I've Seen Those Days
quatrains in abab rhyme165 total reviews
Comment from Lovewritingstuff
I cannot say I don't prefer
those times of sun to storming,
but when those stormy days occur
I know they'll soon be warming.
Indeed we need the storms to better appreciate the sunny days.
Really liked this poem, how it flows and the message conveyed.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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I cannot say I don't prefer
those times of sun to storming,
but when those stormy days occur
I know they'll soon be warming.
Indeed we need the storms to better appreciate the sunny days.
Really liked this poem, how it flows and the message conveyed.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Lovewritingstuff, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
First of all you have nailed the strong and perfect rhymes necessary for this abab contest. Then you have added your usual balanced stanzas - here matching the raging storms against the more peaceful calms of the sea. And then you ping us with the simple idea that emerges from that contrast.
You have set the bar high for the contest - good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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First of all you have nailed the strong and perfect rhymes necessary for this abab contest. Then you have added your usual balanced stanzas - here matching the raging storms against the more peaceful calms of the sea. And then you ping us with the simple idea that emerges from that contrast.
You have set the bar high for the contest - good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thanks so very much, Steve :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
This is a beauty poem with the trimmings and coloring. It is tops. And the art work is beautiful. Reading alone without
discerning, I know the style;I know the signature. It is a contest story and the name I would not tell. But if I put the initial, it would surely ring a bell. Congratulations, B. Dom.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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This is a beauty poem with the trimmings and coloring. It is tops. And the art work is beautiful. Reading alone without
discerning, I know the style;I know the signature. It is a contest story and the name I would not tell. But if I put the initial, it would surely ring a bell. Congratulations, B. Dom.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Dom. It is in a site contest, and they're not blind :-) Brooke
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I knew it from the beginning. The style as I was reading it without the name significantly told me, the author had an initial beginning with B. And I was right. You know, it is just hearing a voice from a closed room and I recognized the voice.
Comment from honeytree
I loved both the art work and words very much.
The weather can certainly change on earth as we all know.
I guess nature has her way of expressing herself.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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I loved both the art work and words very much.
The weather can certainly change on earth as we all know.
I guess nature has her way of expressing herself.
Honey tree
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Annie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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I liked what you wrote very much Brooke.
Annie
Comment from Sanku
Calm after the storm, day after each night,and happiness after sorrow-this is the inevitable rule of nature.from each destruction,something is created and each death leads to a rebirth. you have beautifully used the sea to portray that truth. sea has many moods ,jovial,playful, angry, tempestuous and calm too.enjoyed your poem very much.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Calm after the storm, day after each night,and happiness after sorrow-this is the inevitable rule of nature.from each destruction,something is created and each death leads to a rebirth. you have beautifully used the sea to portray that truth. sea has many moods ,jovial,playful, angry, tempestuous and calm too.enjoyed your poem very much.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Sanku, thank you so much for your graciousness and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from royowen
A well written poem in quatrain style with abab rhyme scheme! The work flows with expression, describing the passing of one season to another! It looks like the writer to spring. Beautifully presented work with your usual attention to detail, rhyme and rhythm consistent and tight! Blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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A well written poem in quatrain style with abab rhyme scheme! The work flows with expression, describing the passing of one season to another! It looks like the writer to spring. Beautifully presented work with your usual attention to detail, rhyme and rhythm consistent and tight! Blessings Roy.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Roy, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Just Pete
A really great entry for this contest. The ocean is a good subject and you captured its moods brilliantly. Perhaps an extended metaphor? I see a parallel with those good and bad days and the hope that tomorrow will be a better day. Excellent rhyming. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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A really great entry for this contest. The ocean is a good subject and you captured its moods brilliantly. Perhaps an extended metaphor? I see a parallel with those good and bad days and the hope that tomorrow will be a better day. Excellent rhyming. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thank you, Pete, for your insightful reading of this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from tfawcus
This is a fluent re-creation of that favourite poetic metaphor for life. There is always the calm after the storm but it is hard to imagine it sometimes when in the middle of a Force 9 gale!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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This is a fluent re-creation of that favourite poetic metaphor for life. There is always the calm after the storm but it is hard to imagine it sometimes when in the middle of a Force 9 gale!
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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tfawcus, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from djsaxon
Impeccably crafted iamb that embodies the acceptance of power on a literal and metaphorical level but one which ultimately delivers a message of hope. Very cool - DJ
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Impeccably crafted iamb that embodies the acceptance of power on a literal and metaphorical level but one which ultimately delivers a message of hope. Very cool - DJ
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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dj, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Irish Rain
Wonderful ABAB entry, like the content, and the comparing the storms of life to the ocean storms, cute picture, blessings tonight!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Wonderful ABAB entry, like the content, and the comparing the storms of life to the ocean storms, cute picture, blessings tonight!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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justjo, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
