I've Seen Those Days
quatrains in abab rhyme165 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
Lovely lyrical poem about the changing facets of the sea. You have made good use of descriptive language and your rhymes were very good. It had a smooth flow and was a most enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Lovely lyrical poem about the changing facets of the sea. You have made good use of descriptive language and your rhymes were very good. It had a smooth flow and was a most enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Faye,thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from ravenblack
What is light without dark, serenity without storms? Much is made of the calm before a storm, but it is the calm that comes after that is much more poignant.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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What is light without dark, serenity without storms? Much is made of the calm before a storm, but it is the calm that comes after that is much more poignant.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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ravenblack, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gladness
Beautifully done, a pleasure to read. Yes, thank God those storms come for a season, but must fade away and allow the sun to return. Good analogy of life.
Anita
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Beautifully done, a pleasure to read. Yes, thank God those storms come for a season, but must fade away and allow the sun to return. Good analogy of life.
Anita
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Anita, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dave Russell
Well, with all respect to the other contestants, I cannot imagine another piece topping this. Brooke, when I read your poems the words are like sprinkles of sugar. So pleasing and appreciated, but it is the cumulative effect that becomes the memory of a fine chocolate. The rest sadly seem like just a lick or two from a half melted Hersheys Bar.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Well, with all respect to the other contestants, I cannot imagine another piece topping this. Brooke, when I read your poems the words are like sprinkles of sugar. So pleasing and appreciated, but it is the cumulative effect that becomes the memory of a fine chocolate. The rest sadly seem like just a lick or two from a half melted Hersheys Bar.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Dave, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Petriesan
good luck with the contest
you find the coolest pictures
I Like both the storms ( So long as they are not too strong) and the clear days.
life, generally, is pretty good if we can just let it be so. . .nice poem
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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good luck with the contest
you find the coolest pictures
I Like both the storms ( So long as they are not too strong) and the clear days.
life, generally, is pretty good if we can just let it be so. . .nice poem
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Petriesan, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from barleygirl
One of my faves of all your poems that I've read. The rhyme & rhythm are perfect, the message is multi-faceted & metaphorical, yet straightforward & clear. I love the way this line is stated with a bit of hesitation: "I cannot say I don't prefer those times of sun to storming . . . " followed by your strong, optimistic & delightful ending. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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One of my faves of all your poems that I've read. The rhyme & rhythm are perfect, the message is multi-faceted & metaphorical, yet straightforward & clear. I love the way this line is stated with a bit of hesitation: "I cannot say I don't prefer those times of sun to storming . . . " followed by your strong, optimistic & delightful ending. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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barleygirl, thank you so much for your gracious comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
Comment from judiverse
Six stars for the lift you've given me. I've read some depressing things this morning, and am glad to read your prediction "but when those stormy days occur/I know they'll soon be warming. A lovely thought amidst the gloom. Excellent ABAB form. You begin with describing how the sea of life sometimes rages, but the raging waves do recede in time. Best wishes in the ABAB poetry contest. judi
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Six stars for the lift you've given me. I've read some depressing things this morning, and am glad to read your prediction "but when those stormy days occur/I know they'll soon be warming. A lovely thought amidst the gloom. Excellent ABAB form. You begin with describing how the sea of life sometimes rages, but the raging waves do recede in time. Best wishes in the ABAB poetry contest. judi
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Judi, thank you. I often want to buy a few gallons of bubbles to blow at some of the writers on this site just to snap them out of the misery. There are days when you want to slit your wrists after reading all the dismal stuff. LOL
I appreciate your generous sixth star. Brooke
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You're welcome. I know, some days there are so many gloomy stories and poems. Maybe it's the weather. judi
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I remember once a couple of years ago there was one of those "sad poem" contests going at the same time some other people just decided to be miserable too, and I mentioned to a friend that if I had been considering joining the site on a day like this I would have run away. LOL
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Misery feeds on misery, indeed. I remember one time I attemded a workshop about writing, and the facilitator read someone's story about a dog dying. Everyone in the group, I believe, had had a dog that died, and we were sitting there sniffling and feeling sad through the rest of the program. judi
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that's such a funny coincidence - when I was teaching writing they brought in a "consultant/expert" to go over how to respond to themes. She showed us a sample paper where the grader read a paper about a dead pet dog and spent 90% of her comments empathizing with the kid who wrote the paper peppered with writing mistakes. Then she gave him a C with hardly any mention of the mistakes. I told her if I were the kid or the kid's parents, I'd be mystified by the grade :-)
Comment from C. Dow
Very nice poem,about the life of the seas,{life} how at times it can be raging, taking from us; and calm with blessings. that
we know will come again and can enjoy. Nice rhyming,and word usage,very,nice work.
C. Dow
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Very nice poem,about the life of the seas,{life} how at times it can be raging, taking from us; and calm with blessings. that
we know will come again and can enjoy. Nice rhyming,and word usage,very,nice work.
C. Dow
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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C. Dow, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from padumachitta
I cannot say I don't prefer
those times of sun to storming,
Hello. Well, I like a stormy sea to get my blood up. But, then those days of sun and sadn are pretty good too!
I loved the pciture, it helped make the poem magical.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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I cannot say I don't prefer
those times of sun to storming,
Hello. Well, I like a stormy sea to get my blood up. But, then those days of sun and sadn are pretty good too!
I loved the pciture, it helped make the poem magical.
padumachitta
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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padumachitta, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Connie C
I look at this lovely poem of yours, Brooke, as conveying the message of optimism. When the going gets rough, there will inevitably be better times ahead. I love how you use the sea as a metaphor here. I love the ocean and find it to be such an inspiration when it comes to writing.
My best to you.
Connie
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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I look at this lovely poem of yours, Brooke, as conveying the message of optimism. When the going gets rough, there will inevitably be better times ahead. I love how you use the sea as a metaphor here. I love the ocean and find it to be such an inspiration when it comes to writing.
My best to you.
Connie
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Connie, thank you so much for your gracious comments and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
