good rhyme scheme. Good playful poem.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you so very much, Tony :-) Brooke
Comment from manicblue
Each poem you write is such an adventure! This one is like going back into the past when all that is important are things like bumbershoots and slickers (lovely words) :)
Lucretia xoxo
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Each poem you write is such an adventure! This one is like going back into the past when all that is important are things like bumbershoots and slickers (lovely words) :)
Lucretia xoxo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Lucretia, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
What a splendid word 'bumbershoot' is! I have never heard it before! This is a wonderfully whimsical poem and the falling repetition of the quatern suits it so well. One learns something new every day! Bumbershoots and slickers! What a lovely way to start my day!
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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What a splendid word 'bumbershoot' is! I have never heard it before! This is a wonderfully whimsical poem and the falling repetition of the quatern suits it so well. One learns something new every day! Bumbershoots and slickers! What a lovely way to start my day!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thanks so very much, tfawcus. Rent Chitty Chitty Bang Bang and pay attention to Dick Van Dyke's songs and you'll hear the word again :-) Brooke
