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Viewing comments for Chapter 66 "Power walk"
'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway

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Comment from Righteous Riter
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stride
if you can't walk with pride
ride
This piece meets the criteria of the prompt as the syllable count is correct. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with walk/with. Clear message that is short and simple.

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
    I am glad you enjoyed this short piece and that you found it correctly written, your opinion means a lot to me, :-) Carolyn
Comment from nelliesellie
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I love the picture. I love the poem. You can tell an animals nature by the way they walk. Rabbits scurry every where they go. They are timid. The cheetah strides through the jungle. It still has fights. But it warns the other animals of it's power by the way it walks. Many will not even challenge him. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
    Thanks, I didn't win but I received wonderful reviews and comments such as yours. That means so much to me. :-) Carolyn
reply by nelliesellie on 28-Feb-2014
    We need more voters.
Comment from Just Alyx
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I bet those in wheelchairs loved this one as a cool declaration of never losing self-confidence in each their own story. This is even better than a message in a bottle. That cat's also an excellent emblem for endurance and improvising, so good entry, and with or without the pic. Much luck in the booth, poet-author. Perfect title.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    Thank you for this incredible review. I am delighted you enjoyed Power walk
reply by Just Alyx on 02-Mar-2014
    I'm sorry, I did reply to you earlier but it got lost in the road works somewhere. You're welcome; it was a refreshing approach :)
Comment from BeasPeas
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An original thought and how true. Stride with pride or ride. Beautiful image. Your piece isn't contrived. Interesting for the reader.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    Glad you liked it and thanks for the review.
Comment from Orphan33
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Nice 1-6-1. Great words which lead to a simple message. Good luck in the contest and in all of your writing adventures.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    Thank you so much for this great review.
Comment from Harborvu
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Pretty much sums up sage advice for anyone who needs to improve their air of confidence. "Ride" is ambiguous of course, as expected of such a short poem, but I envision the person who cannot show pride being relegated to the bus!

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 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    what a neat review you have left me for this one. Thank you
Comment from Smoothiecool
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good luck in the contest
well done
your 1-6-1 rhyme conforms to the rules
your words tell the picture if one can't walk with pride then ride
cheers Smoothiecool

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    I appreciate your wonderful comments.
reply by Smoothiecool on 27-Feb-2014
    welcome..SC
Comment from jmdg1954
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Stride
If you can't walk with pride
Ride

Pretty cool photo. Word selection and poem details are perfect for the photo. It's difficult to review these type of contest entries...

Good luck in the contest... John

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    Hi John, there isn't much to review for this type of contest entry, as you said. But I am so happy you read and commented so positively on Power Walk. :-)
Comment from adewpearl
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Good pairing of photo and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable form
The three lines all end in a strong rhyme, as required by the contest
good action verb choices in delivering this advice
Brooke

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    Thanks Brooke for this wonderful review, :-)
Comment from GracieAnn
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This Rhyme That 1-6-1 writing prompt entry fulfills the elements of the contest with all three lines ending in rhyme, and it maintains the proper syllable count. It has a sensible meaning, as well. All the best in the contest! :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
    Thanks GracieAnn for the review and good wishes. :-)