The Tripod Of Priapus
It's FRY (the rogue) DAY25 total reviews
Comment from padumachitta
Hi, mud, is fun, when in the right arena...this poor man, the plight of the well hung..
there was a man from kent...
(do you know it?)
and
two guys stadning on a bridge peeing..
one say " wow, that water is cold"
the other replies "and deep"...
p.s. the statue...is that stew for dinner.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Hi, mud, is fun, when in the right arena...this poor man, the plight of the well hung..
there was a man from kent...
(do you know it?)
and
two guys stadning on a bridge peeing..
one say " wow, that water is cold"
the other replies "and deep"...
p.s. the statue...is that stew for dinner.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I know them both, my friend, and appreciate the humor. Many thanks.
Comment from paulah60
Oh David, David, David, hmmm looks like our dear Priapus has a case of the droops, perhaps? Just ascertained this from the pic. But the words stand 'erect' and proud my friend, and if I had a six, you'd get it for this! Alas, you'll have to rely on your own LMAO! I've just checked out the reviews and can see that there are some who have been, er, short-changed in this department, metaphorically speaking (of course)! A sense of impotency can drive others to try and diminish the might of the empowered. All I can say is if there's a warning that the content might offend your sensibilities, then don't fucking read it! Moralism does not constitute constructive criticism...Geez!
This is a highly skilled piece of writing: spot on meter and rhyme, and brilliant play on words. FUCKING BRILLIANT! Particularly love the second stanza (not just because I'M in it LOL!) but that classic little 'twerk my tongue'! You, dear man, have the gift of being able to take anything, and I mean ANYTHING, and mould it into a masterpiece without as much as a single 'dirty' word! And there are other classics in here: 'Will see my peak descending'; 'It keeps my big banana rig From dragging on the ground.'
I'll be posting a reciprocal tribute to my dear soul-sister P (the other wordmeister) next week (it's good to go, but I'm skint), and it will vindicate you, her, and ALL of us who honour words enough (as the ancients did) to let them out in all their glory, and who dare to...HAVE FUN! What audacity we have!!
Stand up and take a bow (oh...you are LOL). LOVE IT!
Cheers
Paula (the word twerker ;-})
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Oh David, David, David, hmmm looks like our dear Priapus has a case of the droops, perhaps? Just ascertained this from the pic. But the words stand 'erect' and proud my friend, and if I had a six, you'd get it for this! Alas, you'll have to rely on your own LMAO! I've just checked out the reviews and can see that there are some who have been, er, short-changed in this department, metaphorically speaking (of course)! A sense of impotency can drive others to try and diminish the might of the empowered. All I can say is if there's a warning that the content might offend your sensibilities, then don't fucking read it! Moralism does not constitute constructive criticism...Geez!
This is a highly skilled piece of writing: spot on meter and rhyme, and brilliant play on words. FUCKING BRILLIANT! Particularly love the second stanza (not just because I'M in it LOL!) but that classic little 'twerk my tongue'! You, dear man, have the gift of being able to take anything, and I mean ANYTHING, and mould it into a masterpiece without as much as a single 'dirty' word! And there are other classics in here: 'Will see my peak descending'; 'It keeps my big banana rig From dragging on the ground.'
I'll be posting a reciprocal tribute to my dear soul-sister P (the other wordmeister) next week (it's good to go, but I'm skint), and it will vindicate you, her, and ALL of us who honour words enough (as the ancients did) to let them out in all their glory, and who dare to...HAVE FUN! What audacity we have!!
Stand up and take a bow (oh...you are LOL). LOVE IT!
Cheers
Paula (the word twerker ;-})
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you VERY much, Paula, and as I just told Dawn, those who were actually a part of our little project/exercise carry more weight with me since we're the ones who know what it takes to compose one of these, and that the creativity is more, not less, in the construction.
You amaze me in your ability to always find the right thing to say, in your verse AND in your reviews. Thank you!
Comment from Dawn Munro
Good God, why don't we just burn a few books while we're at it?
David, this is brilliant, and shame on anyone who would claim to be a writer and try to censure another writer.
Let me hazard a wild guess and say those who would ignore the warning and then dare to criticize have some serious issues.
Brava. Had I a six, it would adorn this worthy poem.
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Good God, why don't we just burn a few books while we're at it?
David, this is brilliant, and shame on anyone who would claim to be a writer and try to censure another writer.
