I've Seen Those Days
quatrains in abab rhyme165 total reviews
Comment from RodG
I enjoyed these quatrains about the various moods of the sea. Not being a sea dweller, I am not sure which mood I would prefer.
I love the personification of the sea in lines 1-2 where in his "rage" he "drowns" the "shore in sorrow." Nice alliteration here, too.
Wonderful audio imagery in stanza 2 with the pounding and the roar.
Your last stanza also focuses more on the cycle of life these changes represent and reminds us that what was "stormy" will soon be better.
Nicely done. Rod
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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I enjoyed these quatrains about the various moods of the sea. Not being a sea dweller, I am not sure which mood I would prefer.
I love the personification of the sea in lines 1-2 where in his "rage" he "drowns" the "shore in sorrow." Nice alliteration here, too.
Wonderful audio imagery in stanza 2 with the pounding and the roar.
Your last stanza also focuses more on the cycle of life these changes represent and reminds us that what was "stormy" will soon be better.
Nicely done. Rod
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from lakeport
I've seen those days, indeed each day has its own adventure,
that's very heartfelt expressed poem Brooke, very nice rhyme
I enjoyed reading it, Good luck at the contest.God bless you,Hugs!Lakeport,
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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I've seen those days, indeed each day has its own adventure,
that's very heartfelt expressed poem Brooke, very nice rhyme
I enjoyed reading it, Good luck at the contest.God bless you,Hugs!Lakeport,
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Lakeport, for your kind contest wishes and thoughtful review :-) Brooke
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your welcome.Hugs!Lakeport.
Comment from Just2Write
A most superb message in this uplifting poem. The sea is an excellent metaphor for life and the strife that sometimes occurs, and often without a known reason. The underlying message is that things will change.
As always, your meter is spot on.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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A most superb message in this uplifting poem. The sea is an excellent metaphor for life and the strife that sometimes occurs, and often without a known reason. The underlying message is that things will change.
As always, your meter is spot on.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Rose, thank you so very much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hi Pearly One,
This is such a lovely, encouraging poem written with passion and understanding of life's changeful events. It rhymes well and flows smoothly I liked how you so aptly explored and contrasted the sea's stormy ways with its calm and tranquil ones. Thanks for sharing. Hugs, Aggie
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Hi Pearly One,
This is such a lovely, encouraging poem written with passion and understanding of life's changeful events. It rhymes well and flows smoothly I liked how you so aptly explored and contrasted the sea's stormy ways with its calm and tranquil ones. Thanks for sharing. Hugs, Aggie
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Aggie, thanks so much for your gracious and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Gungalo
But I have also known the days
when raging waves receded
as sun shone down its loving gaze
and life was unimpeded.
Beautiful quatrains Brooke. They seem to say exactly what you would like them to and are alliterated ... raging waves receded. Sigh.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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But I have also known the days
when raging waves receded
as sun shone down its loving gaze
and life was unimpeded.
Beautiful quatrains Brooke. They seem to say exactly what you would like them to and are alliterated ... raging waves receded. Sigh.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Gungalo, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Smiling.
Comment from donaldcolson
Beautiful poem and lovely metaphor for ups and downs in life. I have just one question. The double negative in the 1st line of the last stanza comes as a sudden incongruity. What do you think? don
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Beautiful poem and lovely metaphor for ups and downs in life. I have just one question. The double negative in the 1st line of the last stanza comes as a sudden incongruity. What do you think? don
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Don, thank you for your thoughtful feedback. I'll look at that line again :-) Brooke
Comment from beautyseeker
Lovely quatrain here you make everything flow so beautifully in good abab rhyme, " and heard the sounding of the roar as if the end were nearing" most related too! Last stanza superb!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Lovely quatrain here you make everything flow so beautifully in good abab rhyme, " and heard the sounding of the roar as if the end were nearing" most related too! Last stanza superb!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Beautyseeker, thank you so much :-) Brooke
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Your welcome. Oh, i wrote you last week with advice on my "story in a poem" would you mind reviewing? Oh, wait, am allowed to ask? Well if so, would love an opinion!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I think all of this has to do with faith. God never promised us a perfect life. He did promise us that he would help us through the difficult times. He has always been there when I needed him. I enjoyed reading your poem and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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I think all of this has to do with faith. God never promised us a perfect life. He did promise us that he would help us through the difficult times. He has always been there when I needed him. I enjoyed reading your poem and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Barbara :-) Brooke
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Four good stanzas in steady 8/8/8/8 throughout the poem. It is a very poetic way of saying we all have times in our lives when life is 'stormy' - but then it helps us appreciate the good times which follow. Some nice alliteration - blessings/borrow, raging/recedes. Well composed, enjoyable poem. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Four good stanzas in steady 8/8/8/8 throughout the poem. It is a very poetic way of saying we all have times in our lives when life is 'stormy' - but then it helps us appreciate the good times which follow. Some nice alliteration - blessings/borrow, raging/recedes. Well composed, enjoyable poem. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Dorothy, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from DonandVicki
Nice comparison of good to bad, we all have good days and not so good but as long as we are here and can experience the blessings of God, it's all good. Nice write Brooke. Don and Vicki
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Nice comparison of good to bad, we all have good days and not so good but as long as we are here and can experience the blessings of God, it's all good. Nice write Brooke. Don and Vicki
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2014
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Don and Vicki, thank you so much :-) Brooke
