Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I knew Jenny would succeed. But, she lost valuable time waffling about killing him. That is a weakness she could ill afford. Help will come eventually. But she needs to tie them both up. Karen

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2023

Thanks, Karen for this awesome review. Gretchen

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 23-Oct-2023

I will keep reading

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Yay! It feels so good to strike back. I hope Patrick is dead. I hate it when the victim drops the weapon after the first blow. Don't you know he is going to get up again? You have to finish the job.

Well done. I'm looking forward to the conclusion of your book.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

Thank you so much. I'm with you. Never let your guard down. Gretchen

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Why is it that people always want to get someone's attention before attacking? It truly doesn't make sense, but they most always do it. But it's always so fulfilling when the good guys start getting even. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

It was a very television or movie moment, but Jenny would never let Patrick go after her brother again. Gretchen

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Great chapter, Gretchen!
You're writing is captivating. It doesn't matter when you pop in on a chapter; it never disappoints! I know I've said that before, but to me, that's the makeup of an exceptional writer! Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

Well, John, that makes me so happy. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Gretchen

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

This has been a great read and so good to see Jenny finally getting an upper hand. Just one little teeny spag...Cold s(w)eat collected on her brow...Well done.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

Thanks so much for this. And for catching the edit. Very appreciated. Gretchen

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

This is a very good story about standing up for yourself, even if it means harming a vicious person instead of turning the other cheek. Jenny would never have hit Patrick if he hadn't hurt her brother and raped her. If it had been just a problem with uninvited guests in a snowstorm, Patrick wouldn't have been a monster that need stopping. Well written story although I think when someone is speaking and doing things without any input from another person, it should all be in one paragraph. You have a lot of one-line paragraphs when people are conversing, but you need some longer ones as well. Also, you have one line that says . . . cold (seat) collected on her brow. . .

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

Thanks Carol. I will go back and try to rework those paragraphs. Gretchen

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Gripping and powerful chapter. Patrick had it coming to him. In point of fact Jenny has liberated Fin from his brother's control. Well done. I'm glad they have been saved from further evil from Patrick.
Wendy
Edit: Cold seat collected on her brow (sweat)
He eyes went to the poker (His)

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

Thanks for this. Thanks for the edits. I appreciate the help. Very true about fin being liberated. Gretchen

Comment from T B Botts

Excellent

Hi Gretchen,
finally! I was so glad to see that the good guys got the upper hand. I hate it when the creeps seem to get away with everything. You never know how things are going to play out. Bullies forget that what goes around comes around, they're too full of themselves to realize that there is a law of sowing and reaping. Well done gal. I've really enjoyed this story.
Have a blessed day.
Tom

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

Thanks so much. It wasn't a pretty story by any means. Karma is a you know what. Lol. Appreciate you sticking with it. Gretchen

Comment from royowen

Excellent

There's something satisfying about a bully who has mono soul being subdued, I think God is the only one who could, Jesus still loved Judas even though he betrayed him, it would be a miracle if someone loved him, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
Typo : cold s(w)eat collected.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

Still hope for Fin but Patrick not so much. Thank you for this. Gretchen

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Great chapter. Jenny and Jeremy finally was able to take control. Patrick got what he deserved, but I hope he's alive and goes to prison. Poor Fin was just a pawn, but he deserves punishment, too.

-Cold seat [sweat]

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

Thanks for the edit. Appreciate this nice review. Gretchen