Let me hazard a wild guess and say those who would ignore the warning and then dare to criticize have some serious issues.
Brava. Had I a six, it would adorn this worthy poem.
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, my friend. Since you were one of those elite few who contributed, your praise means more. I appreciate it very much.
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My distinct pleasure (and HONOR)! Please check your PM's.
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Thank you, Dawn. :-)
Comment from Darshi04
Hahaha! Definitely rolling in the mud with you, figuratively. :P
I'll be honest I did not entirely understand this one, but it's weird in a hilarious way, I didn't find it offensive at all.
Can't say much, but I did enjoy reading it!
Happy Friday to ye!
~Darshi
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Hahaha! Definitely rolling in the mud with you, figuratively. :P
I'll be honest I did not entirely understand this one, but it's weird in a hilarious way, I didn't find it offensive at all.
Can't say much, but I did enjoy reading it!
Happy Friday to ye!
~Darshi
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Darshi. This has definitely been a mixed bag for readers, and any confusion may be fixed by reading the poems referenced in the notes.
Comment from Tatarka2
OK, so the Rogue is not my favorite of your poetic incarnations, but it was funny and the rhyming was appropriate and moved he poem along in a lyrical way. I think I'll be glad when the Rogue gets it out of his system and he "real" poet is back, but that's just me.
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OK, so the Rogue is not my favorite of your poetic incarnations, but it was funny and the rhyming was appropriate and moved he poem along in a lyrical way. I think I'll be glad when the Rogue gets it out of his system and he "real" poet is back, but that's just me.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Tatarka, I appreciate that, but I'd also appreciate not being graded down just because you don't like the content. Believe it or not, it's still not easy to do these.
I do, however, agree, that my more valuable work is not of this variety, but these are just as hard to compose.
Thanks, my friend, for taking a look. I do appreciate your thoughts.
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Very good point. You're right. It's not fair to downgrade your poems just because they're not my favorite content. I apologize.
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I hope that doesn't come across as nasty, my friend, because I don't mean it that way, but I do admit to getting a little irritated to see a docked star on a poem that takes as much craft as others, and then see six stars awarded to a 17-syllable sentence that I could write and post in 30 seconds. One of the vagaries of the site, I know, but one of my bugaboos. Thanks.
Comment from emrpoems
Was about to pass this one then I decided to put in my piece. I know there is a warning but I'd rather think that the persons on this site are respectable and that includes you.
I warned the ladies to leave you alone and apparently they did except that they had already submitted their piece when I did so. I was hoping hat gentleman that you could be you would have let it alone.
This does no good to to you or the ladies. I am from the old fashioned era and the ladies should not descend to this even if you do. Remember one day you will have children - maybe a daughter. Let's set the stage for them
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Was about to pass this one then I decided to put in my piece. I know there is a warning but I'd rather think that the persons on this site are respectable and that includes you.
I warned the ladies to leave you alone and apparently they did except that they had already submitted their piece when I did so. I was hoping hat gentleman that you could be you would have let it alone.
This does no good to to you or the ladies. I am from the old fashioned era and the ladies should not descend to this even if you do. Remember one day you will have children - maybe a daughter. Let's set the stage for them
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Noted...we'll agree to disagree about the nature of art, satire, and the ability to differentiate between what's real, what's not, and what influence a writing exercise will have on the moral development or degradation of people. In summary, emr, I respect your opinion, but I submit to you that this was a fun writing exercise between friends that harms none except for those who wish to be harmed by it. Thanks for your eloquent thoughts, which I appreciate. David
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I aree but I look forward to benefiting from the experts on this site and I feel that is the reason we are all here. I follow the writings of of those I feel fall into that category and I am disappointed when I come across such .I trust you will understand. PLEASE
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I understand that those are your feelings, but also understand that the warnings are posted so those who feel as you can avoid reading something that upsets their sensibilities or tastes. I also, as a 47-year old man, don't need a lecture on what I should or shouldn't post, or what is right or wrong. I appreciate very much that you hold my work (outside of this) in high regard, and hope you will continue to, but these poems are once a week for that reason, and placed in an adult category for the same reason. All that being said, I've noted your thoughts, I appreciate your perspective, and I've expressed my own. I hope you have a nice weekend.
