I've Seen Those Days
quatrains in abab rhyme165 total reviews
Comment from onkughosh19
A beautiful poem for entry to the contest.You are hopeful that "when those stormy days occur/I know they'll soon be warming"
The picture is charming and apt .The title is good.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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A beautiful poem for entry to the contest.You are hopeful that "when those stormy days occur/I know they'll soon be warming"
The picture is charming and apt .The title is good.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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onkughosh, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from skye
I love the raging sea, and the quiet beauty of a calm day.
You captured both, and how the ocean soothes or riles the spirit.
Excellent. Living in a high desert state, I miss the water.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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I love the raging sea, and the quiet beauty of a calm day.
You captured both, and how the ocean soothes or riles the spirit.
Excellent. Living in a high desert state, I miss the water.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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skye, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from rouskin
Perfect quatrains with excellent artwork and positive message:
but when those stormy days occur I know they'll soon be warming.
This poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.Enjoy my 6****** review and good wishes too
Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Perfect quatrains with excellent artwork and positive message:
but when those stormy days occur I know they'll soon be warming.
This poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review.Enjoy my 6****** review and good wishes too
Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Rouskin, thank you so very much for this gracious and generous response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Deejharrington
Beautifully expressed and metaphor for the ups and downs of life. I love watching from the shoreline. It can be fascinating and calming. Good luck in the contest.
deb
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Beautifully expressed and metaphor for the ups and downs of life. I love watching from the shoreline. It can be fascinating and calming. Good luck in the contest.
deb
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Deb, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from nancyjam
Beautiful ABAB rhyming.
A lovely metaphor for life's ups and downs
as well as descriptive images of the stormy sea
and the sea when peaceful.
You chose lovely artwork to enhance your
presentation. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Beautiful ABAB rhyming.
A lovely metaphor for life's ups and downs
as well as descriptive images of the stormy sea
and the sea when peaceful.
You chose lovely artwork to enhance your
presentation. Nancy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Nancy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from 3boysrule
Excellent job Brooke. I really enjoyed this poem. The flow is amazing, just like the ocean. I can't say I'm not a bit envious sometimes :-) You are such an amazing poet. Truly have a gift.
Dee
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Excellent job Brooke. I really enjoyed this poem. The flow is amazing, just like the ocean. I can't say I'm not a bit envious sometimes :-) You are such an amazing poet. Truly have a gift.
Dee
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Dee, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Cedar
This is a wonderful entry for the contest. I really like the lesson of life that you write about. We must take the good with the bad and move on, not every day of our lives are going to be bright and sunny. I wish you good luck. Take care. Bill
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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This is a wonderful entry for the contest. I really like the lesson of life that you write about. We must take the good with the bad and move on, not every day of our lives are going to be bright and sunny. I wish you good luck. Take care. Bill
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Bill, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from TAB_that's me
Absolutely beautiful Brooke. It brings peace and serenity to me. Your ABAB rhyme is great. Good luck in the contest.
~ Teresa~
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Absolutely beautiful Brooke. It brings peace and serenity to me. Your ABAB rhyme is great. Good luck in the contest.
~ Teresa~
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Teresa, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I can't argue the logic of this argument, the sunshine follows the rain, and the sooner the better. Strong rhyme and good ballad form, and meter combine to make this a strong entry, Brooke. Good luck. Kenny
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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I can't argue the logic of this argument, the sunshine follows the rain, and the sooner the better. Strong rhyme and good ballad form, and meter combine to make this a strong entry, Brooke. Good luck. Kenny
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Kenny, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Marillion
Let's hope so, Brooke! :-)
You and I are of a mind today to use the sea for our conceit, and I love what you've done with it here. The beauty and power of it make it the perfect extended metaphor for almost any emotion, and you've captured the yin and yang of it all, and done so with your trademark ability to make it seem so simple to write these, yet the execution is never as easy as it looks. I have two minor suggestions, just for the sake of earning my keep. Actually, make that one. I was going to suggest that "sounding" be replaced with "anger", but now I see that you've got more or less a compound rhyme there, and I like it.
The other is very minor (and probably unnecessary):
as sun shone down its loving gaze (as sunshine cast its loving gaze)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Let's hope so, Brooke! :-)
You and I are of a mind today to use the sea for our conceit, and I love what you've done with it here. The beauty and power of it make it the perfect extended metaphor for almost any emotion, and you've captured the yin and yang of it all, and done so with your trademark ability to make it seem so simple to write these, yet the execution is never as easy as it looks. I have two minor suggestions, just for the sake of earning my keep. Actually, make that one. I was going to suggest that "sounding" be replaced with "anger", but now I see that you've got more or less a compound rhyme there, and I like it.
The other is very minor (and probably unnecessary):
as sun shone down its loving gaze (as sunshine cast its loving gaze)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Dave, thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback. I'll take another look at that line :-) Brooke
