A Madness of Merriment
a bit of whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
First of all I love the photography chosen to accompany this piece, so adorable! Secondly, I feel your choice of a bright yellow background fits the playful mood established by the tone of this poem. The sing songy rhyming quality of this piece flows very well and emulates the type of rhyming young children are so fond of in their stories. The writer showed extreme creativity and a sense of cleverness in the ability to adapt the poem into a format that would appeal to both adult readers and young listeners alike. My favorite line is "when pointing your peek-a-boo eyes at me". This line conveys the childish innocence and joy, a young child exudes when playing a game of peek-a-boo. Their eyes twinkle with merriment at the prospect of hiding, and wait with bated breath for someone to find them their eyes eager, as large as saucers. Excellent alliteration is apparent in this piece, and precise word choice conjures up clear mental images for the reader. The only change I would make with this poem is to change the word wondering to wonder so it makes better grammatical sense. Overall a well written, articulate piece of poetry!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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First of all I love the photography chosen to accompany this piece, so adorable! Secondly, I feel your choice of a bright yellow background fits the playful mood established by the tone of this poem. The sing songy rhyming quality of this piece flows very well and emulates the type of rhyming young children are so fond of in their stories. The writer showed extreme creativity and a sense of cleverness in the ability to adapt the poem into a format that would appeal to both adult readers and young listeners alike. My favorite line is "when pointing your peek-a-boo eyes at me". This line conveys the childish innocence and joy, a young child exudes when playing a game of peek-a-boo. Their eyes twinkle with merriment at the prospect of hiding, and wait with bated breath for someone to find them their eyes eager, as large as saucers. Excellent alliteration is apparent in this piece, and precise word choice conjures up clear mental images for the reader. The only change I would make with this poem is to change the word wondering to wonder so it makes better grammatical sense. Overall a well written, articulate piece of poetry!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, rainbowsofhappiness for your thoughtful and thorough reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
Oh, to see through a child's eyes that winter is still a wonderland. Well, maybe if all boo and no peek. You know why he has to look at you with those peek-a-boo eyes? With all those rays of love coming his way, it's that or wear sunglasses.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Oh, to see through a child's eyes that winter is still a wonderland. Well, maybe if all boo and no peek. You know why he has to look at you with those peek-a-boo eyes? With all those rays of love coming his way, it's that or wear sunglasses.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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ravenblack, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I especially love the phrase "pointing your peek-a-boo eyes at me." I agree that it is such a joy to keep re-experiencing the world through the eyes of children, and it would be so much fun to know what they think when they look at us. Love, Jeanie
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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I especially love the phrase "pointing your peek-a-boo eyes at me." I agree that it is such a joy to keep re-experiencing the world through the eyes of children, and it would be so much fun to know what they think when they look at us. Love, Jeanie
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Jeanie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL Brooke! fantastic poem there, I love the jaunty rhyme and so right for Sawyers wonderful game of peek-a-boo behind his colourful toy. The whole presentation is lovely and bright. Where would we be without our grandchildren, Brooke? xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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LOL Brooke! fantastic poem there, I love the jaunty rhyme and so right for Sawyers wonderful game of peek-a-boo behind his colourful toy. The whole presentation is lovely and bright. Where would we be without our grandchildren, Brooke? xsx Sandra
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Sandra, thank you :-) I don't even want to think about that question. Brooke
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The best thing about being a grandparent, is, we can really take time to enjoy them. :)
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Brooke,
Lovely thought inspiring your poem about Sawyer's mischievous smile. Children do see things differently. Love the mischief shining from those eyes though.
Patrick
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Hi Brooke,
Lovely thought inspiring your poem about Sawyer's mischievous smile. Children do see things differently. Love the mischief shining from those eyes though.
Patrick
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Patrick, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from angelface2
I love this Brooke. I always have to giggle or laugh right out loud at Sawyer's antics. today was a giggle. Thanks for that. Lovely rhythm. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I love this Brooke. I always have to giggle or laugh right out loud at Sawyer's antics. today was a giggle. Thanks for that. Lovely rhythm. Miss Sally
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Miss Sally :-) Brooke
Comment from boxergirl
I am sure Sawyer provides many whimsical moments for you. Nice alliteration of madness/ merriment,wondering/what/when, pointing, peek.
Nice ABAB rhyme scheme also. Thanks for sharing! 8-)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I am sure Sawyer provides many whimsical moments for you. Nice alliteration of madness/ merriment,wondering/what/when, pointing, peek.
Nice ABAB rhyme scheme also. Thanks for sharing! 8-)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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boxergirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Joy Graham
I love the picture, message, and sunny yellow background color :) This is an interesting form of poetry that I can't say I have seen before. I like the enjambment a lot. (even though some folks would say it's bleeding from one line to the other to make two sentences) I feel the need to pause for the shorter lines even though there isn't punctuation there other than the two periods at the end of each stanza. I am feeling my way around with punctuation in my poetry lately, though I'd prefer to use no punctuation at all.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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I love the picture, message, and sunny yellow background color :) This is an interesting form of poetry that I can't say I have seen before. I like the enjambment a lot. (even though some folks would say it's bleeding from one line to the other to make two sentences) I feel the need to pause for the shorter lines even though there isn't punctuation there other than the two periods at the end of each stanza. I am feeling my way around with punctuation in my poetry lately, though I'd prefer to use no punctuation at all.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Joy, thank you so much for your encouragement and for your generous sixth star :-) I don't know why I never much care about the punctuation in poetry since I'm such a stickler for it in prose... Brooke :-)
Comment from darla1977
Colorful and cute, the picture, and your words!!! Your love for Sawyer is so apparant in your work! That alone makes it beautiful! So sweet! It makes me think back to the peek-a-boo days with my 2 boys! My, how time flies! This is precious!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Colorful and cute, the picture, and your words!!! Your love for Sawyer is so apparant in your work! That alone makes it beautiful! So sweet! It makes me think back to the peek-a-boo days with my 2 boys! My, how time flies! This is precious!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Darla, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
It's always fun to try to switch places with children and attempt to view the world as they do. I really like the phrase "madness of merriment" which suggests how animated a child's world can be. And "peek-a=boo" eyes gives us a wonderful image of a young child who loves to cover his eyes briefly when looking at you. A fun poem to read, Brooke.
Rod
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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It's always fun to try to switch places with children and attempt to view the world as they do. I really like the phrase "madness of merriment" which suggests how animated a child's world can be. And "peek-a=boo" eyes gives us a wonderful image of a young child who loves to cover his eyes briefly when looking at you. A fun poem to read, Brooke.
Rod
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
