I Feared
an English sonnet201 total reviews
Comment from write hand blue
A flowing poem about a person's journey in life. Young children, a grand child perhaps in the picture. Their laughter puts back the sparkle. 'With every smile you flashed I found new hope.'
A lovely unforced poem. :) mel.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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A flowing poem about a person's journey in life. Young children, a grand child perhaps in the picture. Their laughter puts back the sparkle. 'With every smile you flashed I found new hope.'
A lovely unforced poem. :) mel.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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mel, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from curious novice
Brooke: I cannot know, of course, whether or not this piece is autobiographical, an open confession, so to speak; but either way I was touched by the opening stanza. That you, a sort of hero of mine, had fears of happiness passing you by or expiring, fears of dreams retiring, sat heavy on my heart. I found it unimaginable, unacceptable, nearly unbearable even.
That lightning bugs had faded, and dandelion seeds (which I happen to know are one of your favorites) had traveled off too far, evoked a sense of hopelessness and brought a tear.
How is it possible, I wondered, that one so gifted and seemingly so filled with the spirit of life herself could suffer these oh so common doubts and fears too. I waxed existential even: What kind of world must this be if a loss of spirit can extend even to our heroes?
But then I reached your "re"-turning point. I saw your stars reignited, your gloom chased away, and I was gladdened. New hopes flashed in every smile of the new generation, your new generation, the new carrier of the your life spirit.
And in that moment, my own sense of order was restored; my own angst halted at the gate.
You took me to the brink with this one. But oh: What a ride!
Best of luck in the contest and thanks, as always, for holding up your candle and lighting the way for others.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Brooke: I cannot know, of course, whether or not this piece is autobiographical, an open confession, so to speak; but either way I was touched by the opening stanza. That you, a sort of hero of mine, had fears of happiness passing you by or expiring, fears of dreams retiring, sat heavy on my heart. I found it unimaginable, unacceptable, nearly unbearable even.
That lightning bugs had faded, and dandelion seeds (which I happen to know are one of your favorites) had traveled off too far, evoked a sense of hopelessness and brought a tear.
How is it possible, I wondered, that one so gifted and seemingly so filled with the spirit of life herself could suffer these oh so common doubts and fears too. I waxed existential even: What kind of world must this be if a loss of spirit can extend even to our heroes?
But then I reached your "re"-turning point. I saw your stars reignited, your gloom chased away, and I was gladdened. New hopes flashed in every smile of the new generation, your new generation, the new carrier of the your life spirit.
And in that moment, my own sense of order was restored; my own angst halted at the gate.
You took me to the brink with this one. But oh: What a ride!
Best of luck in the contest and thanks, as always, for holding up your candle and lighting the way for others.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Curious Novice, for this thoughtful response to my sonnet :-) Brooke
Comment from kiwisteveh
Interesting combination of childhood fancies, lightning bugs and dandelions, with the usually serious sonnet form and a serious message.
Your form is perfect and the language has a light touch, yet there is a sense if recovery from deep sadness.
Steve
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Interesting combination of childhood fancies, lightning bugs and dandelions, with the usually serious sonnet form and a serious message.
Your form is perfect and the language has a light touch, yet there is a sense if recovery from deep sadness.
Steve
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Steve, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Beautiful poem Brooke. I love the magical images you use: the dandelions, stars and lightning bugs. Good rhyme used and a nice triplet of pictures of Sawyer.
Kind regards
sarah
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Beautiful poem Brooke. I love the magical images you use: the dandelions, stars and lightning bugs. Good rhyme used and a nice triplet of pictures of Sawyer.
Kind regards
sarah
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Sarah, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from mauial
Very nicely written. The renewal of joy a grand child can bring to grandparents comes through loud and clear with this sonnet. Good rhyme and flow to this. Don't spoil him rotten now :)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Very nicely written. The renewal of joy a grand child can bring to grandparents comes through loud and clear with this sonnet. Good rhyme and flow to this. Don't spoil him rotten now :)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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mauial, thank you so much :-) I think it would be hard for me to spoil him any more after his mother has had at him. LOL :-) Brooke
Comment from tony bronk
Hello my ghostly friend. It's been a long while. I've come to appreciate love poems very much, and the more emotional the better. Your Sonnet followed all the "do's" properly, and I enjoyed the up and down ride that you took me on during your Sonnet. Your sonnet was very visual, and emotional. I enjoyed the time reading.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Hello my ghostly friend. It's been a long while. I've come to appreciate love poems very much, and the more emotional the better. Your Sonnet followed all the "do's" properly, and I enjoyed the up and down ride that you took me on during your Sonnet. Your sonnet was very visual, and emotional. I enjoyed the time reading.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Tony, wow, is that a name from the past! Yes, a long while. I hope you are well, my long-lost friend. Thanks so much for your generous response to this sonnet :-) Brooke
Comment from Selina Stambi
Ah .. the dandelions are back!
I was working in the kitchen a wee while back and found myself thinking of your delightful Sawyer inspirations, Brooke!
Another lovely one.
Love,
xxx
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Ah .. the dandelions are back!
I was working in the kitchen a wee while back and found myself thinking of your delightful Sawyer inspirations, Brooke!
Another lovely one.
Love,
xxx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Sonali, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from pipersfancy
Beautifully written sonnet, Brooke, celebrating the gift that children bring into our lives; the restoring of faith in life, and the ability to see things anew through their eyes.
Blessings, and good luck with this very lovely entry in the contest!
Christina
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Beautifully written sonnet, Brooke, celebrating the gift that children bring into our lives; the restoring of faith in life, and the ability to see things anew through their eyes.
Blessings, and good luck with this very lovely entry in the contest!
Christina
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Christina, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Winslow
Dear Brooke,
We see ourselves anew reflected by the light that shines in our grand kids eyes. It is good that the dandelions fell where you can see them bloom. Dreams again rekindled, not for you but for your offspring. Is that why when loss occurs it is so terribly painful?
My wife really enjoyed your poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Dear Brooke,
We see ourselves anew reflected by the light that shines in our grand kids eyes. It is good that the dandelions fell where you can see them bloom. Dreams again rekindled, not for you but for your offspring. Is that why when loss occurs it is so terribly painful?
My wife really enjoyed your poem.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Winslow, thank you so very much for your thoughtful and generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Robin Gilmor
I so agree that all those wonderful moments that fade away can return with just one smile from such an adorable face. Their total innocence is shared so unselfishly with everyone. You can not help but be happy and feel real love.
Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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I so agree that all those wonderful moments that fade away can return with just one smile from such an adorable face. Their total innocence is shared so unselfishly with everyone. You can not help but be happy and feel real love.
Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 20-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2014
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Thank you so very much, Robin, for your graciousness and generous sixth star :-) Brooke
