Bumbershoots and Slickers
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Comment from Caressa_08
The rain has finally come there....Hope not too much, to compensate for the very long wait, like causing flooding I heard....what a delightful rhyming poem & picture with Sawyer's friend, Nora to highlight...
An appealing last stanza for what small boys might like to get their hands on, a worm & tell others about..
Caressa
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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The rain has finally come there....Hope not too much, to compensate for the very long wait, like causing flooding I heard....what a delightful rhyming poem & picture with Sawyer's friend, Nora to highlight...
An appealing last stanza for what small boys might like to get their hands on, a worm & tell others about..
Caressa
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Caressa, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from califdot
I like this poem a lot. Your abab rhyme pattern, except in the last stanza, works well. Actually that is my preferred rhyme pattern. The poem flows nicely. The picture you have chosen to go with your poem works really well. They complement each other nicely. Good job! Congratulations on your poem receiving "recognized" award.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I like this poem a lot. Your abab rhyme pattern, except in the last stanza, works well. Actually that is my preferred rhyme pattern. The poem flows nicely. The picture you have chosen to go with your poem works really well. They complement each other nicely. Good job! Congratulations on your poem receiving "recognized" award.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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califdot, thank you for your thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
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Your welcome!
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Brooke,
Oh, the power of a child's imagination! For most people, it would appear to be a challenge, trying to hold onto that magical ability through our adult years. Reality tends to strip the mind down to its basic needs, well, except for writers, lol. I loved this portrayal of a child's ability to transform the world he perceives. An enjoyable read, thanks. Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Oh, the power of a child's imagination! For most people, it would appear to be a challenge, trying to hold onto that magical ability through our adult years. Reality tends to strip the mind down to its basic needs, well, except for writers, lol. I loved this portrayal of a child's ability to transform the world he perceives. An enjoyable read, thanks. Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Bill, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from fairy77
that is too adorable. It was the only poem I read and it was funny. Thanks for sharing and it's like a skate rink outside:)Were expecting snow!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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that is too adorable. It was the only poem I read and it was funny. Thanks for sharing and it's like a skate rink outside:)Were expecting snow!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I'm so glad this gave you a laugh, Beth. Thanks so much :-) Brooke
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Thanks Brooke I'm feeling sorta stressed because everyone staring at me parents included. Think their real strange:(beth hugs.Just watched Yankees they won!
Comment from smudge
An excellent poem describing the world through a child's eyes. The puddles and the worms were very imaginative. A well presented posting
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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An excellent poem describing the world through a child's eyes. The puddles and the worms were very imaginative. A well presented posting
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Smudge :-) Brooke
Comment from l.raven
HI Brooke, well it looks like they are enjoying the rain...not sure if Sawyer is trying to get inside...LOL...a truly wonderful poem...and I so love the picture...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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HI Brooke, well it looks like they are enjoying the rain...not sure if Sawyer is trying to get inside...LOL...a truly wonderful poem...and I so love the picture...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Linda, thank you so very much :-) Sawyer is still warming up to the whole water falling from the sky thing. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
Great inventively discovered language in this imaginative and inspired poem! I shall lock it away in my storehouse! The rhyme abcb is sound and proximate and not so proximate still ok. The rhythmic meter is tight! Good one Brooke, Roy.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Great inventively discovered language in this imaginative and inspired poem! I shall lock it away in my storehouse! The rhyme abcb is sound and proximate and not so proximate still ok. The rhythmic meter is tight! Good one Brooke, Roy.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Roy, for your positive comments. Since a 4 means needs improvement, can I ask for clarification on what you'd like to see changed? Brooke
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
What a delightful poem. Imagination can run wild when it starts to rain, or for that matter, imagination can run wild on any given day. When you are a child, or a poet.
Bumbershoots and slickere, I like it. :-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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What a delightful poem. Imagination can run wild when it starts to rain, or for that matter, imagination can run wild on any given day. When you are a child, or a poet.
Bumbershoots and slickere, I like it. :-) Carolyn
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Carolyn, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from GracieAnn
Brooke, I bet they loved an excuse to dress up as CA finally gets some rain, but a little over the top sounds like. I enjoyed the meter, rhyme and the reasoning of a child well played. Great one. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Brooke, I bet they loved an excuse to dress up as CA finally gets some rain, but a little over the top sounds like. I enjoyed the meter, rhyme and the reasoning of a child well played. Great one. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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GracieAnn, thanks so much - yeah, I'm sure CA would prefer a bit less rain but a lot more frequently, but they sure do need this rain, so nobody's complaining, well, except my daughter, who hates rain. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from paulah60
Bumbershoot: never heard this one before but it's of those neat little words that you want to use again and again!
Oh, and those first couple of stanzas ... all gives new meaning to Peppa Pig jumping in muddy puddles!
'that wriggled by with plumpened tail'...just love this line!
As always, Brooke, an absolutely delightful read (for kids and adults alike)!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Bumbershoot: never heard this one before but it's of those neat little words that you want to use again and again!
Oh, and those first couple of stanzas ... all gives new meaning to Peppa Pig jumping in muddy puddles!
'that wriggled by with plumpened tail'...just love this line!
As always, Brooke, an absolutely delightful read (for kids and adults alike)!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Paula, thank you so much :-) Brooke
