Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, kiwisteveh, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the doubts that fly around waiting for capitulation. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This poem with its words, picture, background coloring and layout of words, perfectly describe a seagull. The dropping word in stanza gave the feeling of the birds swooping down. I was confused about the last line. Does that convey that it is fish describing the gull?

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thank you.

You are not alone being confused by the last line. The clue is in the title - the gulls represent gnawing doubts which can eat a man alive....

Steve

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

What a great title. Doubt does prey upon us -in and out as reinforced by the poem's format. It sneaks up on us in stanza one, then swoops and takes away our confidence in a merciless road kill.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thank you.

Yes, it is a very destructiveemotion.

Steve

Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the picture. I love the poem. Sea gulls are very aggressive when fighting over food. Some of them will even grab food out of human hands. Hope the entrails in the poem belong to a fish. Great work.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thank you.

The gulls represent doubts destructive enough to eat a man alive....

Steve

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

A little creepy but still... a very good free verse poem for the contest. Great alliteration. Good luck to you in the contest.
~Teresa~

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thanks, Teresa.

Steve

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

Nice poetic construction with the lines of your verse floating down to the sea. The lack of punctuation is good as it frees the reader to follow the lines more freely. Don

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thanks, Don.

Steve

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Terrific prologue for a bone-chilling short story. In fact, if the mood covers my soul I may ask your permission to use this.

Artwork is terrific with this offering - the ending was terrific.

AT=/

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thanks, AT

I'd be fascinated to see what you planned to follow this up with....

Steve

reply by Acquired Taste on 06-Mar-2014

Well, am thinking a short story, a specter standing at the water's edge looking at the birds feasting on his entrails. Let the specter lead us through how he/she ended up as refuse. Not sure - will play for a bit - will email if I write anything. AT=/

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

Steve,

Wow, great presentation with this format, and what a imaginative surprise ending!! Yikes! "Squabbling over my entrails" ... that's pretty creepy! :)

Terrific artwork to accompany your write! Best wishes for the contest, Steve! This is a winner!

Connie

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thanks, Connie.

Steve

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

kiwisteveh, this Free Verse Poetry Contest entry is a free form filled with vivid mental imagery of a scavenger scene that is realistic and stunning. Well done. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thanks, GracieAnn

Steve

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I love the hyphenate of ghost-grey
good consonance in beaks bayonet unblinking
and alliteration in dark descends
those final lines are going to give me nightmares tonight! Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2014

Thanks, Brooke.

Free verse is not my usual cup of tea, as you know - thought I would branch out a bit and this disturbing thing floated to the surface...

Steve