A Madness of Merriment
a bit of whimsy154 total reviews
Comment from Cajungirl
It is so beautiful that you have such a loving inspiration for your poem. It is wonderful to see things through the eyes of the innocence of a child. I enjoyed the poem. Sawyer is growing so quickly.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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It is so beautiful that you have such a loving inspiration for your poem. It is wonderful to see things through the eyes of the innocence of a child. I enjoyed the poem. Sawyer is growing so quickly.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Cajungirl, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Glasstruth
Nice peek-a-boo picture. Sort of reminds me of some Dylan lyrics, "if you could wear my shoes then you'd see..." All we can do is imagine what we were like at that age. Very nice pondering. Les
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Nice peek-a-boo picture. Sort of reminds me of some Dylan lyrics, "if you could wear my shoes then you'd see..." All we can do is imagine what we were like at that age. Very nice pondering. Les
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Les, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Rondeno
The older I get, the more I'm convinced that you can't beat simplicity. This poem could hardly be simpler in either structure or content - yet it works beautifully.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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The older I get, the more I'm convinced that you can't beat simplicity. This poem could hardly be simpler in either structure or content - yet it works beautifully.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Michael, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
A delightful change from rhyme with the wonderful alliteration. I love the use of "pointing eyes" for looking. Makes it sound like a weapon, but in a cute way. Yes, good question. What DO little kids see/think/wonder when they look at their parents and grandparents, always there, but so BIG. :)
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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A delightful change from rhyme with the wonderful alliteration. I love the use of "pointing eyes" for looking. Makes it sound like a weapon, but in a cute way. Yes, good question. What DO little kids see/think/wonder when they look at their parents and grandparents, always there, but so BIG. :)
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thanks so very much, Phyllis :-) Brooke
Comment from krys123
A very mysterious question to ask on whether or not what does he sees as he peekaboo staring at you. I like your cleverness in this poem Brooke. And as I looked at your profile on the right I noticed the start to come along very well and is detailed features. I haven't seen the parents but I'm sure that he start and looked more and more like one of them or both. Thank you for the reading and posting and sharing of your work for others. May you have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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A very mysterious question to ask on whether or not what does he sees as he peekaboo staring at you. I like your cleverness in this poem Brooke. And as I looked at your profile on the right I noticed the start to come along very well and is detailed features. I haven't seen the parents but I'm sure that he start and looked more and more like one of them or both. Thank you for the reading and posting and sharing of your work for others. May you have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Alex, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are so sincerely welcome Brooke.
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You are so welcome.
Comment from Donya Quijote
Aren't such games fun to play with little ones? Even birds like to play peek-a-boo. You do capture the whimsy of such play in your poem. Brings back memories. Your whitney is fine as always, but there is a place where I trip up when I read aloud, at the word wondering. Now I'm wondering if wonder would might be better. But then whitney's are subject to syllable counts, aren't they? Anyway, I guess I'm no help at all. It just sounds a little awkward to me is all. Regardless, I do like this nostalgic poem and most certainly approve...
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Aren't such games fun to play with little ones? Even birds like to play peek-a-boo. You do capture the whimsy of such play in your poem. Brings back memories. Your whitney is fine as always, but there is a place where I trip up when I read aloud, at the word wondering. Now I'm wondering if wonder would might be better. But then whitney's are subject to syllable counts, aren't they? Anyway, I guess I'm no help at all. It just sounds a little awkward to me is all. Regardless, I do like this nostalgic poem and most certainly approve...
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Donya, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from gazzagodbod
love when they hide behind their hands and think you cant see them beautiful poem fabulously written thanks my friend xxgazzagodbodxx
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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love when they hide behind their hands and think you cant see them beautiful poem fabulously written thanks my friend xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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gazza, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from billscott
Adorable. I can envision the activity you portray so well.
This would be quite fun all around.
Am jealous...you get to see it and then write.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Adorable. I can envision the activity you portray so well.
This would be quite fun all around.
Am jealous...you get to see it and then write.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Bina1
"A madness of merriment...." what a great line! You can't help but letting your thoughts go wild, thinking what they are thinking! A delight to read..........and to see!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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"A madness of merriment...." what a great line! You can't help but letting your thoughts go wild, thinking what they are thinking! A delight to read..........and to see!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Bina, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with madness/merriment...world/when...pointing/peek. Good rhythm and flow as two lines equal ten syllables.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with madness/merriment...world/when...pointing/peek. Good rhythm and flow as two lines equal ten syllables.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke
