I've Seen Those Days
quatrains in abab rhyme165 total reviews
Comment from Janie King
This is an awesome truth and so perfectly stated. It must be awesome to be a poet and see things the special way a poet sees them, a definite gift from God. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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This is an awesome truth and so perfectly stated. It must be awesome to be a poet and see things the special way a poet sees them, a definite gift from God. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Janie, thank you so much for your generous and thoughtful response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Emeka13
Hi Brooke,
A very nice comparative work. I had to look at the name again to make sure it is you - picture has changed from who we have all become familiar with. My best was the last. I love the double negative in the first line. The last stanza wraps up the poem by saying what you prefer but also acknowledging the inevitability of thorns to get to the rose. As usual the rhymes are flawless. Well presented. Emeka
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Hi Brooke,
A very nice comparative work. I had to look at the name again to make sure it is you - picture has changed from who we have all become familiar with. My best was the last. I love the double negative in the first line. The last stanza wraps up the poem by saying what you prefer but also acknowledging the inevitability of thorns to get to the rose. As usual the rhymes are flawless. Well presented. Emeka
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Emeka, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from crookedtoes
So do you live down by the sea, where wind and waves are roaring? Where ocean meets the sandy beach and things are never boring. There seems to be a lot of sounds, where seagulls often fly. And surfers ride upon the waves, where ocean meets the sky. I liked how your poem flowed!!! Dean
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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So do you live down by the sea, where wind and waves are roaring? Where ocean meets the sandy beach and things are never boring. There seems to be a lot of sounds, where seagulls often fly. And surfers ride upon the waves, where ocean meets the sky. I liked how your poem flowed!!! Dean
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Dean, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
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You're welcome!! Dean
Comment from trimple
I love the delicacy of this poem, and the clever way you describe the changing weather and our seas. The tone that of a finely crafted bell.
Good luck in the contest Brooke. A fine contender for sure.
kindest regards
tracey trimple :)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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I love the delicacy of this poem, and the clever way you describe the changing weather and our seas. The tone that of a finely crafted bell.
Good luck in the contest Brooke. A fine contender for sure.
kindest regards
tracey trimple :)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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tracey, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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:)
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Lovely entry into the ABAB contest. Beautiful artwork chosen to join your poem. Good and unforced rhyme used. Good luck in the contest.
Kind regards
Sarah
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Lovely entry into the ABAB contest. Beautiful artwork chosen to join your poem. Good and unforced rhyme used. Good luck in the contest.
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Sarah, thank you so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from billscott
I loved the rhyming scheme you employed here. I don't get deep into the mechanics of poetry (maybe I should) but I often hear a beat or music in my head when I read really good poetry.
When I read this poem, I heard music!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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I loved the rhyming scheme you employed here. I don't get deep into the mechanics of poetry (maybe I should) but I often hear a beat or music in my head when I read really good poetry.
When I read this poem, I heard music!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Bill, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
you allow your reader to see and feel the fury of winter, raging storms and the sun blessed days that give you the warmth
your rhyme works well and flows
great alliteration in
seen, sea, shoes, sorrow
shore, sand, sounding
sun, shone
sun, stormy, storm, soon
great use of "S" sounding words
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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good luck in the contest
you allow your reader to see and feel the fury of winter, raging storms and the sun blessed days that give you the warmth
your rhyme works well and flows
great alliteration in
seen, sea, shoes, sorrow
shore, sand, sounding
sun, shone
sun, stormy, storm, soon
great use of "S" sounding words
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2014
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Smoothiecool, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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most welcome...SC
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a particularly apt and fitting piece of writing from the author in this post. Climate change is well and truly in full swing. Freak weather means that the polar regions ate thawing out. Australia is burning. America is suffering from even more severe winters and the UK is flooding more frequently than it should be. Things are looking bad.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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This is a particularly apt and fitting piece of writing from the author in this post. Climate change is well and truly in full swing. Freak weather means that the polar regions ate thawing out. Australia is burning. America is suffering from even more severe winters and the UK is flooding more frequently than it should be. Things are looking bad.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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Tomes, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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My pleasure
Comment from Pili Pubul
You express so well in powerful metaphor the reality of life challenges and the courage to endure them until better times come. Magnificent style
powerful imagery and a lesson to be learn. Thank you. Excellent poem to remember. Pili
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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You express so well in powerful metaphor the reality of life challenges and the courage to endure them until better times come. Magnificent style
powerful imagery and a lesson to be learn. Thank you. Excellent poem to remember. Pili
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Pili, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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You are very. Welcome. Pili
Comment from Ben Colder
I think we did it again. Excellent write about the sea. Third stanza, powerful. Yes very much so. Well done Brooke. Best to you in the contest. Shalom my friend.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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I think we did it again. Excellent write about the sea. Third stanza, powerful. Yes very much so. Well done Brooke. Best to you in the contest. Shalom my friend.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Ben, thank you so much :-) Brooke
