Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Brooke, you've outdone yourself once again writing of life's hardships that differs from each person. Like the wave rushing and crashing on shore, each has its uniqueness.
Then as the storms subside (as do life's pressures) the sun begins to shine on us all.

Nicely done... John

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014

John, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Terrie DeGolier

Excellent

We all see the storms and show endure them and see the sun before we know it. Love the way you used nature to show the human emotions and we ride the waves and the water washes away the pain. Terrie

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014

Terrie, thank you so very much :-) Brooke

Comment from ragamuffin

Excellent

Great description here and life's difficulties well stated. A lovely piece that many can identify well with and one which also offers hope and is uplifting too. Very nice!

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014

ragamuffin, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Maltese Falcon

Excellent

what a wonderful picture you have found. I really like your poem. its well written and fits perfectly with the picture. well done

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014

Maltese Falcon, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Gorgeous artwork of this fairy that has seen all, the stormy seas and the warming sunshine.A lovely, well flowing ABAB poem Brooke, with great rhyming, as always.Good luck in the contest.

valda

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014

valda, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Rondeno

Exceptional

Meticulous (and delicious!) rhyming, and - as always - a piece of wholesome wisdom for the reader to savor. You write of Nature as brilliantly as you depict our human foibles. Wonderful, Brooke.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014

Michael, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

Your extended metaphor of the sands on the shores of sorrow is subtly, but consistently produced throughout your lovely poem to express an accepting view of what is expected from life. You know storms will occur and wash away the sands, but are equally sure that there'll always be sunny skies to balance the equation of existence. Good meter, perfect rhyme scheme, terrific philosophical message for life.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014

mfowler, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with raged/waged...sorrow/borrow. Good alliteration with shores/sorrow...blessings/borrow...raging/receded...sun/shone...sun/storming. Good rhythm and flow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014

Righteous Riter, thank you so much :-) Brooke

Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas

Excellent

It is very smooth, very beautiful and your poetic signature flow takes the reader on a beautiful ride.
---as if the end were nearing. [In this line, end was nearing
?]

Keep writing, best regards

K

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014

Kashif, thank you for your thoughtful feedback. It is were nearing because it is subjunctive mood, like when you say - I would buy you a car if I were rich. Brooke

Comment from RuralFrights

Excellent

A nice, smooth read with "perfect" rhyme and meter. Adherence to ABAB format. The ocean is a tell-all concerning human affairs. She has a personality of her own but strangely is a reference to just about any human concern

Love your writing style, by the way....the cadence

 Comment Written 24-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014

RuralFrights, thank you so very much :-) Brooke