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Thank you for your thoughts as a 47 year old man. Didn't know that was how they thought. always thought they wrote things their 18 year old daughters could read and enjoy. Glad to be enlightened
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I don't have an 18-year old daughter, so I'm not enlightening you about anything other than my own opinion that art doesn't all have to be about one thing or another, and also that I'm not a one-trick pony that will be harangued or corralled into writing anything except what I damn well please. I've written poems or lyrics for high school graduations, weddings, funerals, birthdays, anniversaries, friends, foes, and on occasion I may go beyond the pale. Deal with it...or don't.
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Thank you for being so kind to your 80 year ol granny
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Didn't know your age or gender, emr. Just honestly answering your comments with no intention of offending or putting off. I find that to be the best way to clear the air that an on-line site can haze over. My Dad is 80, my Mom is 77, and I'm a respectful son and citizen...period.
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I know from your poems that you are a respectful and responsible son and that is why I took the liberty of airing my views. I am so looking forward to sons of the soil like you to make a better world for us all before I leave here. Do try to understand.
Comment from Gloria ....
David, in truth this is a wonderfully cheeky riposte, as per your usual, chock full, or is that sock full, of internal rhymes and rhythm. This is where we ladies must faint at the beholding of such glorious magnitude and form. With one eye open of course, because His Himness is beyond comparison. I'm only thankful that you didn't retrieve a likeness of the mother of all Greek Gods --- Viagrapus.
So that's what a little exercise will do for the male member. Who knew? ;-)
Nice job, I can see you are quite practiced in the fine Art of Seduction.
Gloria
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David, in truth this is a wonderfully cheeky riposte, as per your usual, chock full, or is that sock full, of internal rhymes and rhythm. This is where we ladies must faint at the beholding of such glorious magnitude and form. With one eye open of course, because His Himness is beyond comparison. I'm only thankful that you didn't retrieve a likeness of the mother of all Greek Gods --- Viagrapus.
So that's what a little exercise will do for the male member. Who knew? ;-)
Nice job, I can see you are quite practiced in the fine Art of Seduction.
Gloria
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you, my friend. I'm afraid Viagrapus would be a veritable Godzilla compared to Priapus, who would be a gecko. ;-)
I have to admit I actually had to motivate myself to do this one, so perhaps it's time to rest the rogue for another appearance later. What do you think?
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My dearest man, I think this is one of your more brilliant ripostes, but sadly such fine art can be and is often misinterpreted. However, if you needed to motivate yourself then by all means a rest is what the good doctor calls for. I am only envious my ripostes didn't arouse such glory. ;-)
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Gloria, your contributions were just as worthy, but at that time there were so many coming in every week that I couldn't address them specifically. Just know that your work was noted, appreciated, and received many private standing ovations from the rogue and his gallery. Speaking of misinterpretations, this poem will probably be the poster child for it.
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Indeed it is -- the poster child that is. It only confirms in my mind what I have already known all along -- In most cases it is not the quality of writing that people rate so much as it is the content. But truth is, that is the fact about everything, isn't it?
If it weren't for the sculpture artwork no one likely would have thought a thing about it. The language was no more risqué than others that have been posted.
Oh, I'm not really envious either. It just seemed the right thing to write at the time.
Comment from rouskin
But I, however, stand alert,Erect and yet unbowed,
So much, you see, my legs are three,A tripod, high and proud.
Really well done Blessings, Rouskin
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But I, however, stand alert,Erect and yet unbowed,
So much, you see, my legs are three,A tripod, high and proud.
Really well done Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, rouskin! I appreciate it!
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
The balls of anyone reading a verse posted under these restraints and criticizing the content is beyond me, but there is no accounting for arrogance, or jealousy. The format is a perfect compliment as are the rhyme and meter. The wit and cleverness is unparalleled. Kenny
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The balls of anyone reading a verse posted under these restraints and criticizing the content is beyond me, but there is no accounting for arrogance, or jealousy. The format is a perfect compliment as are the rhyme and meter. The wit and cleverness is unparalleled. Kenny
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Kenny, well said, my friend, and many thanks for that. I really appreciate your support and complimentary comments.
Comment from Bruenor
The story is intriguing.At First read a little confusing but after rereading you get the message.While on the edge of being racy if understood,it is kind of funny in a adult bragging sort of way
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The story is intriguing.At First read a little confusing but after rereading you get the message.While on the edge of being racy if understood,it is kind of funny in a adult bragging sort of way
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you.
